By Jeconais
Reviews
uberwald posted a comment on Friday 20th April 2007 9:26pm
knowing that the last few pieces of the story are in the pipeline led me to finally break with my "only completed works" reading habits so i guess I'm asking you to consider this a review for the story so far, and i must say that I am floored. you have the talent to spin a fandom cliche into gold and I am truly in a better mood than I was when I sat down to read.
having read your other stories here, and being familiar with the works of some of your betas (betae?), it goes without saying that the level of technical detail was also immaculate -- you didn't misspell any incantations or character names, you wove a believable and internally consistent story for Harry and the gang as well as a believable and internally consistent story of Merlin, breathed life into the character of Olympe Maxime for the first time that I've seen as anything other than someone for Hagrid to chase, and allowed the characters that I know and love to mature (or at least grow up) in a believable and natural way -- I can see hints of the canon personalities in this, and find myself thinking that there are hints of your personalities in canon.
sorry for the sycophantic praise, I'm just so happy to find something GOOD to read again, after a couple of weeks of settling for less. thanks for the good read. :)
Silo posted a comment on Friday 20th April 2007 8:55pm
omg an update do u think u can do it agen befor a nuther year passis i liek the stoeire and i would liek to see it finshed
brad posted a comment on Friday 20th April 2007 7:47pm
And so the great Jeconais fanfic logjam of 06/07 is broken, and the bonanza begins!!
Very nice chapter, but did you have to make me feel so lonely after reading it? :-( Damn.
On the technical level, I'm wondering if Harry has put some of his power into Gabby's ring, such that he might be weaker than before. Or does his ability to 'tap' into the magic around him mean that his strength will always remain constant (in a given location), regardless of what spells he casts?
*SO* pleased that Hermione did the right thing and didn't use the break-bond spell before telling Harry about it.
The image about Gabrielle needing to be as *close* to Harry as possible after the bond was broken was quite riveting.
And the idea that Harry was a magical voyeur to Hermione's and Ron's lovemaking was just a little ... perverted. Ugh. Bleh. Canon!Ron's ears would have been so red his head would have burst into flames, I reckon.
Interesting turnaround with Sybill - "all thoughts of revenge against Harry gone" - pleased that you made such a twist, to keep us on our toes.
Thanks for the chapter!
Bryan Sherrell posted a comment on Friday 20th April 2007 7:26pm
Finnaly! Took you a year but great chapter. may the next chapter be even better. and hopefully sooner.
kupchoi posted a comment on Friday 20th April 2007 6:11pm
Great update worth the long wait
Alex00 posted a comment on Friday 20th April 2007 6:06pm
Awesome chapter.
kahris posted a comment on Friday 20th April 2007 4:28pm
it has been a long time since ur kast post
on "Hope" but it was worth the wait
excellent long chapter and a great story
keep up the good work and post again soon
JBern posted a comment on Friday 20th April 2007 4:02pm
I guess I'll be the voice of dissent. The writing was excellent, but I feel like something is missing. There was no real sense of conflict in this chapter. No seething Draco Malfoy plotting his revenge.
Early in the story you planted the seed that Snape was somehow controlling Dumbledore, but you haven't done anything with it.
I am glad that you avoided the 'Gabby kidnapped before the bond could be consumated and the race to rescue her before she goes insane' pitfall that I thought was coming - kudos on that.
Anyway it boils down to my major problem with the story is the lack of a real counter to Harry.
Another thing that bugged me is that throughout the story you reinforced that the bond prevented Harry from forming lasting and meaningful relationships, but in this chapter Harry becomes a 'Rico Suave' flirt. Those two simply don't work together from my POV. It would seem that unable to really develop lasting relationships, Harry would be weak in this area and instead be leaning on Aimee for advice.
He's just too perfect. His flaws are things like 'he cares too much about others'. He lacks real character flaws and anyone who dislikes him (like Sybil) is marginalized. How about having him face off with a young Hogwarts student who realizes that his/her parent(s) were DE(s), but doesn't understand why Harry killed them...
Then again, I'm the guy who likes a body count in his story, so I might not have the correct mindset to comment.
I hope (no pun intended) that you find my comments useful or at least thought provoking. I do enjoy the story, but would rather give a critical review than one that lacks any teeth to it.~Jim
ShadeHawk posted a comment on Friday 20th April 2007 3:11pm
Thanks a lot for a wonderfull chapter. Keep up good writing. I really enjoy your more mature pieces.
ShadeHawk
patrik svensson posted a comment on Friday 20th April 2007 2:48pm
Great story,
keep up the good work.
Deborahsu posted a comment on Friday 20th April 2007 2:17pm
Great chapter! It's been so long since you updated that I almost forgot that this story was still in progress!
I loved the duel ... and the obstacle course ... and Harry & Gabriel, of course.
slayersfan01 posted a comment on Friday 20th April 2007 2:09pm
Wow! I was only expecting the engagement, but that last part was a nice surprise. I'm really glad that you updated this fic. Now I'm anxious to see chapters 11 and 12! I love your fics!
Jonny posted a comment on Friday 20th April 2007 1:56pm
"I am safe," she whispered in shock. "I will not go insane."
"Damn right," Harry agreed.
Haha! You bloody legend! God. I can't believe you finally posted. And I also can't believe TMW is finally finished...
:'(
peter foster posted a comment on Friday 20th April 2007 1:01pm
brilliant, i have been eagerly looking foward to this chapter and it has not dissapointed me at all. i cant tell yo how much i enjoy your stories but in my opinion this story is your best one. i cant wait for the next chapter. hope its out soon but i know you cant rush a good story. good luck with whatever you are doing :)
Harley posted a comment on Friday 20th April 2007 12:43pm
Good job I love your stories. I have to say if I were to be picky I would say the only parts I haven't liked so far are the Try out seens. I picture it in my head at to me it looks like it would be a mess. Hundreds of people in the air at one time! Where do they get so many brooms? Not everyone has one and they all very in quality. Also with so many people in the air at once they would be hard pressed not to have any crashes.
Thanks for write your stories I look forward to the next chapters and future stories.
Mark Safransky posted a comment on Friday 20th April 2007 12:25pm
Hey Tim, nice to see your triumphant return. Loved this chapter. It really took us in depth into the feelings that are Harry and Gabby. Some of the insights also shown how the characters have grown over the years. Say, that little riff about Madame de Pompadour, did you happen to channel a second season Doctor Who episode while writing? *grin*
Loved the smackdown that Rita administered to Sybil. While she's still a conniving bitch, she's at least smart enough to pick the right side now. The fallout of those stories in the Daily Prophet is going to be interesting. Will there finally be a chance to shut it down or take it over? Say, we really haven't seen any direct involvement from the Ministry in these events yet, but are they behind those articles? Also, just what IS happening to Dumbledore and is Snape actually to blame? Can't wait for the next installment!
Aberbadger posted a comment on Friday 20th April 2007 12:24pm
ENFIN!
Aquilara posted a comment on Friday 20th April 2007 11:52am
Hello!
I think this would be the appropriate moment to tell you that I absolutely adore this story. I must have read it about 3 times now and I bet I will do it even more often in the future.
Harry Gabrielle never seemed to be a pairing I would have considered, but the way you write it I cannot but love it.
By the way, you saved my day with this chapter, I had something to look forward to since I checked my emails this morning...
This chapter was absolutely brilliant. I would never have guessed that Rita Skeeter reacts like this to Trelawney's pictures though it seems perfect and logical.
Aimee is probably one of my favourite characters. She really is the only one that seemed to behave normally at the beginning. I may have found my role model in her, even when I am far from it.
Anyway, before I talk some more rubbish...
I'm looking forward to the next chapter and I hope it comes soon.
X
Aquilara
Cale posted a comment on Friday 20th April 2007 11:44am
Uhm...I live in Antwerp, and it is in Belgium, not Germany. Of course, I may have misread it and Gabrielle missunderstood that they ATE a German lunch (as I'm sue some restaurants here sell German dishes as well as the usual stuff) but still...and of course, Antwerp, should they speak to you firstly they will speak in Dutch, not French. French is the second language in Flandern, where Antwerp is the main city, and French comes first in Walonia (I probably misspelled that, but I don't know the real English name counterpart of Walonië, what we in Dutch call it) so...
But you are right, we are the Diamond Capital of the world (at one point at least 75% of the diamonds in the world were handled by us) because of the Schelde, the river conected to the sea that goes back pretty far inland and thus is a good harbour for trade. Leaves many options for further transport...
Sorry to have bothered you with all this information, but as I am a local, I feel I have to correct these slight mistakes...please don't think of this as a personal slight or critique on your writing style. This story is one of the best I have ever read in HP Fiction...
Nali posted a comment on Friday 20th April 2007 11:09pm