By Jeconais
Reviews
Ian Major posted a comment on Friday 24th March 2006 8:19am
Okay, I have re-read this story four or five times now, and I really really want to read the rest of it. Hope to see more soon! (in case you didn't guess, I love this story).
Jacey posted a comment on Wednesday 22nd March 2006 1:24am
*squee*
more wild horses! :D:D:D
can't wait to read the next chapter.
ShadeHawk posted a comment on Friday 17th February 2006 7:45am
Let's play what special powers can Orb of Isis give Xander. But let's not forget that he has one ordinary eye, which on the minus side means that all extra visuals somewhat lacks depth perception (although mind can and does join image from both eyes, making 3d visualization), especially without image from the ordinary eye (e.g. in total darkness). On the plus side this means that Xander would see (well, without depth perception or with lesser depth perception) even if Orb of Isis is somewhat neutralized, like magic supression field (for bionic, technological artificial eye this could be strong magnetic fields). It sould be good if the extra visuals were not translated into ordinary vision, like false-colors in some astronomical images.
What can be reproduced by technology (and please, do some research): 1.) infrared (heat-sensing), which includes lower infrared emitted in abundance by human body, and which can be detected through thin walls and doors. 2.) light-amplification, which allows to see in low light and very low light conditions (including color vision in dark). 3.) ultra-violet, which probably wouldn't help much besides being pretty (colors of supposedly plain white flowers). 4.) detecting polarization, which helps to reduce glare from light reflected e.g. from road or glass, and with detecting south during day, when sun is not visible due to clouds cover and we have only ambient light. 5.) microwaves, radar and radio range probably wouldn't help much without having source of said radiation: well, one could probably detect police radars when pinging, wireless access points, perhaps active cellphones and old-type high-power active bugs; probably physically impossible but could be use nevertheless would be detection of electric lines, at least if there is current flowing through. 6.) X-ray (roentgen) is useless without source of radiation behind the object.
Magical and beyond image enhancing: 1.) Aural sight like e.g. in Journeyverse or The Crusade, perhaps allowing to detect chronical drug users (weak aura), demon posession, ghosts etc. 2.) Magic forces and ley lines, allowing to detect magic users, spells being cast, curses and magical items etc. 3.) Anatomy/Demon library/weak points detection: ovelay showing weak points (like groin, kidneys and solar plexus in humans) in demon. 4.) Chi/lifeforce/muscle tension detection, allowing to predict hand-to-hand attack, or pulling a trigger.
Other ideas?
ShadeHawk posted a comment on Wednesday 15th February 2006 7:40pm
Aaaaargh... leaving at cliffhanger like that. Update, update, please!
ShadeHawk posted a comment on Wednesday 15th February 2006 5:59pm
It's nice to have author who knows a little bit about hacking, and knows about Linux (and LKML). But I don't think that one would choose twm as a Window Manager. It is lacking major features, written as an example of WM in bare XLib, and not really low on resources. I would think that one would choose WindowMaker, Blackbox/Fluxbox/Openbox, IceWM or FVWM or some other less known Window Manager, but not twm!
And it is Firefox, not Firebird from some time now. Although... which year the story takes place? First was Mozilla, then browser only version appeared under the name of Phoenix, then the name changed to Firebird, and shortly after to Firefox.
ShadeHawk posted a comment on Wednesday 15th February 2006 3:29pm
Buffy believes Spike has changed and is on the side of good without any doubts, and without any testing, like for example courtship. Marriage without (re-)dating? And did they checked that Spike truly has soul? Converts (true) are great, but you don't give leading the organization to new convert, even the most zealous one; it is just not done. It is strange that Buffy believes Spike over Dawn, without trying to check facts first.
Well, it is strange to read Spike portraited in such a way, after reading some time ago "A Watcher's Son" by Clea Saal, where Spike is needed part of the team, and is actually pulled from some kind of Heaven.
Hmmm... it doesn't help that I haven't watched "Buffy: the Vampire Slayer" series at all, only read some fanfiction?
As in Buffyverse the technology and science is much more advanced, perhaps Xander could get artificial eye bionic implant, for example with thermal imaging added. As to firearms agaist vampires, I wonder how would buckshot (like Slaser Safety Slug) with combined hard wood (like ironwood, hickory, mahogany, ebony or oak), blessed silver, blessed lead or incidentary ammo fare. Or modern shoulder-cock crossbow (or repeating crossbow). Or water pistol/rifle filled with holy water, with garlic extract and some silver component added (this in addition is totally human safe, as opposed to stakes - see Faith case). Or magnesium flare or other UV projector (good approximation of sunlight).
Oh well, back to reading the story...
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ShadeHawk
RedPhoenix_2k3 posted a comment on Thursday 9th February 2006 1:41pm
Wow! I must admit that this isn't any of the pairings that I thought about while the series was airing. Guess I was thinking of Dawn in the same way all the other characters were, like a kid. I really like this fic. The build up between Xander and Dawn is believable the way you write it and they seem to attract the right friends.
The only thing that I have any qualms about is the way Xander is almost too perfect. Don't get me wrong, I really like Xander expecially since he was the only 'norm' of the Scoobies. It's just hard to imagine Canon!Xander being this Xander.
Like I said, other than that, great fic. I just wish there was more of it. Any plans to continue?
Chris King posted a comment on Monday 23rd January 2006 6:35pm
i love this story so far wish it was stil going would love to see it finished. This si the first BtVS story i have read that i liked i am going to continiue to teh rest of your BtVS stories now.
Quizer posted a comment on Monday 23rd January 2006 5:25pm
No matter how often I read this story, I'm still as addicted as ever. Did I mention that I've never seen a single episode of Buffy on TV? It's writing skill such as yours that can make people read this stuff despite that.
...Peter, James and Harry being the original owners."
Three names, and all of them familiar from the other type of fanfiction you write. I wonder if this is coincidental. Is it? :D
I also noticed a spelling error in this chapter that you might want to correct.
"Sorry, last track of time." (Ian)
It's probably supposed to be 'lost track of time'.
You might also want to check the various stories for inappropriate apostrophes. Contrary to popular belief, pluralization does NOT require the addition of an apostrophe under ANY circumstances. I keep seeing this a lot, weirdly enough especially from people who write really good stuff, like you. I had to remind 'Bobmin' of the same mistake already and I think I saw it on one or two other stories from this site network. WHO THE HELL TAUGHT YOU THIS?!!
I strongly advise you search for the keyword " 's " through all your documents and remove whatever issues of pluralization apostrophes you may find. Honestly, it hurts seeing this kind of n00bish-looking mistake in an otherwise perfect piece of work.
thanks
Quizer
black_kitten34 posted a comment on Monday 23rd January 2006 2:17pm
dear lord, this was the most well written story I've ever read excepting kinsfire which i know is done with taste, yours is just the same. I look forward to the next chapter.
xiera posted a comment on Monday 23rd January 2006 11:21am
Very nice, and very addictive...
This is one of the only Buffy fanfics that I've read that I really enjoy. Please update soon, the wait is killing me. =P
Tildessmoo posted a comment on Friday 6th January 2006 12:28pm
You know, the Orb of Isis is starting to remind me of the Eye of Hazimel (or Hazimael (which, incidentally, is Arabic for "The Betrayer")). Might you be one of the lucky few to have read the Vampire Clan Novels? I miss Anatole. Though he wasn't _quite_ right about the Queen of Apples.
I thought Willow was smarter than that, though. Judaism is between five and six thousand years old. The basic animism, druidism, etc. on which Wicca is based are prehistoric, yes, but Wicca itself is only a couple of thousand years old, and Wicca as practiced today doesn't bear as much resemblence to the original religion as Judaism does to the religion of the ancient Hebrews (though both are much closer than Zoroastrianism; just a tidbit).
Tildessmoo posted a comment on Friday 6th January 2006 11:39am
I love this story so far! Keep it up (and I notice you switched from calling Xander a "brunette" to a "brunet;" as a fluent francophone, I must say good for you!) I'm quite interested to see where this goes, and also to see how Dawn lands Xander in the end. And how Spike really feels about Buffy; even with all the betrayal and Betrayer stuff he seems to care about her, if not her friends. Only one problem I see: Glock, eww. Cheap, jam every tenth shot, no stopping power. Xander's Sig doesn't just look cooler, it works better, and a decent Colt, S&W, Baretta, H&K, Llama, Pheonix, Desert Eagle (they don't _just_ come in .50 cal), etc. outperforms without outpricing by too much. Sorry, my father and brother are such gun buffs I couldn't help but pick something up. But, really, talk to a cop who was around when their department switched from whatever they were using before to Glock 9mms; they'll tell you how much they suck in comparison.
Nigel Wood posted a comment on Monday 19th December 2005 1:07pm
OK - for some reason I thought that really good BtVS fanfic had gone the way of all good things (although I could argue that BtVS never attracted the quality of authors that Xena did).
However, it seems that I was wrong - because you have worked your magic on this genre with the all the skill you always demonstrate in the Potterverse.
So "Thank You" for a really high class story with a very neat premise. I loved the chracterisations - although I did spot the odd bit where Dawn/Cordelia channelled Daphne and Pansy (os is it the other way around? afterall Cordy is still the best)
NIgel
ThunderGod posted a comment on Friday 16th December 2005 12:51am
only a couple more chaps?..and no update...nooooo well..I'll have to sit back and wait..only for a while..cause its good..its twisted the base storyline and made it distintive and enjoyable.
ThunderGod
Exarikun posted a comment on Thursday 15th December 2005 9:08am
Please finish this! I wanna know more about the Orb and see how X finally gets together with Dawn. Wanna see Kennedy crash and burn too.
Willow seems to be on the good path again, lets hope she sticks to it. About the binding of her powers, will it be a system that allows certain people to release parts of her power when she actually learns some discipline? sort of like, a seal or bind that takes into account her full power and divides it into 20 equal parts. then, as she learn discipline, either andrew, xander or dawn can release on of the parts. that way, willow can, eventually, use magic again, but it's pretty much assured that she has the know-how on exactly what she's doing... just a suggestion.
hope you update soon.
Arkeus posted a comment on Sunday 4th December 2005 9:48am
shudder.
A lot. Hum, you really have Fallingtotemptation!willow. Too bad. i have jumped a few chapter that i will read later, so i don't know if she is planning something with kennedy and has turned all bad, but... But it seems you preferred powerless!willow, at least magicaly wise. You have done a whole new team, havenn't you? Good work :-) a bit scxary, though.
Arkeus posted a comment on Sunday 4th December 2005 8:20am
shudder. Seems like you don't like spike, willow, and buffy... or atl east in htis fic :p well i'll see how it goes, but for now it's a difficult read-as i never cared much for girls having cruches on older people nor for dawn, as i mostly know the first few season. oh, and i like willow. Though she was badly done in the end. :/
Arkeus posted a comment on Sunday 4th December 2005 3:53am
ouch. Seems like buffy and spike aren't in your favorite list lol, maybe things will get better. Am a bit disappointed in willow though.
Scott M posted a comment on Sunday 26th March 2006 12:16am