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DAUFahnder posted a comment on Friday 8th June 2007 4:30am

Thank You :)

tomanak45 posted a comment on Thursday 7th June 2007 9:34pm

I started reading this story about when you hit ch. 7, and it's is by far one of if not the best story post hogwarts i have ever read. The deatail ,and emotions you put into each character was great, and the thought to make such a story is awe inspiring.
Loved the sotry.

Silo posted a comment on Thursday 7th June 2007 8:08pm

so when is the last part up adn when do we get the uther harry gabby fics like Happily Ever After

Daily Prophet Reporting posted a comment on Wednesday 6th June 2007 1:58am

Tim,

Here I am, taking another leap into the rough waters of a non-H/G fic, but in this case you knew exactly how to greet me. In the first segment I almost felt like I was reading a first-person perspective on The Season (may it rest in peace in the land of long-forgotten fics).

Jesting aside, though, Harry's spectacular injury and the media circus were pretty darn clever ways to start a story. They're the perfect excused to get Harry out of familiar places, giving you control over the setting as the as the action. And if it's one thing I've learned about your stories, it's that literary freedom is something you exploit well.

I definitely enjoyed Hermione and Ron's clever and manipulative efforts to convince Harry to go to France, and I was pleasantly amused to see Dobby show up in this like he did in WKGQ. I'm also intrigued by Gabrielle, especially in her incredibly organized approach to understanding Harry. It almost seems like you're mixing Fleur's attributes with Hermione's attention to detail, which is certainly a combination with a lot of potential.

I also rather appreciated Gabrielle listing Hermione alongside Cho as the major women in Harry's life. But if she's got every clipping from the Daily Prophet, what else is she going to think?

What didn't I like? Well, this is the third novel-length fic of yours that I've read, and in all three your female lead has committed herself to Harry before he even knows she's interested in him. Admittedly, that makes the most sense here, where you've got the freedom of working with a non-human character, but I would have been nice to see a little variation in the routine.

The secret bargaining before Harry even comes into the story is also something you've done before, and in this case I was somewhat put off by how readily Hermione joined in. I appreciated Ron's resistance and can even understand how eventually came to agree, but Hermione never even tried to stand up for Harry. Is she so perspective that she immediately concluded the plan would be in his best interest?

Really, though, those are pretty esoteric complaints. All in all, I think you've set a very interesting stage so far. I look forward to seeing what you do with it.

-KC

Meg posted a comment on Tuesday 5th June 2007 5:59pm

Well, I wanted to wait to review until the chapter sunk in...but it hasn't. :) So, rather than a point-by-point...

I loved that you took care of the match, the announcement, then the Dumbledore/Snape/Draco issues in one fell swoop.

I also loved that the fic came full circle.

Can't say much more other than this was awesome, the "obliteration" was more than I imagined (though wasn't it in Red & Yellow, not OLT? Or did it get edited out of OLT and I just can't remember the original?), and I look forward to the epilogue.

Thanks,

Meg

marcelhm posted a comment on Tuesday 5th June 2007 5:22pm

well I'll read the epilogue but already wanted to thank you for writing another great story for us lowly fans ;). the fact that I loved it should show in the fact that the time now is 3:30 here and this isn't a habit of mine. so thanks and good luck!

hubem posted a comment on Tuesday 5th June 2007 3:50am

Bah. Great chapter. When is the epilogue gonna be out?

warpwizard posted a comment on Monday 4th June 2007 9:00pm

Good chapter, very meaty. I prefer Quidditch as background material too, though it didn't bother me in this fic.

Inziladun posted a comment on Monday 4th June 2007 11:30am

Well I've been reading the fic as you updated and I've really liked it.

You have used a not overdone pairing and you have made it so that its neither immoral (if this term even exist in the fantasy world) nor the easy way, that its saying that veela appear to be 9 until they are 16 when they suddenly grow... (not that I don't enjoy those).

Appart from that, the way that harry became who he is (he found merlin's grave) its quite original (at least I've never read it before that way) and its not
divine intervention... So great that too.

So all in all its been great to read this fic and I'm nearly wanting to tell you not to finish it, but things come to an end and I suppose that this fic is nearly finished. So congratulations for the story, I'd like to see some other story of yours soon but we can only Hope .pun intended...

Ben10 posted a comment on Sunday 3rd June 2007 4:01pm

A Beautiful ending that makes me wish I'd fall in love young, but alas . . . hopefully when college starts next fall my chance will arrive!

Ben

sanghamitra posted a comment on Sunday 3rd June 2007 7:32am

yeah longish, finally over, sappy, WHATS NEXT ??

brad posted a comment on Sunday 3rd June 2007 2:01am

Good ending to the story (although I'm still eager to see the epilogue, of course). Had to laugh a little when Harry used the 'obliverate' - oh, sorry, 'obliterate' - spell. :-)

Although Harry *did* get away with a clear-cut case of manslaughter, didn't he? Draco was captured and couldn't get away. There's no mention of his wand, but it seems clear that he didn't present any danger to Harry. But Harry still exterminates him. Hmmmm.

I wasn't surprised at the discovery that Dumbledore had planted the idea to mate on the eight-year-old Gabrielle - that's one of the drawbacks of reading your Yahoo group, the possibility was discussed ages ago - but I thought the reasoning behind his having done that was pretty flimsy, the case seemed weak. He wasn't suffering from dementia back then ... imperiused the little girl, forced her to mate ... but just decided 'not to follow through'?!?!?!?

Loved Viktor and his 'prettiest chaser', an amusing little thread of humour woven throughout the second half of the chapter.

Thank you for a great story!

Michelle2 posted a comment on Saturday 2nd June 2007 11:45pm

The end of an era. I am just going to go cry now.

Bethany posted a comment on Saturday 2nd June 2007 11:07pm

As always, the story was amazing. I love the fact that you got Viktor and Katie together, I was feeling sorry for her before that. Nice move on having Dumbledore be the one to have Gabrielle Mate with Harry, didn't see that coming at all!
Thank you for sharing your talents with us, your stories are always enjoyable.

Jimbocous posted a comment on Saturday 2nd June 2007 4:54pm

Really spectacular story, especially at the end where DD gets his due. Personally, I think Malfoy got off a little too easy, but hey, if it's good enough for Buffy :) ... As always, thanks for a great read!

Robin Westerly posted a comment on Saturday 2nd June 2007 8:02am

Just Thank you.

Sheepstamper posted a comment on Saturday 2nd June 2007 7:06am

Once again, you have proven that you are an author beyond the norm. You have managed to weave a compelling story, believable (I know that this is fiction ) and brilliant.

I only wish that I had your writing skills(sob)

Looking forward to the epilogue.

kirt30 posted a comment on Saturday 2nd June 2007 5:01am

loved it hope you do a sequal

BlackNight posted a comment on Friday 1st June 2007 11:43pm

I obviously liked the story as I have read it this far, but there are some things that really annoy me.

The first thing is the the abundance of cheesy lines, but as this is a romance fic I don't think I should complain about that... so lets skip it...

There hasn't be any real challenges for their relationship. No third wheels, no secrets from the past that would make them doubt each other, no scandals to test their resolve... Nothing! Reading about two people loving each other, while somewhat interesting, gets pretty boring pretty fast...

Also, the fact that you made Harry super talented, super powerful and very, very rich out of nowhere irks me. Plus his personality was so OOC... Of course, he was years older than Canon!Harry, and so complaining about personally changes is bit stupid, but other points are still valid (even if other authors too it too).

But what annoys me most is that if bad guys do something stupid, they are punished (even overtly), but when Harry (or Gabrielle) does something stupid, he (she) gets applauded... There are many occasions when this has happened. For example:

1. Harry slams the French Divination teacher on the wall and destroys her ring just because the ring was a Dark item. The teacher should have just pressed assault charges and she would have most certainly won, especially after Harry destroyed any evidence of the Dark item. But no, instead we see how the teacher gets nearly sacked and no one berates Harry for his violent ways. Too hypocritical for my tastes.

2. The fact that Harry decides to levitate the Beauxbatons overseas with untested spells and then make a hole into Hogwarts' wards with an untested spell. Both are so stupid things that I fail at putting my thoughts into words... What if students had accidentally dropped the castle into the canal? Now, Harry could have probably intervened, but then he probably couldn't have pored that hole into wards... What if he had failed to create the hole? The plan was so risky that its not even funny, especially when the possible gain was negible.

3. Harry kicks Malfoy and Snape and instead of going to the court (and win almost certainly) they go and whine to Dumbledore (who's quite OOC).

4. The Gabrielle/Draco incident. Draco makes improper (funny thing is that she is already dating a professor) suggestions and touches her shoulder after which she abuses her veela powers and makes Malfoy run into a tree. Malfoy should have just gone into court instead of this stupid duelling thing (in which Harry and Gabrielle cheated). Instead of everyone berating Gabrielle for the stupid thing she did, everyone accuses Draco of attempting to rape Gabrielle. Accordingly your logic, I'm some sort of serial rapist and sexual deviant as I have a habit of tapping people to their shoulder disregard their age or gender...

5. And worst of all, Harry murders Draco in front of 40000 witnesses. It wasn't self defence, it's a clear murder. DEs were already restrained. If Harry doesn't go prison for that it merely shows how corrupt the Ministry is in Harry's favour, which is highly ironic considering that one of this story's points is how they try to make the evil and corrupt Ministry into better one.

Plus the whole Dumbledore thing was stupid. Yes, he's old may have been growing senile and demented, but that doesn't really excuse the stupid plans he made. Demented and senile people wouldn't have remembered the plans the next day, and so that excuse doesn't keep water. And you say that he loved to play the political games too much to really try to defeat Voldemort. That's total bullshit. If he had defeated Voldemort he would have gained so much political capital that he would have become de facto leader of magical Britain, and that would have been an excellent place to play political games. Not to mention the fact that Dumbledore would never harm his students. Oh... And I hope you tell why Dumbledore wanted Harry into Hogwarts in the epilogue.


Now, I hope you answer to this as I would like to hear your side of the story (instead of ignoring or deleting this). Also, I hope that what I wrote doesn't sound a total flame as it wasn't intended as such...

ed king posted a comment on Friday 1st June 2007 9:50pm

Wow! A truely superb "ending" to an amazing story. I had never concidered the senility thread as serious but it really fits. Thank you for yet another outragoulsy good story. Your characters have been so well rounded and believable. They remain believable even as you spin them from canon and that that is what mades your work so wonderful. It is a realistic telling (in characters and places we know) of a whole new story. Again, thanks for the hours of pleasure I've had reading your work. :)

I look forward to whatever you choose to write next. (GRINS with the big hint,,,,)

Thanksss
Ed.