By Jeconais
Reviews
Princess Fictoria posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 12:52am
Had to review again in response to another review I read after the fact.
As an American who is very proud of her country (while still being able to recognize and despise some of the actions that the government has taken on our behalf) I wanted to assure you that the so called 'bashing' was very much enjoyed in the spirit in which it was offerred. I found Harry's British wizard's take on American tea to be funny and lighthearted... and his comments regarding sports were also taken in the same vein. Americans are rather fanatical when it comes to our favorite sports and nothing that was said was anything more harmful than any sports fan would declare on behalf of a beloved team... add to that the fact that Harry himself is on the team that wone and it makes it very understandable.
With regards to the political 'bashing' that was referrenced... I thought you tied it into your story rather well. Even Harry commented on it as being a bit out of character and I thought that Percy's explanation was perfect. The British Wizarding public has proven itself to be easily lead by whomever is shouting the loudest... so the insulting, yet truthful, remarks make sense. As for the team's comments regarding their current employers... they seem to be nothing more than any professional who plays or works for a corporation would want to say about their bosses... it will be interesting to see if they are able to keep their ideal once they themselves are the owners.
Okay, I am done ranting at another's rant... and hereby offer my own rating: I give you 9.5 out of 10... The only reason you did not score perfectly is because I am a pushy reader who really wishes I could read the entire story NOW, dang it... oh, well. I will have to attempt to be patient... tee hee!
Princess Fictoria posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 12:41am
totally loved this chapter and am eagerly looking forward to your next. PLEASE tell me that Gabriel and Harry will announce their engagment before Trelawney has a chance to put her scheme into place. Though Harry winning after the fact would be funny and embarrasing for her... since she did not 'forsee' it... I think it would be far more damaging to her pride if he was able to get the jump on her... especially since she has such a high opinion of herself with regards to her petty revenge scheme.
If she were to time it so that the pictures were delivered to the prophet after hogwarts loses the quidditch championship... she would see this as a way to invalidate both the victory as well as hurt harry on the eve of his triumph... but AFTER she delivers it and BEFORE it is published Harry and Gabriel reveal their status as Mates and that they are engaged to be married... then the prophet would be able to use the sweet pictures to validate the truth (for once) and it would be dealing a double blow to Trelawney when the very weapon she tried to weild is so quickly turned against her plots... just an wish I have.
No matter what you do, I totally love this and all of your other stories and eagerly look forward to the next one!
Louis IX posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 12:37am
Extremely very good, as always. Loved the Malfoy bashing.
parakletos posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 12:36am
Just a few notes
"You've got another think/g coming" - ALL of my betas suggested "another think coming" and I have no doubt at all that is the more correct. However, I have only ever pronounced and heard it as "another thing coming" so I overrode them.
It is 'another thing'
Loved the Quidditch; it makes a lot of sense to have the Seeker involved in the game rather than just circling above and the game I've just written has it that way too.
I can't help but see Malfoy as a Pantomime villain and as such I find him very disappointing.
Finally ... 'dove'?
All the best to you and yours.
The Midnight Poster posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 12:31am
Now that's a proper ending to a chapter. I was getting worried that you were going to end on a clifie just before began.
As the saying goes "The Plot Thickens"
Lord Sivart posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 12:13am
I liked it, especially how you had malfoy flee instead of being arrested. It lets us know he's still out there and can cause some more mischief, either in hope or a sequel if you ever do one.
Claudia posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 11:56pm
I love it. The scene in Olympe's office is great, especially Percy's acting. I hope we will see Ron's reaction to Harry leaving the Cannons next chapter.
'Thing' vs 'think' - according to my English teacher it used to be 'think' (meaning you will need to think again about the issue at hand) but has changed since roughly WWII so nowadays most dictionaries use 'thing'.
Thank you and you betas for publishing such a great chapter.
Claudia
Logan_MacLeod posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 11:32pm
I hav ebeen waiting for a while for this update. Thank You very much. I look forward to your next installment
PhoenixAnkaa posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 10:39pm
Once again an amazing chapter to this phenominal fic. Please, I am emploring you, do not make us wait as long for the next update.
Your Quidditch scenes are masterfully written and I can not wait for the final match.
Thank you for the most enjoyable read. *sits down to re-read the entire fic for the 6th time*
PA
Rettet181 posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 10:35pm
Simply put, I love it. Anything written by you is bound to be incredible, and this chapter was wonderful. You managed to bring me to outright laughter a few times (and bursting out laughing when you're sitting alone in your room makes your family slightly worried that you've lost your sanity). Can't wait for the next chapter. I'll just pray that you've already started it. ^_^
unperfectwolf posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 10:28pm
Oh wow. I was waiting for this! I adore this story - I've read the first bit several times over again, and will probably continue to do so for a while. I can't wait for more. Tell your betas they do an awesome job and that while we want more (nowplz) we completely understand that yes, this much takes a while to take care of.
Anyways. I really like where this is. I never thouhgt of Sybill as a no good character. Annoying and sometimes stupid, yes, but never the 'evil' one.
Nanio posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 10:27pm
I love the chapter. I'd give it 8 out of 10 (for reasons I will explain later).
I expected something more climactic than Gabrielle feeling pain at disobeying an order, but your way was far better than anything I would have thought of. The Quidditch matches were very good, and I loved the staff competition. I also like the whole "create our own club" idea that Harry and the gang made. The Harry/Gabrielle interactions are getting much more intimate, and I’m glad to see that Harry is falling in love with her in a way that seems to transcend the bond.
Trelawney... that's a great idea! This is the first time I've ever seen anyone write such an interesting Divination professor. I really do like where you're going with that one.
Here are the problems I had with your work. Please note that I do not mean to offend. The society bashing was FAR too much. You insulted the English Wizarding world six ways from Sunday, but you've been doing it much more subtly in previous chapters. Here you're shoving it into everyone's face.
Then there's the America bashing: Yes, I understand that most other countries do not like the U.S.'s global actions on many levels. Yes, I understand that we are insanely proud and do not have the best (or healthiest) eating habits around. However, I love my country and felt slightly insulted by some of these remarks. I have had English tea before (a friend's father pays ridiculous amounts to have it imported) and enjoy it immensely, but I also like iced tea like Lipton brisk. I didn’t like how you insulted the U.S. so much for little reasonable provocation within the story. I don’t read fan fiction to be told that my country sucks.
Then there’s the corporation bashing you did with Harry, the twins, The Quidditch girls, and Ollie. I understand you did it to show how many, many people (including myself) feel about major league sports, but it seemed a bit oddly placed in this story. If you’d have focused more on the Quidditch and less on Harry/Gabrielle I could have seen it fit better, but with the chapter divided evenly between the two these comments left me thinking "Why is this in here?"
I love the story, the plot and scenes are awesome, but the bashing is a bit much. I really liked it. Like I said: 8 out of 10.
EricThorsen posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 10:14pm
All I can say is this chapter was worth the wait... good work.
noylj posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 10:07pm
Another great chapter. Please, as I asked before, don't end this story too soon. The characters are just so great. Would love to follow Harry and Gabby through several more years...
Also, a berlinner is a donut in UK and a jelly donut in US.
Darktime posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 10:06pm
Hey I finally found you again
I love this chapter, the duel was wonderful
And the fact that
I love your stories is the
only thing keeping me up
I will get about 4 hours sleep before work
but I will be happy for it all morning
AzureSky posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 9:58pm
Great chapter.
Enero posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 9:58pm
I was just thinking yesterday, how I wanted to read the next chapter to Hope.
noylj posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 9:57pm
Another great chapter. Please, as I asked before, don't end this story too soon. The characters are just so great. Would love to follow Harry and Gabby through several more years...
Jonathan posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 9:53pm
Excellent chapter. The length of time between updates just gives me an (unneeded) excuse to read the whole story over from the beginning later tonight.
Your use of the Fidelius charm was great, and I expect we'll see it used in duals in a lot of stories.
Excellent idea for the Quidditch team, it seems original and it gives Harry and Gabrielle ( and their friends) a good future together; it'll give you a good "and they lived happily ever after, and became the most feared and beloved Quidditch team in the league..."
Will Harry and Gabrielle announce thier relationship moments before the Daily Prophet article debuts? Did Trelawney give Albus a (possibly false) prophecy involving Snape? (And how was 'the fraud' even able to See Harry and Gabrielle's date?) I'm looking forward to seeing what's going on with Hogwarts, well, I'm really looking forward to all of the next chapter.
The chapter is so long that nothing really stands out for me to review about; it was all excellent (and Long, which was another point towards excellence.)
"Another thing coming" sounds right; "another think coming" doesn't make sense, unless it's regional; I'm Canadian. Or rather, I'm from Canada... Google translates "Ich Bin Ein Berlinner" to "I am a citizen of Berlin" The 'citizen' part kind of kills the urban legend.
I've already got the first 8 chapters of Hope on my PocketPC, I've just got to copy chapter 9 to it, go to bed, and read into the wee hours of the morning.
Thank you for this wonderful source of entertainment.
allygator posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 12:58am