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Mistress of Potions posted a comment on Sunday 16th November 2014 6:10am

I really like this story, which I've already said, but I am a little confused about the monologuing in this chapter. It makes it feel as though you have a lot of information to share and chose it as a way to wrap things up more quickly, rather than have a tenth chapter and move the story along at a less rushed pace.

One thing I did enjoy is that you had Fleur defeat Voldemort, instead of Harry, even if she can never claim the deed.

Neil Glover posted a comment on Sunday 16th November 2014 6:07am

Great story, I loved Harry the Blacksmith and I hope that you will do another chapter or two dealing with what happens next with Harry and his family. 10/10!

ladysavay posted a comment on Sunday 16th November 2014 5:55am

Brilliant! Funny, sad, terrifying, infuriating, exhausting, touching, but most of all a wonderful, rich, story told by a great bard. Thank you for sharing this with us. It's now on my all time favorite story list. I can only hope you can see your way to find another tale in you, you wish to share with us. This was great!

wiredwizard posted a comment on Sunday 16th November 2014 5:45am

Thank you for another very enjoyable story! It was a nice change from the usual HP fanfic piece & I had great fun reading it.

Zaion posted a comment on Sunday 16th November 2014 5:35am

Perhaps the only thing I didn't like about it is not a flaw in the story, but in my own appreciation of stories. I've long since figured out I tend to better enjoy stories that involve the protagonist actually having a proper romance. That said, this feels more real than forcing a romantic solution onto Harry, and I'd at least hope that there will be an epilogue or one shot eventually showing who he ends up with (but even if there isn't I still love the story).

-ZI

qwe33355555 posted a comment on Sunday 16th November 2014 5:28am

It was an amazing story.I truly do love your work from your older more fluff filled to this newer style of Harry trying to grow up. Please keep writing.

nimaj25 posted a comment on Sunday 16th November 2014 5:14am

Thanks for putting these ideas down in story format. I really liked the story... from start to finish.

Please continue writing... :)

Ben

mwinter posted a comment on Sunday 16th November 2014 5:06am

Thank you for wonderful story and insight on a different hp. Awaiting whatever else you post.

GinnyLover posted a comment on Sunday 16th November 2014 4:50am

As always i'd love to see an Epilogue but i can live with imagining it.

kb0 posted a comment on Sunday 16th November 2014 4:46am

Hmm, I'm not sure what's not to like, at least in any major way. It was written in your usual fun way and was different, so no tired plot lines. You also had fun taking some minor characters (and some made-up chars) and making them central characters, something that's common for you and again well done. It was a fun read and that's the point, not who's dating whom and other things people get fixated upon far too often.

I appreciate your work and I'm always glad to see new work by you. Thanks for sharing!

Kevin

Orion posted a comment on Sunday 16th November 2014 4:42am

I loved this story, and I'm glad that it had such a perfect ending. The story never seemed to be about Harry defeating Voldemort, rather it always came across as a story about Harry learning whom he is, and starting to build a future for himself. The final not-quite-battle was totally in line with that, Voldemort was just another minor problem to be overcome.

I could tell while reading this that you enjoyed writing this story - I always believe that the best written stories created when the author loves what they are writing. I can't promise to always love the story too (though as I said, in this case I did) - but you can never write a story that everyone will love, so just keep writing what you love and enough readers will love it too.

Thank you, once again, for sharing your work with us.

ThunderGod posted a comment on Sunday 16th November 2014 4:33am

Another great story, a dufferent plotline using rarely used characters. Quite enjoyable

Zamia posted a comment on Sunday 16th November 2014 4:20am

Thank you for a very enjoyable read. You have certainly done your part for promoting equal rights. Another yarn of yours that will be going into my library. Thanks for sharing. Cheers.

Z

Jason Karr posted a comment on Sunday 16th November 2014 4:00am

this is a nice story the way you ended it is very nice

Riven posted a comment on Sunday 16th November 2014 3:44am

I loved this story. It's not a standard hp story and to be honest that's a good thing. Standard hp has been done, I'm bored with it so it takes something interesting to catch my interest and you did. I liked how you mixed little bits from different fandoms, some zoolander, some elder scrolls, all good

jilumasam posted a comment on Sunday 16th November 2014 3:39am

Well thank you for such a lovely story. I liked it very much and appreciated the effort you put into it.

Avieryn posted a comment on Sunday 16th November 2014 3:30am

I enjoyed this tale a great deal. From the first chapter, I eagerly awaited each following chapter and have enjoyed reading them and allowing my imagination to take flight with this story.

Keep up the good work.

With appreciation,

Avieryn

Tim Sullivan posted a comment on Sunday 16th November 2014 3:24am

Now that you've reached the end I'd like to give you a review of the complete story. I liked the concept. All of the concepts, actually. Blacksmithing, Zoolander, the Vanes and Greengrasses...that was great. Overall I liked the execution too, but there were several places where it felt forced. One good example: nowhere in the story do we see Daphne as the person Astoria described her as in Chapter 1. Nowhere. I think I get that you were trying to portray her as being Slytherin and hiding her intelligence - she's simple, not stupid - but we have two and a half moments where that persona is described secondhand and we never actually SEE it. All we get is the sweetheart who is naive, simple, and only stupid in comparison to Astoria's genius. In summary, it's a great concept, a good story, and good writing, but you should consider revisiting it to see if you can fix it up a little.

Jason9 posted a comment on Sunday 16th November 2014 3:21am

Fun story - hope you enjoy it as much as all your readers have!

Greg Johnson posted a comment on Sunday 16th November 2014 3:18am

This has been a very fun story to ready. Thank you for posting it.