uthamm posted a comment on Thursday 18th October 2007 8:26am for Princess

Great setup and the fact that you would consider this as less than worthy is why *I* am reviewing and *YOU* are writing. I would love to be able to spin a story like this!

Excellent.

"Shut up before I have you arrested for Treason!" Great line. Laugh out loud funny.

hedwig_edwiges posted a comment on Thursday 18th October 2007 8:15am for Princess

I'm sure not the one of your readers that can help you with style, ideas or etc.
I'm one of your readers that say "Thank you!" everytime you post/update, because your stories always make me smile, are extremelly entertaining and, overall, make my day a happier one.

Thanks! And I'll read anything you post, abandoned or not!

JVTazz posted a comment on Thursday 18th October 2007 6:39am for Princess

heh, the thing I like most about your writing style for this and "Hope", in particular, is that you write your Harry minus all the angst where as most authors write Harry all angsty and in good need of an ass kicking. Would have been pleased to see this continued though I can understand this stories underlying and imminent death. :)

BJH posted a comment on Thursday 18th October 2007 6:21am for Princess

You know, I usually don't like first person narative, it's so hard to do well but you've pulled it off here. The story flowed well and was a pleasure to read.

I'm assuming folks are pleading with you to continue, to show them the wedding or the honeymoon or something but you are right in that there didn't seem to be a huge point to the story just an amusing twist.

But then again, to quote the esteemed philosopher: "You don't have to have a point to have a point, ya dig?"

BJH

Filodea posted a comment on Thursday 18th October 2007 6:12am for Princess

Why does there have to be a point? Sometimes it's okay to read a story that has no angst, no crisis, no great crushing "MESSAGE". I enjoyed reading this. I think you could write up to the wedding, or including the wedding, call it good, and it would be fine. I really enjoyed reading this, and would love to see the wedding.

Manuel Lovell posted a comment on Thursday 18th October 2007 4:40am for Princess

I really enjoyed reading this. You could have conflict by doing flashbacks to meeting the parents, other veelas against a non-veela marrying the princess. There could also be a Ginny fight scene with either Harry, Hermione or Melissa or maybe all together. I love the everyday references to Britain, such as PG Tips being crap (which they are). Other flashbacks could be Harry trying to talk to Melissa and being stop by over-amourous wizards and veelas conspiring against him. just an idea, really. Keep up the good work!

UdderPD posted a comment on Thursday 18th October 2007 3:58am for Princess

This is wonderfully entertaining and it does not deserve to be in the abandonded section.

TTFN UdderPD

KenF posted a comment on Thursday 18th October 2007 3:58am for Princess

On further reflection, this really reminds me of those drawn out comedies that Rorsach's Blot writes over on fanfiction.net. Not your style.

Finbar posted a comment on Thursday 18th October 2007 3:42am for Princess

While I can see why you abandoned it, I was laughing so hard in places, especially the Huttese spells! Talk about a roller coaster fic!

Cliff Bryner posted a comment on Thursday 18th October 2007 3:08am for Princess

A nice surprise. I would like to read more of your abandoned stories. I'm a big fan.

Ken McAndrew posted a comment on Thursday 18th October 2007 2:32am for Princess

Tim. Finish this! Love all of us, I think. :) Seriously, I was cracking up reading this, it was so funny. I love having Hermione as the narrator too. I will say, when you mentioned the brunette part, I half-expected Hermione to offer to toss herself at Harry, with Ron's blessing no less, and that would lead to more hilarity. I'd love to read more if you ever get the urge, though.

sunrisesunset posted a comment on Thursday 18th October 2007 2:14am for Princess

You know, Tim, sometimes I think that you secretly work for Kleenex. All of your writing moves me to tears - whether they be markers of lament, or out of control hilarity. This was definitely the latter; I have bite marks on my fist from trying to keep myself quiet (as I'm reading this at 2am).

I see your point that this is a nice, soft piece of fluff, but I disagree with your belief that this fact invalidates its creation. I'm sure that it had a cathartic effect on you as you were writing it - let's face it, there's nothing better than a burst of frenzied passion to melt stress and cheer you up.

I think you're being too hard on yourself. It seems to me that you've convinced yourself that everything you produce has to be epic and moving and well thought out. However, you have to realize that sometimes that's just not what comes out as you put pen to paper, or hand to keyboard. Your mind goes to crazy places and you can barely write fast enough to keep up with your thoughts. When that happens, it's best to just let it come out, or it'll stay all bottled up inside where it doesn't do anyone a bit of good.

I really enjoyed this wild romp of a fic. I understand if you've exhausted the maniac energy it took to write this - but if you are only holding back because you feel that it doesn't measure up to your standards of gravity and purpose, I implore you to finish it and obtain some closure for yourself. We readers would be delighted to feast our hungry eyes on more.

Chomas posted a comment on Thursday 18th October 2007 2:00am for Princess

"It's just another piece with no conflict and perfect characters"

BUT I like it. I like the fairy tale character of your stories and this one is / would have been one the best.

I can understand your reasoning in not coninuing this story but I don't have to like it.

Keep going with your story writting because it's fantastic to read your fics and to forget the outside world for a view hours.

Ronnie McMains posted a comment on Thursday 18th October 2007 1:56am for Princess

I read this, and started to re-read this, and I noticed something.

When Ron and Hermione get together to try to get Harry a girlfriend, things don't go well.

Didn't here, didn't in Hope, didn't work in Chances (not that they did much, but they were ready to try).

Personally I think it's because Ron's rubbing off on Hermione (ducks hexes for double-entendre).

Still, I'm sorry you didn't think it was good enough to keep going. Still waiting for Jeco multi-chapter goodness...

Mark Willson posted a comment on Thursday 18th October 2007 1:54am for Princess

I actually like this. I think it's very well written, and to be honest I like that it's not focused on Voldermort.
Would probably have liked to see Queen Liz removed from power but I'm just not a fan of our Royalty.
Thanks

Darak1 posted a comment on Thursday 18th October 2007 1:05am for Princess

You could have killed it after the wedding, it was a lot of fun to read

Tarkas posted a comment on Thursday 18th October 2007 12:42am for Princess

Tim, Tim, Tim... You worry me sometimes, you really do. We all know the old saw about being our own severest critic, but you take it to extremes, and this is a perfect example. You wrote:

It's just another piece with no conflict and perfect characters.

There are at least three major problems with that sentence (not bad for 10 words), namely:

"just another piece" -- No, it would be just another piece if it were one of those frak-awful hyperangst Gothic horror wannabes that infest most HP fic sites. This is bright, funny and entertaining, and we need a lot more like it. Besides, it's Timfic, and there's a world shortage of that!
"no conflict" -- this is BAD? The problem here seems to be that you don't realise what you've written in this "piece": it's not a Great Drama (for which I for one am profoundly grateful), it's a screwball comedy in the tradition of films like Bringing Up Baby and What's Up, Doc? (and she'd never do it, but I can just see Barbra Streisand doing the voice for a CGI Leena <eg>). It's got the pace and the craziness, and Hermione as narrator is perfect as the poor soul whose world is suddenly turned upside-down as someone -- here, post-Moldieshorts Harry, with help from Melissa and her family, and of course the elves -- sweeps in and turns their everyday world into something resembling an LSD trip.
"perfect characters" -- I must have missed them. Okay, maybe Melissa is a little Mary Sue-ish, but that actually makes sense in terms of who she is -- a Veela princess who has grown up in a sheltered environment -- and why she's right for Harry. Harry himself is not perfect -- just ask the Queen! But the way you've portrayed him is a reasonable extrapolation from certain parts of canon, and is not the same as the version in Hope or any other of your stories, and he fits into this story just as he should. Everyone else is too busy getting blown along by Hurricane Maximus Potter-Black, so we don't see enough of them to really get an idea of how "perfect" they are. Youi may think them overly so, but that's because they're in your head and you know them far better than we mere readers can -- and in this case, that is to our advantage.

I really hope that you will take a second look at this story and continue it, because I think it could be even more fun than it is (and I wanna see this Harry squash the ferret), but I repeat that it is not drama, it's romance and comedy and all the better for that.

Wergan posted a comment on Wednesday 17th October 2007 10:35pm for Princess

This story is great for what it should have been aimed as. It similar to as you pointed out is like the end of Hope. Its a fun fluffy piece to lift you up when you are in a bad mood. This is defiantly something I'm going to reread next time I'm feeling super depressed. Keep up the good work.

mrrlyn posted a comment on Wednesday 17th October 2007 10:30pm for Princess

Despite what you said about it... It is still one of the most original stories i have ever read... i was enjoying it alot. I bump one of my top 10 fanfic off the list to make room for this one. THere are tons of conflict stories, imperfect characters, and angsty stuff out there. Very few write a nice enjoyable fic to just make you feel good and to enjoy. so what if there is no conflict and they are perfect.... It is wonderfull to read and made me forgot my crappy day. But you are right, you should write what you enjoy... but if this is something you liked writing finish it, and forget the critques. Personally I think there should be more fun, fluffy, enjoyable, even pointless fics out there. Just to read for the purpose of enjoyment and a good laugh.

fx posted a comment on Wednesday 17th October 2007 10:21pm for Princess

A pity that it's abandoned. It's interesting to read. On another note, it's strange that I didn't get any email alerts when this was posted. Am I the only one?