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Inziladun posted a comment on Monday 4th June 2007 11:30am

Well I've been reading the fic as you updated and I've really liked it.

You have used a not overdone pairing and you have made it so that its neither immoral (if this term even exist in the fantasy world) nor the easy way, that its saying that veela appear to be 9 until they are 16 when they suddenly grow... (not that I don't enjoy those).

Appart from that, the way that harry became who he is (he found merlin's grave) its quite original (at least I've never read it before that way) and its not
divine intervention... So great that too.

So all in all its been great to read this fic and I'm nearly wanting to tell you not to finish it, but things come to an end and I suppose that this fic is nearly finished. So congratulations for the story, I'd like to see some other story of yours soon but we can only Hope .pun intended...

Ben10 posted a comment on Sunday 3rd June 2007 4:01pm

A Beautiful ending that makes me wish I'd fall in love young, but alas . . . hopefully when college starts next fall my chance will arrive!

Ben

sanghamitra posted a comment on Sunday 3rd June 2007 7:32am

yeah longish, finally over, sappy, WHATS NEXT ??

brad posted a comment on Sunday 3rd June 2007 2:01am

Good ending to the story (although I'm still eager to see the epilogue, of course). Had to laugh a little when Harry used the 'obliverate' - oh, sorry, 'obliterate' - spell. :-)

Although Harry *did* get away with a clear-cut case of manslaughter, didn't he? Draco was captured and couldn't get away. There's no mention of his wand, but it seems clear that he didn't present any danger to Harry. But Harry still exterminates him. Hmmmm.

I wasn't surprised at the discovery that Dumbledore had planted the idea to mate on the eight-year-old Gabrielle - that's one of the drawbacks of reading your Yahoo group, the possibility was discussed ages ago - but I thought the reasoning behind his having done that was pretty flimsy, the case seemed weak. He wasn't suffering from dementia back then ... imperiused the little girl, forced her to mate ... but just decided 'not to follow through'?!?!?!?

Loved Viktor and his 'prettiest chaser', an amusing little thread of humour woven throughout the second half of the chapter.

Thank you for a great story!

Michelle2 posted a comment on Saturday 2nd June 2007 11:45pm

The end of an era. I am just going to go cry now.

Bethany posted a comment on Saturday 2nd June 2007 11:07pm

As always, the story was amazing. I love the fact that you got Viktor and Katie together, I was feeling sorry for her before that. Nice move on having Dumbledore be the one to have Gabrielle Mate with Harry, didn't see that coming at all!
Thank you for sharing your talents with us, your stories are always enjoyable.

Jimbocous posted a comment on Saturday 2nd June 2007 4:54pm

Really spectacular story, especially at the end where DD gets his due. Personally, I think Malfoy got off a little too easy, but hey, if it's good enough for Buffy :) ... As always, thanks for a great read!

Robin Westerly posted a comment on Saturday 2nd June 2007 8:02am

Just Thank you.

Sheepstamper posted a comment on Saturday 2nd June 2007 7:06am

Once again, you have proven that you are an author beyond the norm. You have managed to weave a compelling story, believable (I know that this is fiction ) and brilliant.

I only wish that I had your writing skills(sob)

Looking forward to the epilogue.

kirt30 posted a comment on Saturday 2nd June 2007 5:01am

loved it hope you do a sequal

BlackNight posted a comment on Friday 1st June 2007 11:43pm

I obviously liked the story as I have read it this far, but there are some things that really annoy me.

The first thing is the the abundance of cheesy lines, but as this is a romance fic I don't think I should complain about that... so lets skip it...

There hasn't be any real challenges for their relationship. No third wheels, no secrets from the past that would make them doubt each other, no scandals to test their resolve... Nothing! Reading about two people loving each other, while somewhat interesting, gets pretty boring pretty fast...

Also, the fact that you made Harry super talented, super powerful and very, very rich out of nowhere irks me. Plus his personality was so OOC... Of course, he was years older than Canon!Harry, and so complaining about personally changes is bit stupid, but other points are still valid (even if other authors too it too).

But what annoys me most is that if bad guys do something stupid, they are punished (even overtly), but when Harry (or Gabrielle) does something stupid, he (she) gets applauded... There are many occasions when this has happened. For example:

1. Harry slams the French Divination teacher on the wall and destroys her ring just because the ring was a Dark item. The teacher should have just pressed assault charges and she would have most certainly won, especially after Harry destroyed any evidence of the Dark item. But no, instead we see how the teacher gets nearly sacked and no one berates Harry for his violent ways. Too hypocritical for my tastes.

2. The fact that Harry decides to levitate the Beauxbatons overseas with untested spells and then make a hole into Hogwarts' wards with an untested spell. Both are so stupid things that I fail at putting my thoughts into words... What if students had accidentally dropped the castle into the canal? Now, Harry could have probably intervened, but then he probably couldn't have pored that hole into wards... What if he had failed to create the hole? The plan was so risky that its not even funny, especially when the possible gain was negible.

3. Harry kicks Malfoy and Snape and instead of going to the court (and win almost certainly) they go and whine to Dumbledore (who's quite OOC).

4. The Gabrielle/Draco incident. Draco makes improper (funny thing is that she is already dating a professor) suggestions and touches her shoulder after which she abuses her veela powers and makes Malfoy run into a tree. Malfoy should have just gone into court instead of this stupid duelling thing (in which Harry and Gabrielle cheated). Instead of everyone berating Gabrielle for the stupid thing she did, everyone accuses Draco of attempting to rape Gabrielle. Accordingly your logic, I'm some sort of serial rapist and sexual deviant as I have a habit of tapping people to their shoulder disregard their age or gender...

5. And worst of all, Harry murders Draco in front of 40000 witnesses. It wasn't self defence, it's a clear murder. DEs were already restrained. If Harry doesn't go prison for that it merely shows how corrupt the Ministry is in Harry's favour, which is highly ironic considering that one of this story's points is how they try to make the evil and corrupt Ministry into better one.

Plus the whole Dumbledore thing was stupid. Yes, he's old may have been growing senile and demented, but that doesn't really excuse the stupid plans he made. Demented and senile people wouldn't have remembered the plans the next day, and so that excuse doesn't keep water. And you say that he loved to play the political games too much to really try to defeat Voldemort. That's total bullshit. If he had defeated Voldemort he would have gained so much political capital that he would have become de facto leader of magical Britain, and that would have been an excellent place to play political games. Not to mention the fact that Dumbledore would never harm his students. Oh... And I hope you tell why Dumbledore wanted Harry into Hogwarts in the epilogue.


Now, I hope you answer to this as I would like to hear your side of the story (instead of ignoring or deleting this). Also, I hope that what I wrote doesn't sound a total flame as it wasn't intended as such...

ed king posted a comment on Friday 1st June 2007 9:50pm

Wow! A truely superb "ending" to an amazing story. I had never concidered the senility thread as serious but it really fits. Thank you for yet another outragoulsy good story. Your characters have been so well rounded and believable. They remain believable even as you spin them from canon and that that is what mades your work so wonderful. It is a realistic telling (in characters and places we know) of a whole new story. Again, thanks for the hours of pleasure I've had reading your work. :)

I look forward to whatever you choose to write next. (GRINS with the big hint,,,,)

Thanksss
Ed.

TxA_GunFighter posted a comment on Friday 1st June 2007 9:12pm

Brilliant! This is on e of my most favorite stroies. Really hope you will do more and make it a series. Great writing.

gunny

Lon Huey posted a comment on Friday 1st June 2007 8:33pm

Thank you for tying it all up so neatly, especially for Viktor and Katie. That was a really nice thing to do. As always, thank you so much for the great story.

Manatheron posted a comment on Friday 1st June 2007 8:21pm

Excellent work! one of your best yet, I think I can speak for everyone when I tell you that we eagerly await your next story!

Viridian posted a comment on Friday 1st June 2007 3:55pm

Wow, that was a wild ride. Even after expecting something truly over the top, the sudden death-eater attack still shocked me!

Snape manipulating Albus through the anti-dementia potions was just slimy enough to be believable.

How was Albus sure that Harry would be able to rescue Gabby? If the merfolk had used a different approach, she might still have died and then Jean would have been dead-set against France ever helping. (In Dumbledore's mind, anyway.)

Also, there wasn't really a lot of evidence to sink Dumbledore on the charges from 8 years ago... or did most people consider his shocked expression an admission of guilt?

And yeah, it's nice to see a little "Hope" for Katie as well, with Vik. I love the way you write his dialogue, too!

kainboa posted a comment on Friday 1st June 2007 2:59pm

great chapter as usual, love the final battle.

keep up the great work :)

Minx posted a comment on Friday 1st June 2007 2:57pm

That was excellent the whole story and even though you write tihngs that are truly unbelievable you dont make them stand out, but rather mould them nicely into the story with the right combinations of Drama, Comedy and Romance. With of course delightful little twists here and there. Lovely long chaptors which is definitly something I love as I can say I will just finish this chapter, which has me reading about 5 chapters of a normal story and lastly the ending. A brilliant tie to the title I hope you are proud of this story and I congratulate you on it overall as being excellent written and easily flowing. WELL DONE. Minx.

Bobboky posted a comment on Friday 1st June 2007 1:33pm

sweet

Viridian posted a comment on Friday 1st June 2007 11:51am

Er, didn't Harry cook breakfast a lot for the Dursleys? Why was it said earlier that he couldn't cook?

Professor Vector as a beater was a nice mathematical pun.

I should have seen the 'forming our own club' thing coming a mile away, and I didn't... Great job sneaking that up on us!

I agree with you on 'anothering thinG coming' I've only heard it pronounced that way, and since this is dialogue, the common usage argument stands.

Okay, and now he is cooking? Okay, you explain it. But seriously, is it such a big jump from cooking breakfast to other meals? Even I can do a pretty good Bachelor Hash...

My goodness, Trelawney displaying competence?