By Jeconais
Reviews
Ike posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 4:48am
This is quite possibly my favorite HP work in progress. I'm very happy to see it continued. Though I didnt reread the story before reading this chapter, so im not sure if it was jsut that, but I did get a feeling that the relationship between Harry and Gabrielle was pretty rushed, like he just jumped into it from wherever he was to accepting it. Again, this could just be because i havent read the proceeding chapters in a while, but it definately felt rushed to me.
Sarah B posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 4:22am
Fantastic chapter - I loved it.
Christopher Estep posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 4:21am
That easily had to be the most amazing, fun, and *utterly ridiculous* mockery of a duel since "Draw!" (For those of you unfamiliar with the title, it was a rare comedic "spaghetti Western" that was a spiritual ancestor of "Blazing Saddles".) A Protean Charm in a duel? (Sneaky, underhanded, but perfectly legal.) However, what's utterly frightening is that it's no less than, of all people, *Sybil Trelawney* (not Dumbledore) who is the Master Manipulatrix of Hogwarts. (Yes, the not-as-batty-as-thought Professor of Divination is *also* a Slytherin alumnus, like both Malfoys and the Potions Master.) I do think that Sybil will have to learn the way that others have found out (much to their regret) that pissing off Harry is definitely Something That Should Not Be Done.
Mark Weippert posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 4:08am
This was an absolutely fantastic chapter. It was well worth the wait.
My favorite parts were the duel. Using Riddikulus and Fidelius? I have never even heard of that, extremely original and funny. The sign above Malfoys head was the perfect compliment. Also, driving him to be so angry as to cast the Cruciatus Curse, well perhaps done before, I've never read where he's done it in front of so many witnesses and where such decisive action against him has taken place.
At the end of the previous chapter we were all wondering what was going to happen to Draco, now at the end of this one, I wonder what Trelawney and Rita are up to. Also I wonder what Draco is going to do now that he is on the run from the law. I just cant see him staying away from the action, so that could something to look forward to.
Thank you for the great chapter and keep up the great work.
Mark Weippert
Fay posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 4:07am
OMG! Absolutely brilliant! Well worth the wait and I love the Fidelius sneak - a really cunning way to hide. Sincere thanks for lighting up my day/week and distracting me from the horror that is university exams!
Babs posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 3:55am
Love the chapter! It was a long wait, but definitely worth it. Things I enjoyed:
- How Harry and Gabrielle slowly learn to deal with the bond, and get comfortable with it - a lot of this was in that chapter.
- Lee Jordan. you've got to love his mixture of cheekiness an courage.
The least cunning among the "Baddies" has been exposed. Nevertheless, I wonder where this is going to lead. Snape feeding Dumbledore a suggestiveness potion to further his own plans?
Anyway, I'm looking forward to the rest of the story.
xpotter posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 3:19am
dude... please as only one update is left of this wonderful story... please release it soon. this was a great update by the way. i hope the last part would be released soon
tessa_037 posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 3:16am
I have to admit this is one of my favorites. The attention to detail is something I've come to appreciate and expect from other writers. But that was mean to do that Remus and Tonks. I do have another question Where's Ginny? Is she going to come into the story later and cause problems? The only thing that threw me was spelling Crabbe with a K. The fluff factor was actually balanced out with the action scences so no need to go to the denist. Just a passing observation-Gabby should have turned Malfoy into a ferret or better yet a weasel.Again let me compliment you and all your betas on a great job!
Tessa
ThadiusZho posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 3:09am
HOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!
Lots of intrigue, lots of fluff and lots of laughter... Great work, as usual.
Patches posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 2:52am
Dear Tim, You are really the master. This is such a great chapter. I loved the Quiditch, the romance and the planning and execution of the story you are drawing out. Of course Snape and Malfoy have to be stupid bullies and idiots.
There is no way they could possibly be good guys
in any way, shape or form. I have a suspicion that Snape is using a potion or some kind of curse to control Dumbledore. Is he contaminating Dumbledore's lemon drops or something? During the Hogwarts/Beaubatons Faculty Quidtch game Dumbledore was acting more like the Dumbledore that we have learned to know and love. He was twinkling at the other players about a game well played. Earlier in this story you made reference to Dumbeldore thinking "Maybe later I will get to talk to Harry! That would be nice!" Makes me wonder what is wrong with Dumbledore that he could think such good things of Harry and then allow the bad things to happen in the meantime!
Of course Malfoy had to finally blow it and curse Gabrielle. Thank goodness Harry was able to protect her. Of course being Harry, he had to take the pain onto himself! We wouldn't expect anything less!
I loved the part where Victor and Harry worked together. Then of course the Dumstrang students helping Beaubatons was the height of sportsmanship! It was great. Lee Jordan is such a great touch as the commentator for the matches. You have told such a great story and at the very core is a great love story. I really appreciate the way Harry finally came to the realization that Gabrielle really loved him
and would never leave him! What a gift to stop Harry from killing Draco and thus preventing something bad from happening to Harry over the incident.
Thank you so much for writing. Of course like all of your fans we want the conclusion yesterday but great writing doesn't happen overnight. Please take all the time you need so that the end of the story is worthy of the rest of the story. Thanks also to all your betas. I really appreciate the "Mother's Day" gift you and your betas have given to all of us. I know they give you more ideas and help fine tune details. We, your fans, appreciate all your efforts. Thank you so much for such great entertainment. pms
Lionsgate posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 2:31am
Just one word : briliand : it was a long wait but worth it : thanks
Louis IX posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 2:22am
After reading the reviews, I kind of wonder about the use of "another think coming." IMHO, it doesn't make sense, even in the grammatical point of view. Whereas "you have another thing coming..." hints about "...on your head/in the fan/etc." (ellipsis, much?) (and let's just not start on "another's incoming"... ;))
IMHO again, that's a sentence used to say that the other shoe is going to drop. Or some similar meaning. Not something to make people think. Otherwise, it would be written "another /thought/ coming" which is weird. Kind of.
ANYWAY, I don't think it's the place for a grammar discussion, so I'll congratulate you - again - on a masterfully written chapter and story. I can't wait for... say... the other shoe to drop ;) on Telawney :D
Riven posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 2:09am
awsome chaapter. love this story and simply cannot wait for the next chapter. so treawleny's the evil mastermind?
interesting choice, i have yet to see her as an evil genious in any story yet so you deffinetly get points for origionality which is rare considering how often fanfiction is written and there is only a set number of characters to normally use. anywho cant wait for the next chappie
UdderPD posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 1:48am
Brilliant as usual, thank you for sharing it.
TTFN UdderPD
Brad Crawford posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 1:44am
oh god this is going to be hilarious! i cant wait for trelawny to put her foot in it yet again! this is to tell you also i and a whole bunch of others will read anything you write tim. because it is always top quality writing! keep up the absolutely awesome writing!
David posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 1:44am
Well! What can one say after that? Super, and I can not wait for the next installment.
Only a true Grand Master could have other Masters beta his stories. Carry on..... and THANKS.
Dave
Sim posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 1:43am
*blinks*
Wow.
Confession: I usually scroll through Quidditch matches. I usually feel dissapointment when a large chunk of a chapter is wasted by a game.
Imagine my surprise when I found myself halfway through the second match and realised that I'd read every word.
Betas: I agree with you on the thing/think thing. I've never seen it written or heard it pronounced think either.
Betas that tease: Deserve a punishment worse than death for taunting us with a new chapter.
Pre-Beta announcement: I agree with you on this one too. It gives me time to read back through and get your story sorted in my head. I'm reading so many WIPs that it's nice to be able to remember which one belongs to this chapter.
Dumbledore: Very intrested in where this is going. It has the potential to be very chiched, but I'm expecting to be surprised with something new that I'd never considered before.
Something positive: I really like your character balance in this one. The way that the canon headliners are taking a back seat and giving support to the story without taking it over. It is nice to see adult Harry not running to his brainy bushy-haired friend the moment something tricky comes up.
Something negative: Plot structure is all I can come up with... and even then it's lame. The chapter both introduces new plots, and resolves old ones too. I usually don't like that. (It didn't bug me as much with this chapter as it usually does, no idea why). Introducing too many things in a chapter usually leaves it feeling cluttered, but this doesn't for some reason. *shrugs* Again, no idea why. The popping up of these plots in the beginning did effect the pace, however. I would have liked it to have emphasised the wait for the duel alot more. <-- told you it was lame.
Ad Nausium: It goes without saying that I want to read more! <insert fan-girl squee here>
Vtigo posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 1:25am
Great chapter, all we need now is another one right away. Lol
juhi1 posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 1:20am
brilliant! a three month wait was well deserved! now are we going to wait another three months for the next part? coz ill wait! :D
Rudy Henkel posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 5:02am