Mayjest posted a comment on Friday 4th May 2007 6:11am

Hehe, that was brilliant. Not too much in the way of moving on the plot, but some great little scenes. The scene with Snape in was brilliant.

My only worry is that you're making Harry TOO good - almost TMW proportions. In TMW it was all right, it seemed a little too much at times, but I thought you were trying to move away from making Harry super!Harry? Or did finishing off TMW put you back in that vague mood? It just strikes me that there seem to be similar features in your Harry and Ginny (sorry, Gabrielle - but that just proves that there are similar elements. The fact that they're 'perfect' for each other in pretty much the same ways as TMW) in both stories. It's certainly closer to your TMW Harry than your Perfect Situations or Alone type Harry.

Entilzah posted a comment on Friday 4th May 2007 5:55am

You do a towering love story in the last chapter, and a (for the most part) fun, lighthearted romp in the day in the life of the most powerful newlyweds (and their friends, of course) in centuries. As well as throw in backstory to some or the secondary characters. And it flows as the best story I have read in years. Literally.

And why did Jean spouting french poetry to Aimee immediately think of Morticia and Gomez Addams? :-)

Magnificent as always. My praise can never come close to the beauty of your prose, but we mortals can but try.

Renzo7 posted a comment on Friday 4th May 2007 5:51am

Excellent, this chapter was, as always, pure genius. I liked the whole ball part, as well as the meeting that took 4 minutes... Interesting thing with Katie, pity she reacted so badly, but it's to be expected, we can't understand women yet :P
Great work, keep it up and please update soon.

Crys posted a comment on Friday 4th May 2007 4:49am

literally glowing *snicker* You took that expression and just expanded it, didn't you?

> A few hundred metres above the ground he levelled out, swung his feet forward, and shifted so that he could lie on his back and stare at the clouds, his hands behind his head and his feet crossed.
Show off.

Originally, I thought the two accounts of meeting Jean's mother were contradictory. After re-reading them, they aren't, quite.

> "And the sex is brilliant," Ron added.
*laugh* Nice to see that Ron hasn't changed that much. Still suffering from perpetual foot-in-mouth disease.

> "Harry, did your apartment originally come with a balcony?"
*laugh* Fairy tales. I have to keep reminding myself that this is a fairy tale instead of just HP fic.

> Harry shrugged. "Are you sure I won’t exacerbate the problem?"
> "I can only assume that you will," Olympe admitted cheerfully, "but at least Picup and I will be amused."
*snerk* I like her.

> "You can, of course, refuse. It is your school, supposedly," he added with a sneer aimed at Snape.
Which answers what Harry thinks is going on.

That "meeting" was amusing. I also noticed that John and AD/Snape weren't given any responsibility.

Hmm. Harry removes his glasses and THEN glares. Anyone paying attention will realize that his eyes are fixed. Especially as he kept them off for the rest of the meeting.

> "Does he know any other words?" Harry muttered in French under his breath.
*laugh*

> "Would you do the same to the politicians if I pointed out that they always want to cut my budget, and that could affect her schooling?" she asked hopefully.
*snicker* Nice try, Olympe

>"If I am being naughty, you could always punish me," she said suggestively, running her hands down her thighs as she turned away from him and then looked back over her shoulder at him.
[low, feral growl]

> "Okay, so they didn’t tell me how to do that," he said, an amused tone in his voice.
*laugh* Nice touch.

> Gabrielle grinned suddenly and held up a long brown hair.
Okay, I can think of two uses for that. One would seriously weird me (and Harry) out. Some nefarious plot by Gabby is the other.

> "George, the best thing about being a twin is that we’re never alone in our genius."
*laugh* And the brilliant lines by the twins continue. They are fun to write, aren't they? Anyway, based on something they say later, it seems that they're beginning to suspect something about the connection from Harry to Merlin.

> The same thing we use to make Muggles think a unicorn is a goat,"
You're just having fun with these things.

> They continued another four times, before George managed to win
{muttered} Twins.

The whole "make Fred into Gabrielle" scene was highly amusing. "They look different from this side.", learning to walk in high heels, the business opportunities. And it all turns out to be a prank.

Ginny. And centaurs. Bowlegged and goofy grins. *snicker* You've written several where Ginny is a "good guy". I suppose it makes sense that you write one where she most definitely isn't.

The Charlie talking about being Harry thing was well done. Shows some sympathy toward him from an relatively uninvolved third party.

> I mentioned one of Harry’s other previous lovers here — as being someone at Hogwarts.
Actually, at the party was also a whole bunch of Ministry. You could change it to someone from the Dept of Magical Games and Sports (or just about anything else) if you wanted to.

Sheepstamper posted a comment on Friday 4th May 2007 4:27am

Excellent chapter, really well written, I look forward to the last in this story - but with much regret that it will be the last of this story.....

Wonderbee31 posted a comment on Friday 4th May 2007 4:15am

Wow, this was impressive, to say the least. Really wonderfully done, from the dance to the gifts, and the repairing of HArry's eyes, as well as to what happened with he and Katie, which makes me feel sad for her as well. Great to see that Snape still got smacked down some, and wondering if Draco will try something idiotic as he always does, and what might happen because of it.

JVTazz posted a comment on Friday 4th May 2007 2:23am

good chapter looking forward to the next one, i'm definately curious to see where you take this story from here.

Rebel Goddess posted a comment on Friday 4th May 2007 2:14am

Love the literalness of her glowing. I wish there was room to know about Harry's other lover. Great stuff with Fred in a dress. Really liked this chapter even if the title was tenuous. More please. Good chapter.

Stygius posted a comment on Friday 4th May 2007 1:05am

that was very nice. i had thought that it would be easy to see harry as merlin, so i do appreciate the fact that u used the other characters to balance that out.

katie's story was both sad and wonderful. and wonderfully believable. i'm not sure if Gabby changing to look like someone else (katie) will be in this story. maybe that is a way that gabby is using to bring harry and katie together. i'm not saying that gabby would give harry away, or even trick harry into making love to katie, but maybe gabby can still 'feel' the love between the two.

i don't know, i am personally i two minds about, what i would like.

in ur AN: the last paragraph talks about a hogwarts staff member and their relation with harry? hope to see that cleared up as well.

otherwise, i expect to see that next chapter soon (as u said it was already with ur beta team), and hopefully chapter 13 won't take as long. congrats.

UdderPD posted a comment on Friday 4th May 2007 12:57am

Brilliant, although I thought that we might get the Quidditch final in this Chapter.

With the twins new insight into women I sot of feel sorry for the Wizard world.

Hopefully we will have the final chapter next Thursday (or before)

TTFN UdderPD

rune1806 posted a comment on Friday 4th May 2007 12:54am

hi how to write a reviwe of your story and not sounld like a little fanfool? i love the story sooo much you writing is sooo good this is one of the best a/u stories i have ever read. how did i do? oh well i guess i am a fanfool.

scott2 posted a comment on Friday 4th May 2007 12:21am

Great chapter as always :)

Pranavss11 posted a comment on Friday 4th May 2007 12:11am

Impressive as always Tim. I look forward to the next chapter

theteapot posted a comment on Friday 4th May 2007 12:11am

Thank you!

A great chapter, my only qualm was that it didn't feature Sydney! I did read your author note - could you do an outtake on getting the jewelery?

Thank you!

Musings of Apathy posted a comment on Thursday 3rd May 2007 11:55pm

Great chapter. Will Fred ever realize that he was pranked, or did he realize and not care, just like any prankster worth his salt would?

What was missed in this chapter? The city. The chapter is named 'Sydney' and they never once made it there. Oh well. No big deal.

I look forward to the conclusion, finding out what Harry does about Dumbledore and to Snape.

Eagerly awaiting more rations of your genius.

Mike (MoA)

unperfectwolf posted a comment on Thursday 3rd May 2007 11:39pm

I don't know what you're talking about, not up to par. These last chapters have been fabulous. I do dearly love having such a quick update! This is one of the few HP stories I'm still following (I'm gone from that fandom for the most part, these days) but I still squee like a kid when I see an update :)

Antonio posted a comment on Thursday 3rd May 2007 11:11pm

Hmmm, with that gender switching thing right there, I can see you doing a Nice harry and Gabby gender switch lemon. Lol jus for fun.

Amamama posted a comment on Thursday 3rd May 2007 11:11pm

Ahhh *long, happy sigh* You do know how to make this reader deliriously happy. What a gorgeous way to start the day. I'll now be mentally occupied for the rest of the day, re-enjoying the story and having fun adding missing moments. And I absolutely love your take on Morgana&Merlin.

Splendiferous writing, and as always the story is full of gems. One being this: "the best thing about being a twin is that we’re never alone in our genius."

Thank you, thank you, thank you.

Tarkas posted a comment on Thursday 3rd May 2007 10:52pm

Brilliant as ever, Tim, especially the "two-hour" meeting. I want to borrow Harry for the next one of those I have to sit through; unlike Olympe, I do not enjoy long meetings!

And Harry wasn't the only one to strut his stuff in this chapter. Aimee taking charge was great to read, and the little touch of humour in her pranking the twins was the icing on the cake.

I really like Aimee. A critic writing about Dorothy L Sayers once said that her fans would all like to know Lord Peter Wimsey socially so that they could hear him talk; that's close to how I feel about Aimee: I don't want to be married to her, even though I think Jean is a lucky man, but it would be great to have the Delacours as family friends and watch their matriarch do her thing on a regular basis. Wonderful character.

Shame about the chapter title; I was really looking forward to seeing H&G back home. Heck, if I'd known they were going shopping there, I could have told you where to send them. ;-)

And now for the finale... With all the plot threads still hanging, it ought to be one heck of a chapter! Look forward to it.

Srikanth posted a comment on Thursday 3rd May 2007 10:29pm

Oh dear.. I just love the meeting!! Just reminds me of my boss whhen the other are just dragging things for a long time. great chapter!!. Thaks