Drake posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 11:26pm

I decided to sleep on my thoughts, before I took another crack at the entire chapter. Like, in the past, other of your works I've reread I have found underlying tones that I did not detect at first. I originally thought you were aiming at Kate dating Harry, but, I saw, like normal humans, that she was caught up in the moment. It's wonderful to see interpretations of Harry other than the all powerful guy who always gets the girl. Too often authors like to say"...and then the attraction was unbearable, before Harry swept up [redacted] into a kiss and they exclaimed their immortal love for each other". It's nice to see that everyone is overcome by their inner demons, and that inner strength that keeps them at bay is what keeps people moving forward. I can't wait to see what happens next, and can only hope it's as great as the rest of the story.

I like how self assured Harry seems, but what really sets the story apart, is at what price he had to pay to gain his self reliance and assurance. What mosts people fail to understand is that not everything is black or white, everyone has demons to battle with, and it seems Harry has issues like everyone else. The dark undertones to Kate and Harry help move the story, while at the same time drawing sympathy. My eyes watered a few times on my initial reading, and thats not something that happens often.

So, Kudos Jeconais, best chapter yet.

starkid posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 8:32pm

I'm really sorry that you're life has changed dramatically, and I hope that you're alright and coping in the best way you can.

I just wanted to say that you are quite possibly the best fanfiction writer I have ever seen, and quite a bit better than a few published authors I've read. I've read all your published stories, and there has yet to be one I don't like. Your stories are the only ones that I'll read if I don't agree with the ship, simply because I love your writing style and the humor (or sometimes heartbreaking sadness) and intricacies you implement into the stories astound me. I don't even care about the time between updates, as it gives me an excuse to reread part if not all of the story.

What I'm trying to say is, I love your stories, and I hope things start going your way.

Sweetdoggie posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 8:26pm

Lovely update. Great story. Thank you for sharing your work.

Silly_Billy posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 8:26pm

You know, I don't think you could mess this story up if you tried!

Fighting, Dancing, Sexual Tension...it's all so...MAGIC!

Zicou posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 6:16pm

So Awesome....

I loved it :)

Can't wait for your next one,

Continuuuuuuuue,

Z.

Kanzid posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 5:54pm

Thanks for another nice update.

While the update was enjoyable paticularly the reasons behind some of Gabrielle's actions, and the glow in the dark paint. I found the chapter on the whole to be a bit waffley as if you could cut a large portion of it and still tell the same story. Oh well, looking forward to the next update.

Anne Acosta posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 5:30pm

So very happy to see an update! So very sad to have to wait a couple of weeks!

So sad for Harry to have killed Snape in that way.

Harry, as you've said in your author note, does at last have something that is totally his - his ability to fight without magic. I think he really needed this for his self-esteem. Hopefully, he'll see himself in a better light and gain more confidence as a person, not in the same way his other lessons have gone.

So happy Ron and Ginny (a.k.a. Twit and Twat) haven't been in this story. If they do show up, please destroy them utterly.

That's what I call those two. If I ever write a story, I'll include that.

Anne

dogbertcarroll posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 5:20pm

Excellent chapter. Love the way things aren't so cut and dried and as always the little girl who views the world in a rather primal way that everyone else over complicates.

Slytherin66 posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 5:14pm

A very good chapter.

Dumbledore present was a surprise he always seemed so passive, but I can now easily picture him telling his deputy he had Ministry business only to go off and watch other competitions. I wonder if Dumbledore can place a bet with a bookie on Harry or with the Goblins next time.

It was a good point that usually when Harry wins its a team effort, I think he would like to win on his own and prefer it to team sports.

I wonder if a kiss from Gabrielle can fix Harry’s eye like the scratch he had in the first task.

A good point about intimacy and some interesting insight into the Veela and the myths surrounding them, but I so hope Harry ends up married to a Veela as they are such interesting people and would make a fantastic counterpart for Harry.

Brilliant names Crusher, Nasher and Thrasher.

Some good banter between Harry and Sirius and a good point about Harry poor childhood.

I liked Iain it was good of his to talk to Gabrielle and make sure she was happy and not feeling left out.

"I wouldn’t object." And the last time she had look on her face, Gabrielle was conceived, and I needed a week to recover!" both funny lines.

A very powerful moment between Fleur and Harry I hope she will start to warm up to him more as I so love Harry/Fleur and it comes with the bonus of making Gabrielle happy as Harry will be around.

Sirius is right Harry is impressive to make a Veela blush and to not get slapped.

The thoughts of Gabrielle was a nice change of pace and an interesting and unique perspective her conversation with Fleur was enlightening. A brilliant line ""All this knowledge in your golden head without the understanding needed beneath it." Fleur sounded wise and a bit like a mother. I wonder if her mum used that line on her when she was young.

A great line about Harry being like stone, it was well done and very cool.

I am pleased Gabrielle got to spend time with just Harry and that Harry was told he was loved as he rarely ever is by someone who means it absolutely. Harry carrying Gabrielle is always a good thing as it gives such a sense of closeness, safety and belonging which is not often found in the world of Harry Potter.

The fighting was good but not my favourite part of the story but it was different and something not usually done in fanfics. A good and valid point about Harry escaping his parents shadows being a Potter is both a blessing and a curse given the legacy and expectations that come with the name.

I look forward to the next chapter and thanks for this one.

Lise-ann posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 5:10pm

Awesome to see another chapter. Glad that things are settling down for you as well.

Crys posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 4:43pm

Okay, Mr. Myagi. Hot hand massage, thing.

And all the Veela fanon cliches crash and burn. Good and bad about that. The cliches can be used to make stories (which you've done well), but won't fit in well with this one. Glad you're going this route here.

> "Was he really that bad?" > "You know the answer, but you ignored it." That answer doesn't work in many fics, but here, it does. The way you've portrayed both Harry and AD makes it work. Whether AD would suspect Harry (before or after that comment) is another question, but not worth pursuing unless it becomes important later.

Huh. Makes sense that the dance clubs would sell the jars of glo-paint. Never really thought about it. And just saying that proves I've never been there, I'm sure.

Personally, I think you over-did the dance club scene. Too many people, too much money, everything went too perfect (though the bouncers helped). But you have stated that you unabashedly write fairy tales, so it's right in line with that.

That Gabrielle and Fleur scene was good. Gave us a view of their different psychologies. Fleur may well be right. Gabrielle is right, from her point of view, but as you mentioned, she's only 8 and so her worldview is different.

Good to see Fleur recognizes the core of darkness in Harry. She might actually make the right choices for herself.

Personally, I don't think any of them are right for Harry. Or, rather, none of them are right enough. This Harry won't be able to settle down, or at least what normal people consider to be "settling down". Sad, maybe, but as he is, I don't know what personality would fit with him.

But that decision is yours, not mine.

Loving the story. Thanks for writing.

Katsuhito posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 4:42pm

Great, as always! Loved the whole tournament, especially as I train in martial arts too. You presented it in such a way that it wasn't too wordy (as some people do, to "show off" their knowledge), but still had enough description that I could fill in the rest and picture it in my mind.

Also liking the rising ... tension? .. or whatever with Kate and Fleur. Or rather, within them both. Still not sure which way you're going with that, although I have my suspicions.

Anyway, I look forward to the next installment. A couple weeks? Wow. Nice (projected) update speed. :)

Lee Dickie posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 4:20pm

A cracking good take on the group moving towards adulthood.

Hoping you have a better new year.

Lee

Princess Fictoria posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 3:35pm

I thank you for yet another amazing update. I hope Kate and Harry realize that they could actually work together. They remind me a bit of Mel Gibson and the prostitute from the movie Psyback. I hope that life is treating you well. Thank you again for your hard work and God bless you and your family throughout the coming year!

Nights_Silhouette posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 3:17pm

A nice chapter, keep it up.

KuilanVampire posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 2:48pm

Man, I'm going to be waiting these couple of weeks for the next chapter. I love this story and I would love if Harry and Fleur got together. You haven't written a story that is solidly romance between them. Thank You for writing, I hope to see the next chapter as soon as possible.

Bilypt posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 2:22pm

Wonderful chapter! And Harry and 3 women awesone!

epsilon posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 1:18pm

I really love this story. Great work.

Will we see the Dursleys reaction that day? I would think the local paper would carry a story about the championchip. Long term that will cause some problems, I imagine. Would some of the local politicians call to meet with Harry before the World Championchip? Would Grunnings ask Vernon to bring him in for a visit (and some free press)? Not sure how big kickboxing is in Britain, but it sounds like things that would happen.

Anyway, I love Gabrielle and everything to do with her. Very well written. The nightclub scene was great as well, but teasing us with Harry and three gorgeous girls and then having all of them head home to their own bed. :(

lol :)

I can see both Katie's and Fleur's perspective though. And the characters are better defined than in almost any story I've read, fanfic or book. So I'll accept the disappointing outcome.

Thanks for sharing and I'm really looking forward to the next chapter.

ghanima posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 1:08pm

I'm thoroughly enjoying how you're developing the romantic relationships. It's nice to read about uncertainty characters are facing, feels very realistic.

Zamia posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 12:06pm

So wickedly interwoven relationships between the 3 women and Harry and now Gabrielle coming onto the scene, surprised Harry knows which way his backside is pointing. Excellent read. Cheers.

Z