EricThorsen posted a comment on Wednesday 17th October 2007 9:50pm for Princess

It's too bad you don't like this one. It is very happy, which is becoming a bit of a rarity. Oh well, hopefully we get a non-abandoned story again soon.

Kegan posted a comment on Wednesday 17th October 2007 9:37pm for Princess

Good story, good concept. Really, with a little work, you could easily insert some conflict without even changing what you've posted here. Perhaps increase the threat level of Draco (or any other Dark Wizard/Death Eater/etc. or throw in some political troubles that Harry can't solve with his usual flair in ten minutes.

I normally don't like OCs as the romantic interest, since there's a very strong tendency in HP fandom for Mary Sue-ism (but really, anyone who accuses you of Mary Sue-ing is sorta . . . behind the times. We don't hold it against you, and I've consistently loved your stories, especially Wild Horses. ;P ), but Melissa actually sort of grew on me a bit, though she did seem suspiciously like a cross between Gabby from Hope and Pansy from WKGQ with an actual royal title.

PhoenixAnkaa posted a comment on Wednesday 17th October 2007 9:36pm for Princess

You know... it really is quite sad to realize that your "Abandoned" works are by far better than most authors published tripe. Sigh...

And so you know, if the ever elusive obsessed plot bunny decides to gnaw at your ankles again over this exceedingly fun piece of work, I know there will be a horde of your loyal readers falling over themselves to see you continue foreword. And I, for one, will be helping to lead the charge.

Thank you for a most enjoyable read.

PA

Kortir posted a comment on Wednesday 17th October 2007 9:22pm for Princess

I don't know about the abandonment part. While the similarities are there and all, this one was different in that the particular version of Harry is probably the most amusing, random and enjoyable that I've generally seen out of most of your work. I would personally LOVE to see a full story involving this sort of Harry- skipping the angst and going straight for crazy-but-awesome-and-funny. I hope to see another appearance of this version of him at some point. There are some very fundamental differences between Hope-Harry and this one, and any others from the mix.

Lady Metheglyn posted a comment on Wednesday 17th October 2007 8:44pm for Princess

Cliched, absurd, etc. or not, I was enjoying this! Something about it just made it...hilarious. Would love to see more, but oh well. Was worth the read anyway. :-)

Haeton posted a comment on Wednesday 17th October 2007 8:26pm for Princess

Killed or not killed it was extremely entertaining, maybe not a serious piece but extremely funny.

Ken Warner posted a comment on Wednesday 17th October 2007 8:25pm for Princess

excellent story - I understand why you stopped - but I would call it a one shot rather than abandonned.

I was reading it aloud to my daughters - slightly edited for their ages (9 and 12) and they were laughing so hard they could not stand up.

thanks for sharing - it is telling that your 'rejects' are better than 85% of the fanfics out there.

warm regards

Jim_xinu posted a comment on Wednesday 17th October 2007 8:22pm for Princess

Wow, once Melissa shows up, the espresso really kicks in. :-)

From that point on, this is a bit like distilling down the fun and bantering parts of TMW or Hope into concentrated form.

While I can understand that from a writers point of view, you want to do something more fulfilling than fun and banter, as a reader those are often my very favorite parts.

So, even though you have chosen to stop writing on this, I'm still very glad that you shared it with us rather than just hitting delete. I enjoyed it immensely. Thanks.

moonstonemystyk posted a comment on Wednesday 17th October 2007 8:10pm for Princess

I loved it. You're Harry was a riot and it made me laugh all the way through.

tsmuckitelly posted a comment on Wednesday 17th October 2007 7:44pm for Princess

A good read, light, no angst, plenty of humor. A nice change

Ingerslev71 posted a comment on Wednesday 17th October 2007 7:43pm for Princess

As much as I love the snark and the banter in this story, as well as the original characters, I do agree with the reasons you abandoned it.

For me, the story of a hero's struggle and ultimate victory is always more satisfying if there is not just a possibility, but a probability of failure. In canon, when Harry was facing off against Quirrel, against the basilisk, or against the dementors, there seemed very little chance for him to succeed, which made the ultimate triumph over long odds that much more satisfying.

The Harry you write, as often as not, is so powerful that no strictly magical or physical opposition carries much real threat to him, which limits your options for a suspenseful conflict.

The story of Harry's pursuit and winning of Melissa, rather than just the successful proposition and aftermath, would have made a better story. Your super-powered Harry, finally facing a situation he cannot power his way through, where his desire for victory is perhaps even greater than it was when he faced Voldemort.

You do humor very well, so I do look forward to seeing more of that in future writing. And tell Harry he has my permission to cast as many spells in Huttan as he wants ;-)

OneEye

Stanley Chalk posted a comment on Wednesday 17th October 2007 7:29pm for Princess

The odd spelling mistake but I like the ideas and plot. I wished you had finished it off.
Conclude with the wedding. It might be a fluff piece but you are a good writer. I love the humor and the bubble Harry. If you ever decide to finish this story I will read it.
All I can say is keep writing.
Stan

ken payne posted a comment on Wednesday 17th October 2007 7:09pm for Princess

This story was a lot of fun. It's a shame you aren't going to finish it, but I'm thrilled you posted it.

You're right in your notes. There is no real conflict or much of a point, but those things can be vastly overrated. A bit of fun ever once in a while is awesome. So thanks again for providing it.

Ken

sheldane posted a comment on Wednesday 17th October 2007 6:52pm for Princess

please continue this story, or at lest make another one like it, i love the harry and veela princess together, you really should do more of that stuf, so please please please

BigCaanine posted a comment on Wednesday 17th October 2007 6:02pm for Princess

I just have to say that I haven't laughed this hard since I read your "This Means War". Wonderful story can't wait for more of your writing to liven up my days. Thank you for all your work

Kaerion posted a comment on Wednesday 17th October 2007 5:58pm for Princess

I can, sorta, understand why you've abandoned it (as you are the most "picky" fanfic author in the fandom, which must be as frustrating for the other authors, since you toss away stuff that is hundreds of times better than most of the stuff out there, as it is wonderful for us, your readers, since it means getting absolutely amazing fics), but I still loved it!

Everything, from Hurricane Harry, to the Dursleys getting their come-uppance, to Harry absolutely thrashing Scrimgeour and lecturing the Queen, to the dialogue that is just as wonderful, in-character, and hilarious as I've come to expect from you, to the small comments and details (which, I have to mention, seem to be one of your "trademarks", and one of the things that make me look more forward to updates from you, than from any other author) that had me almost literally rolling on the floor, laughing, to the very interesting choice of not just telling the story through Hermione's POV, but having her *actually* tell it like a story (with flashbacks and all ;)), made for an absolutely wonderful read.

Unfortunately, I do see your points about the weaknesses as well, especially the non-existance of a real *point* to the story, so even though I loved what you gave us, I won't be complaining (too much ;)) about not getting any more of it, but having to wait for your other works instead.

Oh, and can I just mention my complete amazement over the fact that you wrote something this long, of this quality, in less than a week? You really do keep amazing me... And I'm very glad to hear that you really enjoyed writing it! From what I understand, it's mostly been a very hectic RL that's kept you from updating as much as I think we all wish you could, so I hope writing this gave you a personal boost and a way to "take a break" from RL, at least for a little while! And on a very selfish side-note, I hope that enjoyment carries over to your other writings as well, so we (your loyal readership :)) can have more excellent stories to read in the near future.

Anyway, thank you very much for sharing this with us!

Castlewizard27 posted a comment on Wednesday 17th October 2007 5:54pm for Princess

I'm sorry, but I absolutely loved this idea. I see some of the flaws, but also saw a lot of potential for the characters too. I don't know, maybe I'm a little hopeless but every once in a while I enjoy reading something that is just meant to be funny and sappy. Why does Harry always have to go off and have the massively great battle or something? We've seen that all before, and truth be told often enough your idea of "Harry's killed Voldy in some heroic way, use your imagination to picture it." works better for me at least then some of the repetitive massive final battle or new attempted big baddy idea that is used. Sure it may not be novel length, but a three chapter ficlet just to make you smile sometimes hits the spot. Anyways I'm sorry to see this work go, as I like the character of Melissa and the fact that Dumbledore is sort of revered, but Harry is his own person.

Lon Huey posted a comment on Wednesday 17th October 2007 5:54pm for Princess

Hahahahahahahahahahaha, etc.

I REALLY needed a laugh right now. This was the ticket.

Spells in Huttan, next thing you know it'll be that nonsense the Knights who say NI! say.

If this is an example, I call for more abandoned one shots.

Good on ya, mate!

Joe4 posted a comment on Wednesday 17th October 2007 5:48pm for Princess

This may be a crack fic, but damn is it funny. Thanks for the laugh.

Shawn Pickett posted a comment on Wednesday 17th October 2007 5:31pm for Princess

An amusing one shot, but I can see why you dropped it here, as most of the really interesting problems were already dealt with. Brilliant work as usual, thank you.