gregstar posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 6:56pm

Love it. Engaging, different, and absolutely hilarious in bits. Fleur going to be nice soon or are we keeping her as a bitch?

I enjoy reading all of your work so I am really looking forward to more and I might just have to go back and read my favourites again.

Thanks

robst posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 6:56pm

loving the story

one thing though, Hogwarts is in Scotland, not England.

Robert

Amoral Philosopher posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 6:48pm

Very nice beginning to a new story. You are right though about your plot being kinda shallow. It has the depth of a puddle, but comedic entertainment the size of an ocean. An added bonus to keeping things shallow and not to serious is that you can get away with incredibly cliche plot points like time dilation devices. And since this story is primarily humor based, anything that seems too unrealistic can be chalked up to comedic moments similar to sitcoms. That is all I have to say for now since I still need to read chapter 2. I'll review again after that.

Nights_Silhouette posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 6:24pm

A great chaptere, keep it up.

fountaam posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 6:23pm

Like the interaction with Gabrielle. :)

Quincy posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 6:17pm

Absolutely brilliant. I haven't laughed this much reading fan fiction in a good while.

Michael Jordan posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 6:10pm

This story is very nice. I do find myself wondering who Harry might end up with now as he doesn't seem to care for Fleur at the moment so that part of the twins plan my not work. I also love his interaction with Gabrielle.

Wesley1 posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 6:07pm

Thank you, for this wonderful story.

ShadeHawk posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 5:26pm

Harry ignored her. "I’ve got a better idea," he said, "I’ll not do anything for the first forty minutes, that should give you enough time to get the points you deserve, and then I’ll do my thing. Points don’t matter to me, but doing it in style does. Now, let’s get this one to bed, then I can collapse and look forward to my first ever hangover!"

As in Leviathan Rising by Ruskbyte in style?

"Arise, o Leviathan, arise! Lift your waters into your sister's arms and bare your secrets to me! Reveal that which I seek, that which lies beneath your glory!"

At first nothing could be seen, but with slow inevitability the waters of the lake seemed to retreat from the shore. A line of shadow became apparent along its edge, slowly growing broader and deeper with each passing moment. The water was trembling and rippling all over as it slowly rose upwards, higher and higher, matching Harry's movements.

Soon it was a foot off the ground, then a yard, then two, then three. Like a wall rising out of the earth the lake lifted into the air, floating high above the lakebed. Already the mass of water was a dozen yards into the air, the bulk of its mass still hidden from view, and yet it continued to rise up.

Renzo7 posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 4:49pm

Nice work, Tim.

The chapter was well written, and the wand-reversing was a nice, new concept. I like seeing that there's an antagonist in the champions, (Fleur) and the Weasley twins are as great as always.

Regarding translations, I'd find it preferable to have them next to the text, since I have to scroll down to see what it means and then go look for where I was, interrupting the flow of reading.

Keep up the great work, I look forward to all of your updates.

djbe posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 4:31pm

Corrected that french for you:
Pour un coeur vaillant, rien n'est impossible.
Des petits ruisseaux font des grandes rivières.

DizzyG posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 4:12pm

Some people will be disappointed with this chapter?

Are you kidding?

The only thing disappointing about this chapter is that it came to an end.

dexterz posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 3:54pm

awesome story. its nice to read a HP fanfic where Harry is having fun. i cant find enough words to describe it. keep writing and good luck!

Rorschach's Blot posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 3:40pm

One of the best first tasks I've seen. Good story all round.

Karenelaine posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 3:27pm

I really like the story. I hope that you continue with it.

Shepherd posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 3:10pm

Excellent chapter. Harry is really growing into his new role.

blue artemis posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 3:05pm

This is actually really cute. I do love the way Harry is growing, and I like the way Hermione was willing to dump the jealous Gryffindors.

Ian Morgan posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 2:33pm

fantastic story i have allwaysed loved all your work please update soon

Sarah5 posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 2:27pm

Fred and George are interesting their dialog is top notch. You do well making people laugh. I'm have a good time seeing Harry socializing and having a bit of fun. Please keep writing.

Musings of Apathy posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 2:22pm

Wow! Excellent work. I always like your view of Harry, the heroic and compassionate side of him. Thank you for sharing.

Mike (MoA)