Robert Peeples posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 8:20pm

WONDERFUL! the jelly donut coment made me do a spit take and I had to clean my monitor LoL.


Great story as always and having Sybill as the "mastermind" is such a weird and original take that I find it fasinating.

DaBear

scott2 posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 8:14pm

I can't see this harry being unaware about his picture being taken, perhaps even having a spell up that distorts such things, other then that this chapter rocked and I hope to read more soon :)

PS Can't wait to read the riot act Gabby will give harry if/when she finds out the truth about the crucio she took

Terry Swain posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 8:13pm

That was a great chapter. :)

Manatheron posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 8:12pm

An Excellent chapter, Be certain to give your Beta 's extra praise from your fellow authors who know how hard it is to find a good beta out there.

Loved the duel, expecally the way Gabrelle taunted malfoy by blowing kisses to the crowd. The description of the way harry's bond diverted the curse was especally interesting, as well as the fact the by the time hermoine gets that spell worked out they probably won't want to use it anymore (I wouldn't in their position).

I also can't deny that the quidditch match between Durmstrang and hogwarts made me want to grind my teeth. What the HELL is wrong with Dumbledor? Grrr... makes me want to spit, (American Colloquialism)

Keep up the excellent work, Take all the time you need!

Eponin posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 8:09pm

Another wonderful chapter. :) Somehow, it never matters what pairing you write, Tim, I love all your fics. I can't wait to read the next part.

Only issue I had: There Chasers outplayed us, but they didn’t expect me to get the Snitch first, though." First word of that sentence should have been Their, rather than there. :)

Ginger posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 7:58pm

Almost simultaneously, he drew a dagger (from) a concealed sheath and threw it directly at her.
You missed the from. Wow... great chapter... Are you every going to write non fanfics... If you do let us know I would want to buy it.

hoser41 posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 7:56pm

Great chapter. The staff quidditch match was awesome.

wackey posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 7:52pm

I always love a good bit of Ferret bashing. Now we just need Snape humiliated and crushed like the bug he is.

Sean Dillon posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 7:50pm

I don't like the fruit flavored teas either.

Interesting use of the bond to divert the cruciatus.

nonjon posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 7:33pm

Brilliant. Lovely. You know you're the best and don't need to hear it every time. Though I'd like to think it's still pretty nice to hear. Very enjoyable.

Now I'm going to be a bit of a tosspot here (see my attempts at british colloquialisms), but I got a general feeling from this chapter that I don't often get from you. I know you write fairy tales, but this Harry, and this relationship, are occasionally leaning towards Mary Sue-ish to me. Not completely Harry Sue, but some fence-sitting that the punmaker in me is calling Fairy Sue. This chapter in particular it was sort of small challenge followed by easily overcome and perfect execution. Everything's worked out so well, and gone along to plan. I love the fairy tales, and I love a good super!Harry. I don't even mind that he's good at the typical things. But it's the fact that he's good at everything. I don't particularly want to see him falter or get beat at something. I guess I wouldn't mind him being perfect at the four big things in some fic, but in this one at times it feels like he's perfect at fifty all semi-big things.

Not really a major complaint though because the challenges and obstacles are sort of secondary to the story of Harry, and this quickly developing relationship.

I'm sure I'm overreacting and it's probably just a few bits in this chapter, but it's the first criticism that jumped out at me. I do hold you to a higher standard when it comes to my critical eye because you're the only one writing with the respect, skill, dedication, and style that all of your fics have acquired lately.

I'd probably say this is the best chapter of fanfic I've read in a month. And it was pretty standard fare for this fic.

Thanks for posting.

Vern posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 7:30pm

As usual, you set the standard for outstanding fanfic and surpass it with each new chapter. I really appreciate your wordsmithing skills. Look forward to the next chapter ;)

Finbar posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 7:27pm

Well, I honestly think this is the best chapter you have written bar none. There were subtle elements of Comedy that had me giggling maniacally. Elegant use of Drama and redirective pauses and most of all, the overall suspense. That Trelawney is the mastermind of evil, is so silly, it may as wlel be true. I am curious as to what is happening with Dumbledore. I'd guess the Imperius curse, after all, Dumbledore WANTS to believe in people, thus if done the right way, he wouldnt want to throw it off. Possible come kind of Compulsion potion or more likely, Dumbledore is just going senile in his old age and is being led around by Snape. Fed the right mixture of truth and manipulation and his fading mind laps it up.
Well done once more Tim. Truely excellent work.

Tanaxanth posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 7:27pm

Lee's reaction when he received the list of players was classic.
Also what will the team be called Potter's Pride?
Keep up the good work.
One question though oh mighty one, how many chapters are expected in this story?

ghanima posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 7:27pm

wow, excellent, I think i love you.

if there's only one chapter left, there are a lot of ends to tie up.

but so far this has been exemplary.
very much worth the wait.

ghani

Rob Shell posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 7:25pm

That was one of your best chapters to date. Slytherin!Harry always puts me in a good mood. Nice foreshadowing about Snape maybe doing something to Albus to make things @ Hogwarts turn out like they have. The Quiddtich descriptions were great as well! All in all one hell of a good read. Thanks again.
~Carpe

jinx66 posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 7:16pm

wasn't expecting that!damn...nuff said

Lon Huey posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 7:06pm

Well, that was very good. Since I have been properly upbraided for not reviewing every time I read a chapter, I will leave this short review. I will return to read this again and again. So for the next ten reads, I am leaving a note now.

Thanks Tim. I do enjoy it so much.

Lon

AfterDark posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 7:05pm

That just kicked ass, I see a bit of fore shadowing with Herm and Ron looking for a way to break the link, I have a feeling they are not going to advise Harry of this...... Dual was great, the Matches where excelent! Worth the wait by a long shot.

untill the next sun set
Afterdark

J User posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 7:00pm

Another great chapter. I'm loving your take on Krum especially: he's so much more fun than the two-dimensional Teutonic thug stereotype that many authors end up casting him into. "Vhy are ve teaching Veela chick to duel? Van spell from her like dhat, ve all go down to pub ant celebrate." Ha.

(I was surprised at first that Gabrielle didn't seem bothered by being called "Veela chick". But I imagine she's more focused on Harry, and anyway, it might even be accurate, since Veela seem to have avian heritage.)

It'll certainly be interesting to see whether Susan's suspicions of Snape being responsible for Dumbledore's condition hold any truth or not. From what we've seen in earlier chapters (especially chapter 8), it looks to me as though it's Dumbledore's own doing; Snape may have encouraged it, but I find myself hoping that's the most he did. (Not because I like Snape at all, though: characters brought down by their own actions are just more interesting than those who are simple puppets.)

The idea of Sybil Trelawney as the competent one of the antagonists is kind of disturbing (not least in what it says about the others...), but should make for good reading. I don't think I've seen it done anywhere else, that's for sure.

Your betas are right. "Another think coming" is, as indeed you've used it in this chapter, part of a larger construction: "if you think <whatever>, then you've got another think coming". It is of course your right as the author to write it however you like, but I'm kind of curious about the logic involved in your Author's Note, where you basically agree that all your betas are right, but that you're writing it the wrong way anyway. Is that just because it's the way you're more familiar with?

OldManrob posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 6:59pm

That was well worth the wait! I'm a big fan of huge chapters with loads of action. This story is progressing even further than I thought it would. I am really looking forward to the next chapter. Any idea of how many more there will be?