Rebel Goddess posted a comment on Monday 26th June 2006 12:14pm

Katie? Really? Constipated twins made me giggle. Harry’s dealing with the evil teacher was also so funny. That was a truly impressive piece of magic. Wonderful chapter.

Rebel Goddess posted a comment on Monday 26th June 2006 11:41am

Tintagel is so beautiful. Have to love Ollie asking Harry to negotiate his contract for him. Have to love that Neville is a private defence instructor too. Have to adore the way you used the King Arthur myth too. The faculty having purple hair was so amusing. Loved the Goblin bone chip bit too.

Rebel Goddess posted a comment on Monday 26th June 2006 10:26am

I really shouldn’t be laughing at drunkenness but the inebriated boys were so funny I couldn’t resist. Let's just hope no one saw him leaving her room. I really like this - Gabrielle comes across very well.

Rebel Goddess posted a comment on Monday 26th June 2006 9:03am

Gabrielle did well to refuse him. A lot of girls wouldn’t have. The whole Quidditch thing is thrilling. I love it.

Rebel Goddess posted a comment on Monday 26th June 2006 8:49am

Was the for England and for Harry a deliberate Shakespeare quote? Silly girl, as if he would break the bond knowing what it would condemn her to. That's not our Harry. Excellent chapter though.

Rebel Goddess posted a comment on Monday 26th June 2006 8:34am

Harry’s vampire impression was fantastic — how could I not love it? Love the normal rules not even talking to Harry. Poor Boy, he gets manipulated at every turn.

Rebel Goddess posted a comment on Monday 26th June 2006 7:55am

The backwards somersault was thrilling but worrying. Just occurred to me: Where’s Ginny? Love the mating. It really wouldn’t do her any good to tell him though. Great story so far.

Bobmin356 posted a comment on Saturday 24th June 2006 9:14pm

"You've got another think/g coming" - ALL of my betas suggested "another think coming" and I have no doubt at all that is the more correct. However, I have only ever pronounced and heard it as "another thing coming" so I overrode them.

Tim,
I have to side with the "thing" people. Having another think coming makes absolutley no sense in my book and every time I see someone saying it, I end up stopping and saying hunh?

:)

- Bob

jamie posted a comment on Thursday 22nd June 2006 11:03pm

hi

hi umm this is kinda weird but. since i dont have you email i guess this is the only option i have.

i was wondering if you knew any fleur/harry fanfics, that you can recommend to me.

plz reply to,
yellow--belly@hotmail.com

thanks.

by the way great story you wrote (hope).

jamiew

Christina C. Keimig posted a comment on Tuesday 20th June 2006 8:58pm

Awesome chapter. Such fun!
But it really is "think" and not "thing." Most people say the latter, but they're wrong. Just to get it off my chest because it bugs me when folks say it that way. ;-)

Dustin Hoeppner posted a comment on Monday 19th June 2006 1:56pm

I like this chapter. When will the next chapter be up?

FaithU posted a comment on Monday 19th June 2006 8:42am

Oooookey, I've been hanging around here for a couple of months, and I've yet to review. So I'm correcting that now.

I don't do canon pairings. Most of the time, I don't do het pairings and I hate long waits for updates. And yet I adore every single one of your stories (except for the Harry/Cho ones, because in my opinion, Cho is by far the flattest character Rowling has ever created). I completely believe everything you serve and I always want more. Your character interaction is fascinating.

And the chapter length? I've written whole stories that were about as long as one of your chapters and I really, really appreciate all the work that has to go in there.

And of course (how else could it be), the plot is great, too. Me, I'm usually more of a little-plot-much-angst-and-lots-of-insanity kinda girl, at least when HP is concerned, but again, you convinced me otherwise.

Still, I'm ranting so I'd better sign off now, before I start making fangirl-noises.

Please keep up the wonderful work, Faith.

Ken Warner posted a comment on Sunday 18th June 2006 4:59am

just re-read Hope from the beginning, and wanted to thank you again for such a wonderful, adult story. I use the term in the sense of maturity, balancing emotion with logic and thinking thru consequences - too many HP stories, even set after Moldieshorts death have Harry as a 30 yr old teenager.

Tons of appreciation for the excellent job you do in writing and in providing this site for other authors.
Warmest regards

brad posted a comment on Sunday 18th June 2006 3:37am

Has it been four weeks or more since I had a thoroughly enjoyable Saturday brunch reading this chapter? Ouch. I only just found the printout in the stack of paperwork sitting on my desk, reminding me to say 'thank you' for a fun morning.

Draco tried to crucio Gabby! He must die!

Draco crucio'ed MY HERMIONE in the final battle!? HE MUST BE DRAWN AND QUARTERED AND DIE A LINGERING DEATH!

Perhaps I missed it in a previous chapter, but both Draco's crime against Hermione, and the deaths of Remus and Tonks due to Cho's betrayal, both struck home with me. It's good backstory stuff. And now I have more reason than ever to desire a nasty end to Draco once Harry catches up with him.

The duel was excellent. I agree with Neville; some clever things done here, like the Fidelius. Good fun to read. As was the Hogwarts/Beauxbatons match; you came out with some really innovative and fun quidditch manoeuvres there, thoroughly enjoyable.

I thought the scene where Gabrielle resisted Harry's 'order' was quite moving - and a critical little piece to the overall jigsaw depicting the complexity and ramifications of their relationship - but I can't help wondering if you could have wrung just a little more drama from it. I felt that we were *told* about Gabby's 'incredible amount of pain' more than we were *shown*. Harry feels her pain, 'sees the torment' and tells us about it, but I just wonder if you could have added a descriptive sentence or two which showed us how the two halves of her fought, and how that turmoil caused her such pain? It's a little thing, and re-reading that passage now I can barely justify it myself, but right after my first perusal I thought a few more visual cues would have been better ... her desperately grabbing hold of him while slowly falling to her knees, shuddering, clawing desperately at him, scrabbling to keep upright, a bearly audible gasp or moan, some more physical symptoms, would have been effective. I can't help but feel that Gabby's overriding the Veela imperative - her love winning out over Harry's order - is a Big Deal, and I don't think you pushed that scene as hard as you could have; it didn't poke its nose out of the thread of the story nearly as much as it could/should have. Just my opinion.

I'm with Fleur - I had to snigger too about Gabrielle's passing out on Harry. Twice. A good comedic moment that broke up the plot nicely and kept the flow from being too serious/bland.

Sometimes it's the little bits of authorial imagination that really take my fancy ... like the advertisement for the WWW flying castle. This is just SO OBVIOUS, once you point it out ... I'm surrounded by ads for such movie-related toys every second week, it seems, but I still would never have thought of bunging something like that into a HP story. Gotta love those twins.

You have got me quite worried about Hermione's possible 'cure' for the bond. Please please please tell me that she's learnt her lesson and won't foist it on Harry without his full knowledge and permission beforehand!? That latter of which he won't grant, of course, now that he's fully in love with Gabby and has accepted - even grown to prefer - the Veela complications.

Looking forward to a resolution on that and also maybe the big questions - Dumbledore's thrall to Snape and whether Gabby's bonding to Harry in the first place was forced upon her/them. Thank you for this chapter!

Sherman Cater posted a comment on Friday 16th June 2006 10:30am

Hello,

Please excuse me for taking so long to review this story. I am enjoying it tremendously. I look forward to the next installment.

Thank You.

Rogue posted a comment on Thursday 15th June 2006 10:05pm

I believe this is the first Harry/Gabrielle fic I've ever found that has truly been worth reading. The other handful I've found have painted Gabrielle as a fairly shallow character hidden behind the brilliant star of Harry.

I must commend you on this effort, and hope that you are able to maintain the impressive quality of this story as you continue to write.

skywalker64089 posted a comment on Saturday 10th June 2006 4:07am

I enjoyed this very much. I'm just hoping that Hermione doesn't do something that will ruin her friendship with Harry.

S.

jgkitarel posted a comment on Friday 9th June 2006 8:58pm

Excellent work here. I found it intertesting how you made the pairing matchup believable, and salute you for your creativity. Once again, excellent work.

LEO posted a comment on Friday 9th June 2006 5:47pm

Hello there!!! This story is just grate!!!! I am enjoying it Very Much!!! Jajaja. Your stile of writing is very appealing to me now and slowly I am reading all of your stories. White king .. is one of the best, you are doing very well in almost all of them!!! Congratulations (and hope! You are updating soon!!!)

10chi posted a comment on Thursday 8th June 2006 8:40pm

Let me preface this review by saying that I adore this story. I find myself reading it over and over again because it is so good. This is fan fiction at its finest.

I do however have a small nitpick. When I first read this chapter, I was a little disappointed. I felt that this story was starting to snowball. Out of the blue, it felt like side stories were being added left and right (e.g. a masquerade dance and a new professional quidditch team).

I also felt that Hope started to drift away from what made it so good. At its core, it's a love story. Call me a sucker for sappy stories, but it was the fluffy moments of Hope that really resonated with me. I felt that this chapter didn't quite have the same chemistry as the previous ones (such as when Gabrielle healed Harry's shoulder).

Don't get me wrong, I found the events of the story very enjoyable (especially the duel between Gabrielle and Snape and the staff Quidditch match), but I felt that the romance of the story took a back seat to the plot. Now instead of Harry and Gabrielle falling in love, Hope started to turn into Harry getting even with all the people who wronged him.

In fact, the slow, romantic build up of the story was suddenly full-blown Love at the beginning of this chapter. It was a bit anti-climactic. Especially when in the previous chapter, it seemed that Harry would have a larger hurdle to cross before he could admit that he was in love with Gabrielle.

That said, after reading this chapter a few more times - and especially after reading the story in its entirety again - I don't feel quite as strongly about this criticism as when I first read it.

Let me reiterate, I do enjoy this story tremendously. I think you are doing a fantastic job. I just wanted to write you a meaty review (because from your forum post it appear that you enjoy getting reviews) and give you some (I hope) constructive criticism.

Keep up the wonderful work. Like everyone else, I am waiting with bated breath for the next installment.