By Jeconais
Reviews
Full_Pensieve posted a comment on Tuesday 29th November 2005 12:54pm
I'm very much enjoying Hope. Wasn't sure that I would - just as Hope!Harry acknowledges, the age difference comes within spotting distance of the edge of squickiness. It's a very clever exploration of Veela-hood, the nature of love and friendship, and a host of other things. Your original characters are solid - Gabby's parents are a little in that too-good-to-be-true category, but still engaging and ulti-layered in contrast to Harry's WKGQ prospective in-laws. Hope!Harry particularly stands out to me - despite his obvious power, he shows more flaws than your prior versions of the character, and his weaknesses are more defined. I like that; it's humanizing. Gabby is an ironic heroine for you, when set next to Jeconais!Harry's other paramours. She's the most physically perfect of the lot, but would seem to be the most conflicted. Her oscillation between instinct and reason is well-played and very interesting. This is your best work, IMO.
Cheers,
Mike [FP]
Bea posted a comment on Tuesday 29th November 2005 6:22am
At last, I got to read this beautiful story, been VERY busy lately and I have to actually read it during breaks in my work. There's not much I could say that has already been said in the digests, but, just let me tell you that it is plainly and simply a beautifull story, and a joy (like your last name, lol), to read. Thanks for writing it. :)
Harold posted a comment on Monday 28th November 2005 7:51pm
Great peice of work. Far from being upset with your rewriting of Arthurian legend I like the way you adapted it to your purpose and still held some of the base truth to the whole situation. Congrats.
michael posted a comment on Monday 28th November 2005 5:25pm
Wow. this is potentially one of the best stories i have ever read. it belongs right up there with dakaath in terms of writing skill, character development, and plot. you are able to make what is usually a boring genre of harry potter, that is to say, post voldermort, and make it interesting as well as turn me onto a new pairing. in order to be perfect two things need to be perfect. malfoy needs the everloving shit kicked out of him, and while i understand the need to prolong it for plausibility, they need to get it on. great story, please post soon
BJH posted a comment on Monday 28th November 2005 5:18am
"The Goblins were fond of turning their enemies’ femurs into daggers," she said clinically. "You’ve been carrying that chip around in your shoulder for years."
So, are you saying that Harry has spent years carrying a chip on his shoulder?
BJH - who can't resist a bad pun.
Manatheron posted a comment on Monday 28th November 2005 12:44am
... Actually depending on which author you believe, the story you told was reletivally correct.
Happy thanksgiving yourself, this is yet another chapter in the masterpiece that we reviewers humbly refer to as 'Fanfiction'
Please Keep up the excellent work!
RaphaelYervantian posted a comment on Sunday 27th November 2005 9:08pm
This story is incredible. And not because it talks about a guy falling in love with a girl.
Potter has never really had a childhood or been really unconditionally loved.
Gabi (that's how my french canadian family shorts Gabrielle) is allowing Harry to experince being a child again through her - she is giving him back the childhood he never had.
At the same time her veela-ness means she's really at least as mature (if not older) as she is in the way she thinks and reacts so she's able to give him stability at both ends of the scale which is what he's always needed and other girls simply wouldn't be able to provide - he's always had to be the responsible, strong one.
Which will teach him to love/heal - He's always been like a house with no foundation - but through the bond and being with her he's feeling what its like to be a kid - filling in the missing bits.
She's repairing him.
I don't know if you meant it this way or not but that's what I'm getting from it.
Really cool
Patches posted a comment on Sunday 27th November 2005 5:21pm
Wow! What a great chapter. Makes me feel like I did the night I finished HPB. "I want the rest of the story now!" This is so great. I really am enjoying the interplay between Harry and his friends who really know him and of course with Gabrielle. I can't waite for them to fly Beaubatons to Hogwarts. That is going to be so cool. I wonder how you are going to handle the stuff with Draco and Snape. I want to see the comuppance for Dumbledore, Snape, Draco and Trelawney plus "Professor Idiot!" I would love to have Gabrielle put Draco in his place. Maybe something with some Veela power plus some dueling spells that she has learned from Harry! I've also thought of Harry possibly saving her from a fall in a Quidditch match at Hogwarts. Of course Snape and Draco would try to make Harry look overprotective. Just a couple of thoughts but you are the writer and I am eager to see what you come up with.
I hope your update soon. This is turning into as good if not better than TMW.
Thanks, for writing, Patches
hedwig_edwiges posted a comment on Sunday 27th November 2005 9:54am
Nice idea! I haven't read anything like that before and I'm really like it. Keep on!
AK posted a comment on Saturday 26th November 2005 4:29pm
Hey I got one question do you or do you not speak french? oh and does ur name come from french? it almost sounds like: I know... in french
ichtys posted a comment on Saturday 26th November 2005 3:59pm
Hi Tim.
Now I'm awake (sort of) I'll leave a longer review. Great chapter (as always), I enjoyed the relationship between Gabby and Harry. It is nice that he has more debth to his character than many of his friends suspect, and that he is willing to show this to Gabby.
I can't wait to read some serious Ferret bashing. Snape and Dumbledore bashing wouldn't hurt either, but I have a feeling that Dumbledore needs humiliation rather than bashing.
I must say I'm impressed with your writing skills. I don't think there are many fan-fic writers that could make a relationship between a 16yr and a 22yr old work; but you have pulled it off so far.
Question: Will you include Hagrid in this story (Hagrid / Olympe is indicated in HP5)
I look forward to the next chapter.
Ichtys
SNOT (Small Non-essential Omissions or Typos)
"Sure," Fred said easily. "This is Harry, and if there we’ve learnt anything over the years of extremely profitable partnership and friendship, it’s that he doesn’t ask things like this lightly and there is going to be a killer story behind it."
Shouldn’t it be:
…and if there /is anything / we’ve learnt over the years of extremely profitable partnership and friendship…
"And you saved the sister of that hot Veela," Oliver added, a little redundantly. After all, Harry had yet to see a Veela who wasn’t hot.
?? How did Oliver know Fleur was hot. He graduated the year before, and to me it sounds like Oliver is telling a story he saw first hand.
I want you all of you to know the truth,
Should be: I want you all to know the truth; or: I want all of you to know the truth.
She shook her head softly. "No, the bond was there, and it did its job. You were never comfortable around other woman and so you never fell in love like a normal person.
??Don’t know why, but I "feel" like it should be women in stead of woman. If I’m wrong, I apologise
About Gabby’s healing: How could she heal the scratches on Harry’s back when the nullifying shield was up? He needed to turn it off so she could heal the deeper wound in his shoulder, but I thought the shield would prevent any form of magic to make contact with his skin.
Christopher Angel posted a comment on Saturday 26th November 2005 7:57am
This is great, really, but I don't feel it's up to your usual standard. You're being awfully heavy-handed on the Snape/Draco/etc bit. It's a bit like Star Trek: TNG and the 'message' - you don't need to beat us over the head with the fact that something is rotten in the state of Hogwarts.
MysterioX posted a comment on Saturday 26th November 2005 4:04am
lol "Trelawney" there's a first for me, I like it.
Can't wait for Hogwarts, loved the Gred n' Forge interaction you write them very well. My fav chapter of the fic this one.
Can we expect another update before the next 7 days are up? Don't break the update cycle
Dotty Yeung posted a comment on Saturday 26th November 2005 3:42am
Absolutely fantastic! Can't wait to find out what happens next.
Fate posted a comment on Saturday 26th November 2005 1:20am
This was just lovely!
Well done!
And thankyou for sending me an email telling me of this story being updated!! :D
Maxennce posted a comment on Friday 25th November 2005 11:09pm
My God, sooo didn't see the idea of moving the entirety of bueatubaxtons to Hogwarts, that should be very interesting to explain, and to add to that, the plan that Trelawny, Snape and Malfoy are having. Just whats happened to the harpy, she's gotten way way worse. Loved the mini golf scene (thats what we call it here), that was hilarious. Keep up the great work tim, really looking forward to what you have planned next
Cheers
max
Tahlia posted a comment on Friday 25th November 2005 9:42pm
This chapter was soooooooo awesome and romantic. Youre writing keeps getting better and better. The whole date and King Arthur background was written really well. Please dont do the cliched and have Malfoy break them up with them only getting back together in the end. If anything let Harry smash him and Snape, just dont seperate them. I can't wait till you post again, it's become my fav :)
dstorres posted a comment on Friday 25th November 2005 8:31pm
I actually liked last chapter better (over all) but this one is very well done. I am eagerly awaiting the next update.
Jorge Manuel Soruco posted a comment on Friday 25th November 2005 8:03pm
One of the most inspiring chapters you wrote, in my opinion. I ´m a fan of the Arthurian legend and your version is excelent, I never Liked Lancelor anyways, to morally weak to be a great knight.
Kepp Writing
Jorge Manuel "Pendragon" Soruco
popecow posted a comment on Tuesday 29th November 2005 1:18pm