firetown posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 7:17am for Chapter 2
another brilliant piece of work, looking forward tomore of your stories
msgupy posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 7:08am for Chapter 2
Cool. Thanks kindly. Look forward to the next chapter. Thanks also for the recommendations, but I've read them all.
sacr posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 6:58am for Chapter 2
Thanks! I haven't read such an amusing story for a long time. Great writing.
Davideg posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 6:53am for Chapter 2
i love this thank you for sharing please continue to update a.s.a.l.a.
Innortal posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 6:51am for Chapter 2
I must say, great work, great detail, and great defining the world to fit it.
Darkon posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 6:48am for Chapter 2
Hmm the only thing I'm disappointed about is that it ended other than that great chapter. Can't wait for the next one. Harry Potter wit Tony Stark's personality and resources what a great idea you had. Got to wonder if you'll have someone who is like Pepper Potts the worlds highest paid personal assistant Don't call her a secretary or she'll tear your spleen out through your nose or is that who Hermione is?
timt020 posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 6:44am for Chapter 2
One of the best storys I have read in a long time, Please update soon.
TheHard posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 6:31am for Chapter 2
Nice chap! I've never read a story where Harry treatens with going to Beauxbatons, and actually doing it! that will be something new, for me at least :)
Manuel Urrecha posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 6:28am for Chapter 2
Some authors have good ideas but when it comes to put them down into words, the story suffers and comes up childish or rushed, your style is just right, I'm enjoying this story greatly and I'm looking forward to the next chapter, keep the good work!
bgoldnyxnet posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 6:28am for Chapter 2
Hah! Another good chapter. As I said about chapter 1: it's just a fanfic, everything gets out of Harry's way -- but it's sure a lot of fun.
lord_silver posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 6:07am for Chapter 2
Hey great chapter!
Don't worry I enjoyed it. Fleur did act like a real brat in the books & its good that you have show her like that. Most others try to show her a misunderstood & unapproachable because of her part veela hritage.
Really liked little Gabrielle. Would have loved a scene with Kate!
Loved the showmanship of the first task & looking forward to what you have planned for the second task as well as the who arry takes to the yule ball.
Thanks for the chapter & I hope you post this story next.
Shanami posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 5:45am for Chapter 2
I like it. It's completely over the top, completely ridiculous and greatly funny. I always like a story where Harry gets a backbone, but very few of them are quite this amusing.
Looking forward to more.
But, as I dabble in writing myself, I realize that mindless praise is well... mindless. So, a tiny bit of criticism based on the only thing I think could use a bit of improvement (in other words, I think this story is well written and in general with someone as prolific as you are, there isn't going to be much obviously wrong... but I digress). I like the pace, I really do. It is fast and engaging. And, for someone like me, who is very well aware of the Harry Potter timeline *and* has a lot of experience reading fanfiction, it's great. However, I get the feeling that you're passing great bits of time without making the reader cognizant of that fact. Again, for someone that is used to this sort of thing, it isn't that big of a deal. But, you might consider dropping just a few more hints about the amount of time that things are taking. It might make things just that much more clear.
Netap posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 5:31am for Chapter 2
Like it? absolutely not?... I love it!!!!
Smashing chapter (or should it be squishing?) I'm really entranced with the plot and characterization in this fic, very well done!
Killedbykarma posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 5:30am for Chapter 2
See I thought this was just as good as the first chapter, almost entirely due to the Gabrielle interactions. xD
W Mayberry posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 5:24am for Chapter 2
Have to say I am enjoying this tale. It has quite a few moments of laughter. Much needed after a long day. Hope life let's you continue it and your other tales soon.
joeBob posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 5:21am for Chapter 2
Excellent chapter; thanks!
Several good laughs, like:
"Use the word squished more often in general conversation."
"repeating himself redundantly"
'Course, you had to go and ruin a perfect thing by using *$@! French. I ran Google Translate on all the phrases and the result came back: "Pretentious". ;-)
Wolf470 posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 5:20am for Chapter 2
I LIKE this story. With Harry being more pro-active, he's doing much better. Please continue as able. No I don't think that this chapter was boring so please don't put yourself down.
coo_eee_mate posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 5:20am for Chapter 2
Forget about Fleur... go Gabrielle, let them wait a few years until she is older like your other story. Quick and light hearted is awesome for this story.
oneone posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 5:18am for Chapter 2
nice work in this chapter, specially the dragon scene, i liked the psychological (?) view, . good to see this in a fic. I hope you continue writting this fic and if I have to wait a couple months for chapters as good as these first two, then i'll be patient.
94caddy posted a comment on Friday 14th May 2010 5:14am for Chapter 2
Great chapter. Loved Gabrielle. Cant wait for more.