Alex13 posted a comment on Thursday 26th January 2006 3:22pm

Very good. Very touching. Over all well done. I could see the diferences from what you write by yourself, but I havn't read Kokopelli's stuff, so I can't say anything about him.
Other than that, there's nothing left for me to say, except that I liked that little jibe or whatever at your Harry/Gabrielle fic, which I hope you intend to finish.

Alex out.

lap10 posted a comment on Thursday 26th January 2006 1:54pm

Touching finish to the trilogy, and a nice use of the concept of imprinting. I cracked up at the Hope reference. Great work as always, for both of you.

Mrriddler posted a comment on Thursday 26th January 2006 12:41pm

This is an awesome story, no doubt about it. A bit too bittersweet at times, but that's life is it not? The dawn is darkest before sunrise, eh? Wonderful piece of fiction. Great dramatics.

And I actually can not believe you guys managed to work Sammy into it somehow and made it realistic enough that most readers aren't puking. The baseline concept you drew for this union is borderline perverse, but given how it's written and portrayed, it's quite romantic and (I think) acceptable.

Lucia Depenhart posted a comment on Thursday 26th January 2006 11:17am

Absolutely charming!

irile posted a comment on Thursday 26th January 2006 11:17am

I loved this fic. Congratulations to you both. English is not my native language so I apologize in advance for any mistakes.

I read the three stories and considering I like H/G, I loved what you did in all the stories. The three of them are incredibly written.

when I finished reading "These Dreams" I was a little unhappy with Harry not knowing about Ginny's condition... I think that in a way Ginny was selfish but then I re-read "Alone" and then I was more confused. I got the idea in "Alone" that Harry knew what was happening with the people around him. He certainly knew that Hermione was pregnant and that Ginny wanted to talk to him after the flag game. Then, didn't he felt or knew that Ginny was ill?

About Sammy I loved her and liked very much the ending because is not conclusive. Personally it is a little disturbing for me the age difference but liked very much how the story was developed. Good Work.

I look forward to reading more from you both.

thanks for a great reading

Laura

Kokopelli replied:

Harry certainly knew that something was wrong, but no doubt attributed it to the depression that had hit Ginny like a ton of bricks after the two still-births.

As to the age difference - my brother-in-law is ten years older than my sister-in-law. Now that he's in his 40's that's not such a big deal. Samantha is 25, Harry is 45 - with luck, Harry has more than 100 years of life left. When he's 160, no one will care that his mate (if they marry) is 140.

Victor1 posted a comment on Thursday 26th January 2006 10:36am

at first, i wasn't too sure about this, but now that i finished it, im pretty pleased.

nice job.

it was a mix of many emotions for me.

very very well written.

little schildi posted a comment on Thursday 26th January 2006 10:00am

Beautiful plot, beautifully written-What more can you want in a story?
Great work!

physis posted a comment on Thursday 26th January 2006 8:17am

i liked this conclusion a lot. especially ginny dying - i'm not a big fan of hers.

however, the only thing i have some reservations about was this bonding thing at birth. it makes it sound so forced, instead of sam being in love with harry for being harry - and changing her little girl crush on the one adult who treated her as an equal into something much more perverse.

that's the only bone i've got to pick.

Kokopelli replied:

You're thinking like a mammal.

Biology is destiny - or so I've been told.

AK posted a comment on Thursday 26th January 2006 7:56am

That's sad. and Ron is wrong it was her right to die the way she chose, well maybe a warning would have been nice...

Joe Ritter posted a comment on Thursday 26th January 2006 7:25am

You both are always amazing the pants off me.

I loved every bit. From the pov from Sam and her insights and thoughts on all the events to the play on "Hope", "Faith and Charity" and Ron's level headedness evaluation of Ginny's decision and cutting to the heart of the matter with Sam. Also, I enjoyed Auntie G's sisters remark.

My hat's off to both of you. Well done! (the pants are already back in place)

Kokopelli replied:

Be careful, with no hat and no pants, you may well catch cold, or in the very least, be ticketed for exposure.

Adrian R Brown posted a comment on Thursday 26th January 2006 6:53am

I have to say that this is one of the most enjoyable pieces that I can remember reading. Nicely done.

Jack B Nimble posted a comment on Thursday 26th January 2006 5:54am

Nice. That seems to be the best word that comes to mind -- very damn nice.

Sammy plays out very well, and Ginny comes off much better than in the previous part -- she didn't actually seem a good choice for Harry in that one. Though I am still undecided about this being in the H/G section.

Also, the break in the emotional stuff, with the attack on the cartel, extremely satisfying! Good timing and good use of the scene.

As always, thanks for all the hard work and thanks for sharing the results.

Leticia posted a comment on Thursday 26th January 2006 5:51am

That was very good. I had this idea when it first started that Samantha was going to end up being a surrogate mother for Harry and Ginny, which would be a sort of reflection of the plot of "All Night Long", but it ended up so much better and sadder than that. Harry and Ginny's grief is very well done, and for once I really appreciate the unresolved ending.

Philipe posted a comment on Thursday 26th January 2006 5:27am

I really really like this Tim.. It was very sad, very profound, extremely mature.. The level of depth in this story was incredible.. I think, that emotional wise, this was one of your greatest work so far.. The pregnancy problems, the illness, Ginny wrong way of dealing with it.. Sam's toughts as the story progress, it was a very interlaced plot.. The feeling behind this is very profound.. This was great.. Congratulations Tim..

P.

Tumshie posted a comment on Thursday 26th January 2006 5:15am

brilliant

Adam posted a comment on Thursday 26th January 2006 4:06am

Well written, and wonderfully told. well done to all involved in this story.

ichtys posted a comment on Thursday 26th January 2006 3:49am

That was effing brilliant. I loved it.
Thanks for sharing.
~Ichtys

Ben Russell-Gough posted a comment on Thursday 26th January 2006 3:27am

All in all a very interesting story, this trilogy.

It was an interesting move, writing this last chapter mostly from Sammy Weasley's POV. It should have been a clue for what you were preparing and I did suspect when it became clear that Ginny had some kind of incurable sickness.

Am I the only one who thinks that you are deliberately satirising your own work, "Hope" in that bit when you have Hermione, Gabby and Sammy bad-mouth the book "Faith and Charity"? That was a nice move. Those who are incapable of self-mockery, when needed, have too much ego to be in the creative writing business.

You also deserve congratulations for daring to leave the end unresolved. For once, no one (not even Harry) comes across as entirely blameless. There has been too much selfishness and too much self-deciet by too many people. Real life tends to be like that.

BenRG's Rating: 8/10

A suggestion: List this under "Harry/Multi" so that the entire story can be read from one index page.

Kokopelli replied:

Kokopelli here:

The parody of Hope was intentional.

When you have two strong willed authors collaborating, you reach some interesting results. I wrote a different ending to the story, but was gobsmacked when Jeconais used my opening lines to end the story, leaving things unsettled. I really liked what that did for the symmetry of the story.

There is an epilogue that ties up all the loose ends, but it's not quite ready, so you'll see it in a day or two.

Ashwin posted a comment on Thursday 26th January 2006 3:23am

Man, where in the world do you get the ideas to write such stuff??
Absolutely mind-blowing and possibly the hallmark of Jeconais' works.

Also not to forget John with whom you have written this with.

Sammy's depiction in this fic has really taken on that of a seven year old kid when at that age as well as the necessary maturity further in the chapter.
Seriously this is covering an aspect of Harry's as well the influence of the Trio, so to speak in a never before seen kind of way. The best part of the fic in my opinion.

Ginny has shown to be both the idol for Sammy as well as "villain" near the end with the suicide is a point which sort of truly shows human nature.

And good play on the words by bringing Hope into this with the
Faith and Charity bit.

Top draw stuff, and congrats on flushing out such awesome stuff.

Cheers
Ashwin

Kokopelli replied:

Actually, this story is 75% or more Kokopelli - Every time when Sammy is narrating in the first person (exept for the very end) it's Kokopelli. The long Harry-kicks-cartel buttocks scene is 100% Jeconais. The three girls chatting scene and the funeral scene were Kokopelli. That being said, Tim tweaked and added to my scenes and I did the same to his scenes - the mark of a true collaboration.

Ginny's death wasn't really a suicide - she wanted to die sooner rather than later because she didn't want Harry to be alone when she was a mindless husk. To that end, she flirted with danger, hoping that fate would finish her off, but when she returned from Auror strike missions, she was truly thankful to be alive for another day - hence the routine she worked out with Harry.

Ginny welcomed a violent death because it spared Harry the lingering death - but she didn't die by her own hand.

unrealitycheck posted a comment on Thursday 26th January 2006 3:10am

Wow, what a fantastic ending (er, it is the end, isn't it?)! I especially enjoyed how you wove 'Hope' into this episode. Maybe 'White Knight, Grey Queen' as well.