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Anonymous Reviewer posted a comment on Thursday 22nd September 2005 12:16am

I normally don't read m/f pairings but I found this while looking for rare pairings and was hooked. This is one of the few well written hetero stories I've read. I loved the fact that you used Pansy rather than the generic pairings.The concept, the plot just everything was great it was an enjoying read. I have one pet peeve, I don't know where you are going to go with the little stories after this but I hope you don't go the route of adding Ginny to the equation, since it's kind of hinted. I have nothing against her but it seems that most rare pairings seem to add Ginny to the relationship. I think the relationship you built between Harry and Pansy is great enough to stand on its own. I hope you might do another Harry/Pansy story because this one has me hooked on this pairing. Once again great job.

jaques posted a comment on Thursday 22nd September 2005 12:13am

great ending. it's worth the w8. can't w8 for those short stories to come out and complete this fic.

Ken posted a comment on Thursday 22nd September 2005 12:00am

This has been one of the best stories I have read. I am looking foward to more stories set in this universe you have started.

Balint Szoke posted a comment on Wednesday 21st September 2005 11:38pm

Any word on an epilogue?

bachgwion posted a comment on Wednesday 21st September 2005 11:27pm

Brilliant, that was great!

KatelynEmma posted a comment on Wednesday 21st September 2005 10:45pm

Hello i love your story so much please write another one and then tell me when you have i love pansy and harry together

Love Katelyn

Terry posted a comment on Wednesday 21st September 2005 10:09pm

That was a great story. and i will be looking forward to more stories from this universe. :)

Philipe posted a comment on Wednesday 21st September 2005 9:18pm

Congrats on your first finished story.. I live it..And would write more, but it is 2 am here in Rio and i've got to get to work at 7 am, so good night to you all, and i'll review later.. Congrats Tim


Kaitlin posted a comment on Wednesday 21st September 2005 8:44pm

Absolutly and totally awesome story!!!! Cant wait for Book 2 or the Epilouge, whatever!

Amanda posted a comment on Wednesday 21st September 2005 8:32pm

This is the greatest story I have ever read. I loved the way you did Harry and Pansy and (may be) adding Ginny into the mix. Thank you for a wonderful story and I hope to see more soon.

Greg posted a comment on Wednesday 21st September 2005 8:29pm

Great ending!!! I do hope you'll write some one-shots to fill us in on more of what happens afterwards.
This is a great story!!!!

Josh posted a comment on Wednesday 21st September 2005 8:05pm

i've never hated a scrollbar more than i have today when i read your last installment of WKGQ.

i mean, i hate scrollbars all the time when i'm reading any of your stories, but knowing that this was the last chapter to my personal favorite story of all time...i grew sadder and sadder (paradoxically while getting more excited by the conclusion) while the scroll bar inched it way downwards signalling the end of a literary epic.

thank you for this story. thanks to your friend for issuing a challenge. thanks to your sense of authorship when you found you couldn't contain this story in ten pages.

thanks for making hp characters that i found utterly enthralling and believable. you balanced ingenuity and believability - and i think this story might have the first characterization of a redeemed "bastard Ron" that i found enjoyable and likable.

i can't believe you took such a challenging concept, made it readable, reasonable, and addicting, and then completed the larger plotline in a not-hurried, manageable, and totally endearing way.

as you had neville say, “Thank you, thank you, thank you!”

Hannah posted a comment on Wednesday 21st September 2005 6:58pm

wonderful story, like all of them. i cant wait to see what will happen next! hurry up and update This Means War!

Wytil posted a comment on Wednesday 21st September 2005 6:53pm

Great story! I was surprised when you wound it all up with one gigantic chapter. I bet Kokopelli and the other beta staff were going nuts getting this thing to help you wrap it all up all in one chapter.
As you said, there are lots of story bits left hanging. Lots of leftovers. Now you can steal any ideas on trios from UDDERPD. I think some have acknowledged him as the master of the fluffy-trio endings. Either way he covers it pretty well.

Elle posted a comment on Wednesday 21st September 2005 6:42pm

This story was absolutely wonderful. I loved your ideas - they were fresh, different, and well executed. Please do continue writing in this "universe" as I'd love to see what kind of mischief Harry, Pansy, and Ginny can get up to without an insane idiot to interrupt them!

Meredith posted a comment on Wednesday 21st September 2005 6:40pm

The only problem was that I discovered you had updated 10 minutes before Lost started up again. Damn you. It was absolutely wonderful, one of the best stories I have read in a while and the best Pansy Harry story I have read. I love the universe and look forward to reading more about it.

Scott posted a comment on Wednesday 21st September 2005 5:49pm

This is simply the best final chapter to one of the best stories in this fandom. I am sad to see it end and am greatly pleased that there will be some shorter stories in this universe in the future. Thank you so much for writing this story.

anonymous5 posted a comment on Wednesday 21st September 2005 5:14pm

bravo. Never too over-the-top to be silly, and a number of complex but well-written subplot tied together as with the brushstrokes of a master.

Emma Merritt posted a comment on Wednesday 21st September 2005 5:06pm

This has been a fantastic story to read, to let you know the absolute truth I wasn't going to read it as I didn't think I'd like it, I mean please; Harry Potter the Gryffindor Golden Boy and Pansy Parkenson the Queen of Slytherin, there was no way that a story about the two of them falling in love would be any good. But I've read your other stories and I've loved them 'This Means War' I've printed out so that I have a hard copy just in case.
So I read the first few chapters and you sucked me in, desperately waiting for the next chapter, and now the last one... and what a last chapter, if I wrote all the praises I wanted to this review would end up looking like I swallowed a thesaurus, but what I really want to do is thank you for sharing this astronomical story with all of us readers. And I'm begging you; please don't write a story where Harry Potter loves Snape, any Malfoy or Voldemort as I don't think I could stand liking any of them.

verahsa posted a comment on Wednesday 21st September 2005 5:05pm

Dear Tim (and your beta crew),

First, please write some of those short story epilogues sometime in the future! =)

This was absolutely amazing. Everything came together in a way that I wouldn't have imagined off the top of my head, but made perfect sense in hindsight. Doing so lead us on a merry chase of adventure that easily rivals Rowling's works (if not improves upon, but that's my opinion).

As much effort as you've put into this story, I will make an attempt to make a non-biased review on everything good and everything bad. In doing so, please pardon the length of my response.

First: The Bad.

Pansy. I -love- what you did with her as a character, but it was too much on some levels. She went from being pugnosed to stunningly beautiful. This was a little extreme in the beginning, but became normal over the course of your novella. (more on this, and other points, later)

Ginny. Her abrupt change of opinion regarding Harry, while explained as not-so-abrupt, was still abrupt to the reader. It's hard to fit in such back story and have it play off well. Seeing her in a relationship at the end as H/P/G was a little bit cliche though.

Harry. This was definitely a super power fic. In some places, it was -almost- taken too far. His emotional understanding, again, while not-so-abrupt in explanation, was fairly abrupt to the reader.

Storyline. Some of the changes of point of view were unnecessary, and could have been told from Harry's PoV. There were a couple of, well, "jumps" to the storyline that didn't make sense until later. The only other complaint I have is one of timeline. Seeing things come to a conclusion LONG before the 7th year was expected because you told us so early on, but it's still feels a little "off" to have things occur differently than what canon has pointed to in a general basis.

Subplot. There were places that I felt that the subplot became more important than the overall storyline. This was mostly in chapters 4 and 5.

Second. The Good.

Pansy. Whie her change was abrupt to the reader, you -did- give believable backstory that completely met with canon facts. The fact that you pulled off a Harry/Pansy story with absolute faith to canon astounds me. Everything we knew about her was a facade, and that simple fact made it perfect.

Ginny. Again, the abrupt change was noticed, but you at least gave backstory for it. You also didn't have her immediately "give up her love" for Harry, like so many other fanfics that involve non-Harry/Ginny do. This led credibility to her as a character and as a plot device in and of herself. The ending where it seems that it's going to be H/P/G is also a bonus for emotional reasons on my part. Seeing the three of them together is perfect as I can imagine no one else in canon to match her. It also brings a happy ending that is very appreciated.

Harry. While he -was- very powerful, you kept it within reason, and EVERY point of power was explained and processed. The way you explained it also points to the simple fact that ALL wizards COULD be that powerful with the right inspiration and dedication; well, and the help of the Council of Elves. I also loved that you didn't fall back on the "Harry is so-and-so's Heir from the Founders Era." This is commonly done, and stands so far from canon's statement that "pure-blood mania" is a bunch of shit that I rarely read Harry as an Heir. You avoided that, and still kept it aligned with the story.

Storyline. Your tale of Harry's (and his freinds') rite of passage was masterful. On a spiritual, emotional, and physical level he came to understand his place in the world. You also managed it to beautiful precision in execution. The small "jumps" that you did put in were fully rounded out in later chapters or scenes, respectively. The few PoV changes you used were either from Voldemorts PoV or were at least somewhat necessary to developing and concluding the plot. As far as timeline goes, while it was odd, it felt right in the way you told the story. While canon has painted (with a very undefined brush) a 7th year conclusion, it wasn't decisive, and you made it fit in perfectly. Knowing this, I sincerely hope to see (over time) pieces of what is to come for our hero and heroines. I hop to see that every few weeks (or months, depending on length and how much time you want to spare for it) put up a piece about things as they occur up to what I would consider a final "ending," you know, everything works out; maybe even finish it off with an epilogue that vaguely details the remainder of Harry's life or something.

Subplot. The many intricacies that were beyond the "basic" plot really added depth and flavor to the story. Most of them even had tie ins to the main plot, and that's not always easy to do. You managed it with the aplomb we've come to expect from your writing. These multiple layers of storyline that fit in to the "main" story are really what add believability and entertainment to your writing.

Third. Everything else.

Grammar and other Mechanical Necessities. This is both for you, Tim, and your beta crew. This is, in my opinion, the best of your "longer" stories. (TMW! is a fun piece, but definitely has things that make it a mix between a serious novella and a humor piece.) Speech syntax, spelling, verb useage, everything was spot on. Yes, there were a few mistakes (on the order of about 10 mistakes in all 8 chapters, and I know you've corrected some of them since I last looked), but they were so minor that they didn't detract from the story. Your (and your crews') attention to detail make reading your works a pleasure. So much so that when 8 came out, I started at Chapter 1 so I could experience the whole thing at one time.

And last? What I feel is hoenst praise for a story I absolutely loved.

Overall, this is absolutely the BEST Harry/Pansy fiction on the net. I would rank it in the top 10 of -all- Potter fictions, regardless of pairing. All the things you expect to see from the Potterverse are here. Angst, in manageable levels. Peer pressure. War. Compassion. Magic, explained, but not bemoaned. Re-eductation (and I don't mean classes). Action, adventure, and Everything else. There's nothing that compares to this in regards to believability, and very little that compares for entertainment value and emotional involvement of a reader.

I hope that this review is helpful in your future endeavors. If you have any questions about something I've said, e-mail me, I will respond as clearly as I can.

I want to thank you for writing something that I have thoroughly enjoyed reading, have already saved, and will continue to re-read time and again. Thank you so much for dedicating what must have been hundreds of hours of writing, editing, cleaning up, and otherwise polishing this wonderful piece. Thanks to all of you. I'll have the PDA file for you tomorrow.

To your beta crew: Thank you all for your tireless efforts in helping Tim's imaginative genius appear as flawlessly as it did. Seeing you guys support him (and readers everywhere) by "editing" his works really helps make this something it wouldn't have been. Speaking from experience, the -best- ideas can go flop really hard if there are plot holes, bad grammar, lots of mispelling, canon errors without explanation, or other flaws that are unfortunately commonly found in writers who don't ask for help. As much as I praise Tim for his imagination, I realize that these stories probably wouldn't be near so eloquent or poignant without your efforts; and so I also give the highest accolades to your time and attention to detail. (No offense, Tim. ) Thank you, all of you.


Nicholas Vantrease