mashimaromadness posted a comment on Saturday 11th June 2005 11:29am

Awesome! I'm so excited to read on. I just can't wait. Guess that means it's another chapter time. Sadly... it's the last one of this story for now. So sad!

XanDutch posted a comment on Saturday 11th June 2005 9:05am

Hi Tim,

Just wanted to say I've really enjoyed this chapter again. It continues the excellent and interesting characterization and plot from the first two. (Like there was any doubt of that!) I thought the scene where Tonks first sees Harry was rather funny. The only thing I regret is that she didn't let Harry know the Weasleys disagreed with portkey as well; for some reason it's important to me that he knows. But they were still funny in their illusions again. :)

XanDutch

Susieq posted a comment on Saturday 11th June 2005 9:02am

Omg it is sooooooooo good, and I cannot wait until the next update. I also liked how you use the same 'falling speech' in here as you did in "Aftermath." Keep up the great work.

Hedjsen posted a comment on Saturday 11th June 2005 7:56am

Wow, well that was one hell of a chapter. I can't say I am surprised or dissapointed that Harry is becoming, oh shall we say a little devious? I also really like how you are developing Pansy, it is amazing how much you have developed her character while keeping it plausible. Well that is about all I have to say, good luck.

Wretchedmongrel posted a comment on Saturday 11th June 2005 2:27am

I liked this chapter a lot more than chap 2. There were a few errors in the previous chapter that squicked me. Pansy Parkinson at the Ritz & Embassy reminded me a lot of the character 'Sarah' in SpookyMulder's HP-Fanfic, The Girl in the Tower. Which is a great story if you've never read it.

One thing I might take a look at if I were you, is your smile adjectives; smiling hugely and smiling widely seem foreign & odd to me. It may just be geographical slang, but to me those adjectives look a bit out of place.

I know that you've already written the story, but speaking as a critic... I think you may want to consider more drastic changes to Harry's persona in future fics you write. All of your Harrys tend to be take charge, relatively cool under fire,cluess w/girls, powerful, asskicking, selfless heros. A mutation of that may be cool in the next new fic you write. A little less hero, and a little more adolescent. Just a thought.

Looking forward to more,
the Mongrel.

Eowyn23 posted a comment on Saturday 11th June 2005 1:39am

Wow.. :o
Great story!
I want more!

Patches posted a comment on Saturday 11th June 2005 12:37am

Very good. I like the way you have brought Harry along with all the training, the introduction of Tonks' as a freind from his past. It is interesting that Dumbledore is a little less focused. A little less sure of what to do in this story. I really like the way Harry is growing in abilities and experience. It is going to be a little tense when they do return to school. Ginny is going to be devastated.

Pansy is really developing. Of course she has never been unsure of what she wants out of Harry or the whole situation. I like the way she is developing honest responses to Harry and all the situations they are involved.

I like the introduction of martial arts as a necessary skill for Harry to learn. He certainly did a good job of protecting Pansy!

I look forward to the next chapters. I am also looking forward to TMW.

Thank you, Patches

Payne posted a comment on Friday 10th June 2005 10:23pm

Please do NOT stop writing this story.. This has to be one of the best storys I have read. And I read about 4 hours aday, more on the weekends..By reading this, you could think that its real, that its part of JK's story..Thank you for taking the time to write and post it so others can read your great works of art..

mashimaromadness posted a comment on Friday 10th June 2005 9:51pm

I totally love this. I'm glad you updated it so I could find it and read it, because it's awesome! I think I should search through all your stories and read them. However, now is not the time. I'm thinking one more chapter for now. But it's hard! I can't back out, it's too good!!

Bill posted a comment on Friday 10th June 2005 9:43pm

An outstanding addition. This chapter was an excellent mix of shifting perspectives and provided a well of detail that you don't see in many other peices of fanfiction. It is updates like this recent one that show your grasp of creative writing and extensive imagination. I can only praise and look forward to your next update.

Sarah posted a comment on Friday 10th June 2005 4:06pm

Another great chapter. I think the training that Harry is getting is great especially as it seems to be addressing everything he might need to know. I also like how he has gained enormous confidence regarding his magic and the war and is gradually increasing the intimacy of his relationship with Pansy.
Look forward to whatever you update next.

Hannah posted a comment on Friday 10th June 2005 11:55am

You are a genius and a fantastic writer. I never thought I could like a Harry/Pansy pairing as much as I like this.

I can't wait till Ginny and Co find out about everything (I hope that Ginny isn't going to become a DE though in a jealous attempt to exact some sort of revenge-I've read that before).

Can't wait for the next chapter (and the next chapter of TMW).

Fash posted a comment on Friday 10th June 2005 11:18am

I really like this chapter. the Tonks meet Harry scene was great, and I love the end. I can ´t wait for chapter 4
Good job!
Congrats.

Mirengard posted a comment on Friday 10th June 2005 10:40am

As always, this chapter was wonderful. I've been following all of your stories quite closely, and i have to say that this one phenominal so far. Keep up the good work!

Pamr6 posted a comment on Friday 10th June 2005 10:09am

One word - WOW!

Okay, second word - Whew!

Alvin posted a comment on Friday 10th June 2005 8:02am

holy shit. I've always been a lazy git so I have never really reviewed any of the stories I had read but this time, I definitely could not resist.
One of the best things in your stories that I find lacking in many others, is the balace between putting in a huge amount of details and with the flow of the story. There is not an obscene amount of details (not that there are little) such that it blocks the flow of the story as oppose to helping it along.
I am glad that you have focused on Harry and Pansy's relationship in the beginning instead of their training for the fight with Voldemort because I feel that by starting the story this way (with romance), it really draws the reader in and keeps them captivated with an insane amound ot WAFF (Warm and Fuzzy Feelings) and I love WAFF (so call me a sissy...XD)
To be quite honest, I started reading your stories when I came acrosee TMW and when I saw a Harry/Pansy story, I was like...pffffff.. there is no way there can be a good ship. No way at all but boy was I ever glad to be wrong. I am SUPREMLY, GREATLY, RIDICOUSLY, BOUNCING-OFF-THE-WALLS happy that you have finished with this story and will be posting a chapter every week... I simply cant wait till I have read the next chapter and I have to say that what interests me most is the reactions when the get back to Hogwarts but I am sure I wont be disappointed... anyways... Keep up the work... just wanted you to know u (and I am sure I can speak for everyone who reads your stories) that you are very much appreciated by all of us. Sorry for the uber long review but this chapter is more than enough to kick my lazy ass in gear. Take care!!

~ alvin

Jeff posted a comment on Friday 10th June 2005 6:34am

Excellent work. I really like the way you have developed Pansy from the annoying harpie that she is in the books into a true person who more than deserves what she has in Harry. Keep up the great work and I look forward to the next installment.

Ham posted a comment on Friday 10th June 2005 5:09am

Fantastic as usual Tim. I just can't wait for the rest.

atalante posted a comment on Friday 10th June 2005 4:47am

it's always good to read more of your fic.
this part is probably my favorite chapter.
we really see harry change (for the best) here.
thanks for sharing your fics with us.

Maxennce posted a comment on Friday 10th June 2005 3:53am

Great story. Loved what you did with the chapter and how deviously cold and ruthless Harry is at the moment. I can't wait to see what sort of a person is going to emerge from the training at the end of the summer, how being trained by slytherins, being trained as to win is going to affect him, and what Ginny is going to think about it. SHould be very very interesting. And I betcha bottom dollar that the moment Ginny Weasley latches her eyes onto the new and improved Boy who lived, shes going to regret the day she said that she was dating Dean Thomas. Pansy wont though. She's very happy where she is, very happy. Keep up the great work, glad to see that Harry is finally getting something to make him happy, instead of someone else who 'thinks' that they've got his best interests in mind
Cheers
Max