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Arklytte posted a comment on Friday 11th April 2014 2:29am

Just finished reading this story for at least the 10th time, and I just keep falling more and more in love with it every time I read it. Your characterization is superb...Ginny and Pansy are both fully developed characters by the end and are very believable. Your plots and sub-plots are interesting and keep me invested in the story, and overall I really love what you've done with the HP universe.

All that being said, I do have two small complaints. complaint/criticism and one error that I just feel compelled to point out. The criticism is this: The half of the story, especially the last two chapters, felt *incredibly* rushed. For the first half of the story it seems like you took plenty of time to develop the characters and highlight their interactions, but for the last part it was just like *hurry-hurry-hurry-and-get-to-the-end*. Now I dont know if you were just tired of writing it or your muse decided to take a bit of a break, but the rushed feeling is pretty much the only major criticism I have of the otherwise thoroughly excellent story.

The error, and I dont know if it's already been pointed out to you before...I searched the comments but couldn't find any other's a small thing, but every time I read it, it totally throws me out of my suspension of disbelief and it's really jarring. The end battle, where you have the two Apache attack choppers carrying the Black Watch, who then fast rope down...unfortunately, Apache's dont carry troops. They are dedicated attack choppers and AFA I (and Wikipedia, and the ArmyTech website, and others) know, there is no room on them for troops. There aren't even skids for them to stand on and be shuttled into the fight. I know that, over the course of a couple hundred thousand words of story it's just a little thing, but it still bugs the crap out of me. :) I know that it's not something that you can really go back and change, but going forward, it's one of those 'do the research' things that help keep your readers immersed. :)

Again, overall, I love this story and it's the only Harry/Pansy story I've ever found that I truly enjoyed (a few others have come close, but they're either Harem!Harry or Harry with Pansy and at least one other girl). Keep doing what you do...I love your work.


reiko17 posted a comment on Tuesday 1st April 2014 1:24pm

Honestly, this chapter was really disappointing. The best part of the Harry/Pansy pairing is that Pansy isn't particularly pretty, or particularly nice, or particularly likeable, but Harry still manages to fall for her anyway, despite her many imperfections, mainly because she GROWS into someone he can like and respect. And yet, within the first chapter she's already this beautiful, charming, likeable character and is basically the very epitome of a Mary-Sue. If I didn't know any better I'd think Pansy was Fleur, minus the accent and with a different name. That, or an OC who happens to share her name. So yes, this was very disappointing. I don't mean to flame, honestly, but the overwhelming OOCness just really bothered me. What makes it even more aggravating is that the writing isn't bad and it's pretty grammatically sound. It's the characters that ruin it. I mean, c'mon, Pansy actually offered Harry up to Voldemort to save her own neck. That speaks volumes of how highly she thinks of him, and yet she's singing his praises to the Dursleys without even having spoken to him. And while I suppose I can accept her dislike of Draco, you didn't make me believe her reasons for simpering over him all those years. Your explanation as to why she wears glamours to hide her appearance and acts like a vapid moron when she isn't are also pretty implausible. I hope that if you choose to write Harry/Pansy again you'll forego turning her into what I feel must be your personal dream girl and put in the effort to make her in-character. There needs to be more Harry/Pansy fic in the fandom, but honestly, there's no point if either Harry or Pansy are so OOC that they're unrecognizable.

Good luck with all your future writing endeavors.

DarkWingsDarkWords48 posted a comment on Tuesday 21st January 2014 3:16am

Alright, I've long been a Harry/Hermione nut (for years now), but recently the pairing has become stale, and I've been reaching out and giving other pairings a try, I've seen one or two decent Harry/Pansy stories (most are not so great), but this is the first truly great one I've seen.

I loved Pansy and her family and their characterizations. They were perfect slytherins, and that's rare to see in stories.

I loved how you handled Rona and Hermione - I can see why they'd want to try getting together, even in the books, but I think in the long run it would never work out between them, for many of the reasons you listed. I only wish you had gone into more detail in the story! At the beginning you went to different scenes with different characters, examining things happening all at the same time in different locations, but later on it seemed a bit like you were pushing to get the story finished, and thus skipped out on some scenes I would have liked to see (one I really wanted to see is what happened after Ginny's outburst at the party when she kissed Pansy, and Pansy went after her).

But anyway, I also have to congratulate you. You made me not just like, but love, a character I pretty much universally despise - Ginny. I don't know what it was, but your characterization of her once she starts thinking about her life after hearing Harry has a girlfriend, was the best, and most likeable conversation of her I've seen. If only JKR had done that (In the books Ginny always seemed like a 2D side character to me, and I was shocked when JKR got her together with Harry - I figured she was going with Luna or Hermione, rather than Ginny, who had been barely mentioned or seen until halfway through book 5)! I think I would have liked Ginny in the books had JKR bothered to develop her - especially if she had done so earlier on, after the Chamber incident, and turned her into someone like you have. Anyway, you've intrigued me enough with your Ginny that I'm going to give your Harry/Ginny stories a try.

Thanks for the great read, and I do hope that some time in the future you eventually come back to this universe, be it via a sequal, or just vignettes (or even "lost scenes" - like that one I mentioned before, wink wink :D).

computer5450 posted a comment on Monday 16th September 2013 2:50am

very good and thank you for this story.

noylj posted a comment on Saturday 14th September 2013 3:27am

>Well, he knew the Weasleys did but apart from that, the good side just seemed to use him.

You mean the Weasleys that know he is abused and still allow him to return to be abused? The ones who would rather kiss Dumbledore's ass than really take care of Harry? The ones who know that Harry's life is shit and still are jealous 'cause he has money and fame? The ones who take 1000 Galleons from him but don't help him escape the Dursleys? Those Weasleys?

In canon, everyone but Harry can go to hell as far as I'm concerned.

danterevan posted a comment on Monday 19th August 2013 2:16pm

great amazing cant beleive that im actually liking pansy but i do have a thing for the bad girls so i will live with it well done

Sibling Creature posted a comment on Friday 2nd August 2013 6:35am

When you were first writing and publishing this story, I steered clear of it, because I let the idea of Harry/Pansy turn me off... Then the story fell off my radar... since then my tastes have expanded a bit, and when FFA came back to my attention recently I decided to read some of the fics I had avoided previously.

Having just read it through for what i have no doubt will only be the first time I have to say I thoroughly enjoyed it. :-)

Thanks for sharing.

- SC

gtgrouch posted a comment on Saturday 25th May 2013 12:35am

Wow - all of this and Remus for Minister, too?

What's next!?!?

gtgrouch posted a comment on Friday 24th May 2013 9:46pm

Aha - the 'rebuilding Harry' phase. Next is either training for Harry, manipulating the situation, or both. Still a good story. I appreciate how you portray conversations and people's interaction.

Looking forward to more!

gtgrouch posted a comment on Friday 24th May 2013 6:59pm

Interesting . . . Voldemort has to go, because he is bad for business.

Nice original twist on Pansy Parkinson with the glamour spells!

I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

bearblue posted a comment on Tuesday 21st May 2013 7:12am

I enjoyed this very much. Thank you for sharing. :)

sanbeegoldiewhitey posted a comment on Saturday 2nd February 2013 7:30am

Great first date. And Harry is Bruce Lee.

sanbeegoldiewhitey posted a comment on Saturday 2nd February 2013 6:20am

Amazing. You made me like Pansy.

sanbeegoldiewhitey posted a comment on Saturday 2nd February 2013 5:37am

Brilliant ploy. Pansy was hiding her looks.

Nytefyre posted a comment on Monday 21st January 2013 6:08am

I read this a while back and didn't get a chance to post how much I liked this story. Well written and plotted, and utilizing a diverse cast in a unique way that flowed organically from point to point as it built.

Bravo, and thanks for posting.

AragornII posted a comment on Monday 31st December 2012 5:28pm

Have been a big fan of your other HP stories...but balked at the Pansy pairing. Finally saw a glowing reference on someone's 10 Best HP Stories. Congratulations on your wonderful transmutation of her.

Especially love your use of Ginny in this story. Very well done, indeed!

AragornII posted a comment on Friday 28th December 2012 1:56am

What a great chapter! One of the best in HP fanfiction. Particularly like the whole Pansy/Ginny/Daphne interactions.


JShade posted a comment on Tuesday 6th November 2012 5:54am

By far the most intense grey Harry I've ever read, and easily the best Harry/Pansy pairing, althugh I'm not too well-read on that pairing. Literally could not stop reading and it was worth all the work I now have to catch up on. Seriousy, I know its an older story but its still awesome, if a tad unrealistic at some points.

Araytigre posted a comment on Friday 26th October 2012 6:36am

Soul Bonded, little did they realize, that when they shared Nott's magic (and Riddle's only re-enforced it) they bound their souls together. So, rather than they were a "Couple", now they are a "Trio", and somehow I don't think that it will be a problem for any of them. This was a brilliant story, very engaging, lots of action, with a dash of romance thrown in on the side. Harry and Pansy's love for each other may be complete, but they have found a place in their hearts for Ginny, and I can see a possibility for letting Hermione and maybe even Daphne in too, who knows, it could happen under the right circumstances. Thank You. TTFN

wileycoyote posted a comment on Monday 24th September 2012 5:35am

Awesome! Just really awesome.