Stenstyren posted a comment on Sunday 16th May 2010 10:45pm

I'm really enjoying this story so far, the light-hearted tone is really amazing. I like how you are making this into a sort-of crackfic but still have a solid plot and characterization.

Just a word of caution, I noticed some elements of the story that was serious on a level that didn't really fit in with the rest of the story. Harry immidietly telling Gabrielle that he was neglected as a child comes to mind but it was more reading between words in certain places.

Still, a great story! Eagerly awaiting an update:)

dest posted a comment on Sunday 16th May 2010 10:37pm

wow, i love this. just found your stories thanks to weixuan. liked a few that i read, but my favorite so far is definitely this one. looking forward to seeing a lot more of this story.

darkdeva posted a comment on Sunday 16th May 2010 6:15pm

This is really, really amusing, and I think you should stop being so self-deprecating. Is it the best fic around? No. But it's hilarious and good enough. Chillax.

WhiteElfElder posted a comment on Sunday 16th May 2010 6:07pm

This was well done. I must say that I greatly enjoy this version of Harry and his interaction with those around him...though half seem to be on his payroll.

jazed posted a comment on Sunday 16th May 2010 11:29am

thank you for the new chapter. Very entertaining. Looking forward to more. Love your work. :) again thank you.

frankocsic posted a comment on Sunday 16th May 2010 10:26am

great read. thanks for posting. that was really creative, how harry managed witht the first task. the bit where he cut his face with the stone was lol. great job. looking forward to the next one.

madrymon posted a comment on Sunday 16th May 2010 9:11am

I am really enjoying this story so far, along with the rest of your work, thank you for your time on these.

jaian posted a comment on Sunday 16th May 2010 3:56am

awesome story cannot wait for more

brad posted a comment on Sunday 16th May 2010 3:55am

> The two grinned and dashed down to the corridor outside Kate’s room.
> ...
> ... Harry asked, doing his robes up.

'doing his robes up' -- oh DEAR!!! :-) :-(

I was getting a bit miffed that Hermione seemed to have been sidelined when you put in that scene at the end:

> "Harry," Hermione said softly. "I think you have some real friends over here."
>
> "I have the best one in front of me."

Awww. But good on you. Yeah, I can see how you want to explore fresh friends and relationships, but I'm glad you're still keeping Harry loyal to the best friend who was always so loyal to him; and most particularly that loyalty was evident right at the point that your story started, after the Goblet's selection of Harry as a champion.

> "Dobby," Harry called. "One hangover cure please."

HA HA HA!! repeating the joke that got me to laugh-out-loud in the first chapter. Hee. :-)

You have a thing for Gabrielle, I think. :-) At least in this one she's way too young for Harry. As is Harry, really.

> The dragon looked faintly betrayed ...

Heh. :-)

Okay, I have a perfect way for you to introduce Hermione as Harry's girlfriend and soulmate. What you do is have Hermione and Viktor kissing in a Hogwarts corridor, then have Harry come across them ... at which point a sudden chest monster will manifest and consume him with rage and jealousy. The chest monster will then take a life of its own and have Harry continually lust after Hermione, even though he doesn't know why and we are never told or shown why he - or the monster - is attracted to Hermione so strongly.

What do you reckon? What? Hackneyed, trite, simplistic, and it didn't work in HP book 6 and won't in this story? Shucks.

Re the 'back stabbing' Weasleys and other Gryffindors - strong emotions and words there, but given as how this story jumped off right after the Goblet made its choices, it makes perfect sense. And the more distance Harry puts between him and the 'traitors', the more remote the chances of any reconciliation. Particularly since Hermione isn't an intermediary trying to get Harry and Ron back together.

A fun chapter to a fun story, thank you!

Rifty posted a comment on Sunday 16th May 2010 2:15am

This has been one of the most enjoyable new fics I have read in a while. Good work as always.

MCDTC posted a comment on Sunday 16th May 2010 12:04am

You are an absolute genius when it comes to writing fanfic. I bow down to your greatness. Love this story like all your others. You have a great ability to make any story interesting. Weither its way out there, or as cannon as you can get with out being the creator. Your a true story teller, and i hope you never get tried of writing your stories. Keep up the good work, and hope to see more of your work soon.

migele posted a comment on Saturday 15th May 2010 11:17pm

I have to say this one is surprisingly amusing.

Harry with a good support staff is nice.

since I like Dahpne and Tracey can you fit them in somehow?

Then if we go with the fandom that most asians know one martial art or another there is Su Li.

cheers
migi

cheeseycraziness posted a comment on Saturday 15th May 2010 9:01pm

Oh, but Gabrielle is so adorable here~!

This is so much fun to read. A light-hearted bit of messing with the HP world, ne? And I appreciate the translations. I wish I knew French, but I am currently unable to take any sort of course or find a tutor for it, and find that I learn much better and faster with an actual instructor than muddling about on my own. :P

Forever&3moreSeconds posted a comment on Saturday 15th May 2010 8:51pm

Wooooooooooo! over-the-top Triwizard Tournament just got higher! I really love this, especially the Weasley twins' dialogue (please give them some more airtime) and Gabrielle.
Ruth =)

Zucht posted a comment on Saturday 15th May 2010 7:35pm

I'm enjoying this story quite a bit. It's fun to find myself smiling in the middle of a sentance. It reminds me that life isn't all angst or adventure.

Cliff Bryner posted a comment on Saturday 15th May 2010 7:31pm

Very enjoyable.

carmela posted a comment on Saturday 15th May 2010 6:56pm

This fic is hysterical and quirky and soooo over the top in places. :D I love it! Please don't let it get lost in the shuffle of your other fics. That being said... can't wait for the next chapter.

Meg posted a comment on Saturday 15th May 2010 5:03pm

Oh, I just love this. Gabrielle is adorable, and strongly reminds me of my youngest when she was a little younger. ;-)

I also love what you're doing with Hermione.

Thanks, Tim!

Wonderbee31 posted a comment on Saturday 15th May 2010 4:27pm

Another great chapter imo, and really enjoyed Harry the showman, as well as his letting Albus know that there's a relatively new sheriff in town now, and will look forward to what happens at the Yule Ball this time out, especially with all the confidence Harry continues to project.

Kim Griffis posted a comment on Saturday 15th May 2010 4:14pm

I'm really enjoying this story. I look forward to seeing where you go with it next.

Kim