James posted a comment on Thursday 9th June 2005 3:40pm

Bravo!!!!! finally, an overworked storyline done the right way. Your approach is logical and factual, the style is smooth and the flow is riveting. You have achieved a balance between exposition and action which few are able to do. I am completely enthralled with your multi-dimensional characters and excellent plot . Definitely more, please? I give extra kudo's for the reaction of the trainers and the people the NEW Harry interacts with. I can hardly wait for the new Harry and Pansy to be revealed to the school. Excellent work.

Meg posted a comment on Thursday 9th June 2005 3:17pm

Tim, this was....man...I totally doubted I'd like this story, but you've sucked me in. Got to the last line and thought to myself "What?! There's no more?! What am I going to READ tonight?!"

Can't wait for ch4. :)

Meg

HermioneGreen posted a comment on Thursday 9th June 2005 3:11pm

Awesome chapter!!! I would like to see(read) the meeting between the Parkinsons and the four goons. That would be a great scene. I look forward to more. Thank you so much for sharing your talent with us lesser mortals.

'Mione

rowin posted a comment on Thursday 9th June 2005 3:04pm

great chapter cant wait to see number 4

Sarah posted a comment on Thursday 9th June 2005 3:00pm

HOO Baby!!! You give good story! This has all the elements - long, involved, funny, interesting. Thanks.

Philipe (Post Scriptum) posted a comment on Thursday 9th June 2005 2:44pm

Hey Tim,
Yep, that ´s a Led Zeppelin concert! Really good, with enought action, but not thye main part of it.. I'm worry about your Ginny caracter, 'cause i can't see that turning out diferent from what happen in your Padma trilogy(witch was very good, but i'd like to see another view of it).. The Fudge case should be intersting to develop, but can't really see him surviving in the and, but who cares..

I like where Harry's mind is going, a little darker then your usual Harry, but i think is better than a "white", shades of grey are much more interesting..

Congrats on very well written chapter.. Can wait to next week for the next update.. See ya.
BTW, how is your eyesight?

red jacobson posted a comment on Thursday 9th June 2005 2:40pm

Damn! Nicely done; and I really am glad to see you starting the posting schedule; I've been anxiously awaiting this one even more than the next chapter of TMW.

More next time

red

dave gerecke posted a comment on Thursday 9th June 2005 2:15pm

Whooooo, what a ride!
Thank you for wrting this. Great start for the day here in Australia.

dave

Brian Hole posted a comment on Thursday 9th June 2005 1:58pm

I could almost agree with the above review, that it seems it's going a bit fast, but we have to remember that Harry and Pansy have been together in a beneficial environment for over a month now. I think it's been plenty of time.

Tim - your scene with the "toughs" was excellent. Exactly how I expected Harry to respond, and I like Malcom's chagrin when he realizes what's going to happen.

I was really pleased when the notice popped up in my email for this, I can't wait until next week!

Tom Ladegard posted a comment on Thursday 9th June 2005 1:46pm

I'm slightly torn here, but it's almost certainly my problem and not your writing. From the outside, I'm worried that the pace might be a little fast in this, but when reading I'm finding the experience a delight. Thanks for the effort.

- Tom

Andrew posted a comment on Wednesday 8th June 2005 4:32pm

WOW! This is a great story... I don`t have anything constructive to say in this review, jus wanted to congratulate you and ask you to continue it...

See ya!

anonymous5 posted a comment on Tuesday 7th June 2005 4:50pm

my apologies - the changing car of last chapter is now painfully clear. Only criticism: an A8 would be far more of a match to a 7-series Bimmer than an A6.

Beautiful, convincing, unique story. Update quickly. Please.

Christopher Estep posted a comment on Tuesday 7th June 2005 4:44pm

This is a surprising Harry pairing, because it doesn't really stretch the characters out of shape. Pansy is more a Typical Slytherin than Draco is, with her rather surprising approach to gathering intel (the reverse-psychology is also very Slytherin). And *yes*, I could actually see James helping a Slytherin (James didn't, and even Snape never claimed that he hated, *all* Slytherins). And Tom is very much against wizard-Muggle business dealings (so the Parkinsons' involvement with Grunnings alone would doom them), and I shudder to think how he *really* feels about the goblins...


*I WANT MORE!*

anonymous5 posted a comment on Tuesday 7th June 2005 3:54pm

mercedes? bentley? what kind of car do they drive? I'm so confused...

other than that slight inconsistency, amazing story!

James Milamber posted a comment on Tuesday 7th June 2005 7:57am

As brilliant as I've come to expect from the great Jeconais. *bows mockingly* Well done, you've turned a very unlikely pairing into a nicely done story - kudos to you.

fopalup posted a comment on Monday 6th June 2005 3:12pm

I really didn't think you could pull off an enjoyable Harry/Pansy story but you are definately surprising me. I am really liking this story and am looking forward to a new chapter.

jb238 posted a comment on Sunday 5th June 2005 3:02pm

"Dobby threw both his hands forward, and Snape flew through the air, impacting hard on the stone wall, before collapsing into unconsciousness.": Go Dobby!

DB7: classy. If the need for a convertible comes up, think of a black Jag XKR...

Poor Ginny, she'll really regret the comment about dating Dean.

I look forward to muggle-magic technology (weapons or useful toys). Fred and George would certainly want to help if asked, Arthur probably too. If the twins divert their ingenuity from jokes to warfare, this could get really interesting.

Really great story, thanks for your efforts in writing it. I look forward to the next chapter.

jb238238 posted a comment on Sunday 5th June 2005 12:56pm

"Yeah. So," her lips curved slightly. "Can I keep him?" ;-)

"Grey" fits. Not really evil like Lucius Malfoy nor naïvely good like the Weasleys. No hesitation to use unforgivables on Muggles but also not unnecessarily cruel.

How do you pronounce "Gruoch"?

I liked the car changing. Also that one was a Bentley (shows class). In my opinion the sequence should have been Mercedes S-class first (to fit the big boss image), then BMW during the ride home (better yet a dark-green Daimler Super V8), then a Bentley as the true car when arriving home.

Mr. Parkinson being Vernon's big boss gives a nice sense of perspective. It probably would have been too much of a coincidence however. Especially when he overheard Vernon talking about Harry Potter.

Shouldn't Pansy appear not so beautiful for the time being? She wants Harry to like her for herself and not for her looks. On the other hand he now can judge her by her actions.

Looks like I won't get to sleep early tonight as I have to read the second chapter...

John Creasey posted a comment on Sunday 5th June 2005 11:49am

I enjoy this story very much, and can hardly wait for the rest of it. The self-intrest of
the Parkinsons I find to be quite refreshing. I see how Harry would respond to this approach.
Thanks for your writing, I enjoy ALL of your stories.

John

Alaranth_88 posted a comment on Thursday 2nd June 2005 8:26pm

You're welcome, of course. Thanks for the chapter! It was very good, as always.
*hopes for more soon*