Lisagrace posted a comment on Sunday 9th November 2014 5:56am

Great chapter. Love how the parents are making plans. Romi taking out Vernon, that was great.

Stormwatcher posted a comment on Sunday 9th November 2014 5:54am

The funniest line in the whole chapter--"Harry brungs it." Had me letting out a big laugh. The whole story is fantastic, but the new arrangement between the families should be very interesting. Greatly enjoying the story.

Riegert8 posted a comment on Sunday 9th November 2014 5:54am

I had thought that Harry's ID must had a compulsion charm on it

Silo posted a comment on Sunday 9th November 2014 4:19am

i like it so whats next and i hope harry ends up with both romilda and astora

Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Sunday 9th November 2014 3:53am

Truly a fun chapter as the world begins to be reshaped and none, outside of those present, realize it. This was definitely a fun party and I look forward to seeing all the various fallouts from it as matters develop. Methinks that Dumbledore, Fudge, and Riddle are going to be the most disconcerted by the changes as plans, schemes, and machinations are rendered void without warning.

red jacobson posted a comment on Sunday 9th November 2014 3:52am

Another enjoyable chapter, and I can see why you mentioned having so much fun writing Viktor's father. His mother was a hoot as well. I'm intrigued by the little bit of insight into something in Derek's past, behind the ridiculously good looking facade.

Sorry to see that this story is winding down, because it's been a lot of fun and it seems like, from the conversation among the parents, that there could be a lot more story left to tell.

See you next week

Red

Davideg posted a comment on Sunday 9th November 2014 3:25am

once again I thank you for sharing another fantastic chapter as well as for all the time and effort put in to this story please continue to update as life allows

Brian64 posted a comment on Sunday 9th November 2014 2:37am

Another great chapter. There are plenty of HP fanfics on the net that are full of action, but darn few writers bother to take the time to develop their characters. I enjoy the interactions between the 'b list' cast, and I don't mind reading scenes that occur between main plot advancement events.

Commando987 posted a comment on Sunday 9th November 2014 1:40am

Not gonna lie I love your work but this chapter was... meh. I mean it didn't really move the plot along and it was basically a 15k party. I was really looking forward to Harry's test and possibly a Hermione love interest out of the blue. My favorite part about your work is that every chapter moves along the plot. I just left disappointed in this chapter which has never happened to me when reading your work.

Wolfric posted a comment on Sunday 9th November 2014 1:23am

Great chapter. Thanks for writing. W.

Celebrithil posted a comment on Saturday 8th November 2014 6:02pm

My favourite moments in this chapter were how Daphne comforted Harry, showing that, however much of a badass he is, he's still vulnerable; the question and resulting advice about Sirius between Harry and Derek and Cressida; and how you handled the Horcurx. You could have taken a shortcut and just have Harry curse him in the most humiliating way he could find with Romilda and Nadyia, but instead of taking the easy road, you set it up to still (potentially) have an awesome final confrontation.

I hope Wednesday went well for you.

Patches posted a comment on Thursday 6th November 2014 9:50am

This is a little sad in the beginning. Harry was really upset about the battle he just had and the lives he had to take. I'm so glad that the elf told Daphne that Harry needed her and why. Daphne fills a special place in Harry's life. She is truly filling the position of a sister for him. She really loves Harry for himself and for the role he has in her life. That is very well done. I really like the way the other girls handled the fact that Daphne was able to help Harry when he needed it and the rest also have their roles to fill. Very well done. I really like the interaction between Daphne and Fleur. It actually made sense though I usually don't like gay relationships. This one seems right to me. I will see how it developes. Augusta making an alliance with Harry made sense too. She is very old school and this is a great arrangement for her and Neville in relationship to Harry. Moody is a piece of work in himself. You portrayed him perfectly except I find it hard to imagine Moody saying "ooo, ooo, me, me!" to anything. It works here though. The Podska game was great. I can almost see all 6 of them bouncing around the field in all kinds of ways. A very believeable magical game. I especially like the way that Victor handled the press. Harry's handling of Skeeter with the elves was perfect. Thanks for writing. p

sanbeegoldiewhitey posted a comment on Tuesday 4th November 2014 12:58am

Very, very good chapter. The best parts were Harry's platonic shower scene with Daphne and the Podska game. I felt bad for Tori and Romi. They really wanted to win.

sanbeegoldiewhitey posted a comment on Tuesday 4th November 2014 12:32am

You made Daphne as a gay woman. Brilliant because if she was straight, she will be a threat to Astoria and Romilda in winning Harry. I hope Harry never has to choose between Tori and Romi. And please don't make a sad ending where the reason Harry does not have to choose was because one of the girls died.

bkfriend posted a comment on Monday 3rd November 2014 7:42pm

Hi,

Like Jbern you too have now created a new sport. Also, like Jbern it is an enjoyable one. Thank you for enriching my entertainment time!

Brian

Renzo7 posted a comment on Monday 3rd November 2014 4:26pm

As always, excellent work. You have such incredible talent, that every chapter has my mood swinging along with the character's.

Podska was fun! I enjoyed reading the game and the interactions. I found it very appropriate that Harry asked Dobby to stay for a while so he could also comment. Getting Skeeter ejected was brilliant! I laughed so hard at that, as well as the "will I get ejected..." from the other reporter.

Your writing has always been incredibly addictive to me. Hope, Hogwart's Dawn, White knight, Grey queen, Best Man, Blue Steel, Perfect Slytherins... You have so many wonderful stories. In Best Man, you stated that Harry/Fleur was your pairing of choice. I hope you have something planned with that ship, because it's one of my favorites, too, and I can see Daphne's got dibs here :P. (I also recall you saying this story wouldn't have Harry paired up). In case you aren't planning on writing a Harry/Fleur story, would you mind recommending a few? I've read many, but most don't have the character depth I have grown accostumed to with your works.

My condolences on your loss (regarding the funeral you will attend). I hope you find strength with family and friends in this challenging moment. Big hug from Honduras!

FeNo posted a comment on Monday 3rd November 2014 12:20am

Well first of all: this was grandiose. Very emotional, almost to the amount that the backlash from "feeling" the emotions you're reading about was tiring me out. I guess it's not much better when you write this and it all takes place inside your head?

The scenes with Daphne and Derek were great. Harry is growing and maturing at an enormous rate throughout the whole story and yet it still feels pretty natural for all the weird things happening to him that would be not... I also liked the little Talk Hermione had with Romi... "I would go insane", indeed.

As for Podska... well it might have been nice to deliver the english translation with the bulgarian name and i'm a bit disturbed that the sport you came up with is even more athletic than Quidditch (yeah i know people usually sneer at guys sitting on a broom and calling that sport, but i can't help but think of driving a motorcycle through a 3D parcours at top speed and not having road friction to help with the steering and holding on path... it must take a lot of body work to keep those small twigs under control and do tight spins, climbs and whatever nots. No wonder only a miniscule amount of people even try to play the game for earnest.) and ultimately far more demanding than the older sport.

They really should do something to create "entrance"/ amateur level sporting challenges like the first game of "Tag" they tried out when Harry first made the boots. And maybe even make different kinds of boots for the different levels of adventure people would seek... not everyone will be able to master a firebolt after all, so why should all boots be the same when 90% of the potential customers never will be able to use the top level abilities to their fullest extent? and 100 yard high jumps through the neighborhood could frighten a lot of people regardless of the safety procedures built into the boots.

I'm not saying Podska is a bad idea, just that it needs a bit of refinement to make it playable if you don't have the world's elite sports stars at hand to try a quick game....

A similar feeling creeps into the story whenever you go that much overboard with the praise for Harry's products... yeah i understand it, he is a natural and he gives his all whenever he starts up his smithy. Yet he only did this for what? November to March? five months? which would make him a dedicated and talented noob but still a rookie in everything related to smithing. Where are the things he does not succeed in producing the first time? Where are the things he still is not good enough to try? Declaring every new attempt at smithing something into a work of beauty and have people lining up to buy "something like that" may seem a nice idea on paper, but if you sit down and think a bit about it it just elevates the poor boy into very elated heights, from which a drop would be very hurtful. Where can he still grow if you have him make beautiful, useful and nigh to indestructables items after just having learned how to swing a hammer? It feels rushed and too much too soon when reading it.

Would it really have hurt to make his gift to the Greengrasses a fireplace screen from those warped iron stuff he thinks about when confronted with a staircase he thinks he could replicate? Would it have hurt to make it nice to look at yet not quite perfect and with some minor quirks that future attempts probably will work out with more experience?

Harry now has such a strong personal life with a wonderful supporting group almost like a tight knit family around him, he really does not need to become more superman than superman, better at armoring than Iron Man and better at smithing than Vulcanus/Hephaistos himself... I get that it is not just a hobby but his future profession and something he can live out his ambitions in without ever being rueful or in doubt about it... But he also has got a century to become godlike in his chosen profession and not granting him any faults or imperfections hurts the character as much as the other factors of your story have been good to him.

Sorry for the long ranting, but i guess that really wanted out of my system. I still love the story and your two little heartbreakers are amongst the cutest and most adorable pairing ideas for Harry i#ve ever seen in fanfiction. It's just that some things still tend to drive me nuts when reading them and putting them into context when other things are happening around them... i can't help myself there.

joeBob posted a comment on Sunday 2nd November 2014 9:42pm

Some extra funny moments, like when Moody got all eager-monkey with the AK.

Entertaining chapter. Thanks for the update.

Wolfric posted a comment on Sunday 2nd November 2014 9:17pm

Great chapter. Can I get an elf as well? Thanks for writing. W.

Sanabalis posted a comment on Sunday 2nd November 2014 8:56pm

Your writting is absolutely brilliant! Every chapter is, to me, perfect! I often re-read your stories, and always eagerly await updates! I hope your muse helps you write lots and lots and lots of stories more! And faster! :P