LordSia posted a comment on Thursday 16th December 2010 12:49am
Great fic, though I somewhat disagree with the blurb. You may not have had them jumping straight into bed, but you did slap them both with Cupid's arrows. Not to say that it wasn't good, but I feel it could have been slightly more... Tense. More drama. The mental link, for example, should not have been - it was a poor tool to cut through the tension of reuniting with his old ex's. And Dawn's sudden rise in the social hierarchy? Why? While I can understand the general idea, the whole series of events felt ridiculously unbelievable - far too artificial.
On a different note, you have a tendency to drift off into technical specs when it isn't necessary - "machine guns with armour piercing ammunition" works, you don't have to specify calibre and manufacturing number. When they argue about cars or weapons, then it's okay, because it is *in character*. Speaking of details - more on the surroundings is never a bad thing. Neither are descriptions of the characters - if only to reflect on how they've changed since they were last seen.
Over all, love it. keep up the good work.
louisjventer posted a comment on Friday 5th November 2010 10:25pm
this is awesome.i love this when will u update pleassse
NuitTombee posted a comment on Friday 5th November 2010 4:13am
I feel sad that it's not complete but it was great while it lasted.
I do hope that you come back to it later but if you don't I'm still grateful for what you did write.
I hope the other Buffy stories are just as good.
yrlastin posted a comment on Friday 15th October 2010 10:17pm
Please continue this story pleeaaaaseee
jessicanewby posted a comment on Sunday 10th October 2010 4:32am
Great introduction to the story, the only thing I might change is the scene where Dawn sees Spike and Buffy kissing, because all of a sudden she is frozen and then she is asleep while they have sex, so there needs to be at least a line about how she goes back to her room before they have their conversation.
jedsa posted a comment on Sunday 3rd October 2010 11:55am
This is my favorite BtVS fanfic out there, and I do hope that we get to see the chapter or two left to go at some point. :)
Darak1 posted a comment on Tuesday 28th September 2010 8:07pm
I admit this is not the first time I read through this fiction and this isn't the first time that when reaching the end I get to thinking that I wouldn't mind seeing those one or two chapters you believe are needed to complete it.
This fanfiction still rates among the very top of what I've ever read in the Buffy verse and I somehow can't help but hope that you either have those missing parts somewhere on hard disk or if that is not the case that one morning you'll find yourself with the inspiration and drive to complete it.
Korisovra posted a comment on Tuesday 3rd August 2010 7:41pm
I would love to see the ending on this one. I rarely enjoy BTVS, but you've written an excellent story with this one. 2 more chapters...
Chris1 posted a comment on Thursday 10th June 2010 2:17pm
So I finally get to join the "Pleasepleaseupdatethis!!" bandwagon :D Really enjoying this story :)
kcgx23 posted a comment on Tuesday 4th May 2010 2:18am
Love it, more please:)
qbotu67 posted a comment on Sunday 2nd May 2010 12:03pm
WHERE'S THE LAST 2 CHAPTERS???!!!!
grey_shadow_horse posted a comment on Saturday 24th April 2010 4:27pm
Lovely fic! I love the way you write Xander and Dawn.
Jace_Black posted a comment on Tuesday 13th April 2010 3:38pm
THis is fantastic...THanks for posting!!! Its amazing!
Please post more soon...
darthme1011 posted a comment on Sunday 4th April 2010 6:19am
Finish this Please Very Very good fic
Hikage posted a comment on Thursday 1st April 2010 3:36am
Great story. I've really enjoyed reading it. I've read it several times in the last two months. I'm curious when the next part is coming? If it is.
Jim_xinu posted a comment on Monday 29th March 2010 5:59am
I never watched Buffy, so I'd never read this before. Since then, I've picked up enough bits and pieces from other fics to have a basic Buffy clue and decided to give it a try. :-) I enjoyed it a lot, thanks for sharing it with us.
Addlcove posted a comment on Tuesday 23rd February 2010 12:03am
just re-read this again, still hoping you will find the inspiration to finish it at some point :)
Charles Goodroe posted a comment on Thursday 18th February 2010 6:51pm
OMG I am soo hooked on this stories what will it take to get more? cookies brownies? cash perhaps?
darthloki posted a comment on Wednesday 17th February 2010 8:44am
Great. :) Can't wait for the next chapter.
I love fics where the others see the errors of their ways re:Xander. He always seemed to get the short stick, and yet he had the most potential.
wataru posted a comment on Thursday 11th February 2010 12:15am
Please, finish this story. it is the best dawn/xander story i have read.