By Jeconais
Reviews
Junky posted a comment on Thursday 17th November 2005 9:07pm
Wonderful chapter! And with John's beta note ... I can't wait for the next chapter!
mjc posted a comment on Thursday 17th November 2005 8:55pm
Damn!
Bethany posted a comment on Thursday 17th November 2005 8:27pm
Whoot!
I'm really enjoying this! I love what you've done with the Delacours, and how you've characterized both Harry and Gabrielle.
Awesome story and I can hardly wait to see where it leads next.
Thanos posted a comment on Thursday 17th November 2005 8:10pm
Great work, i hope you can update soon.
Darksama posted a comment on Thursday 17th November 2005 8:05pm
Amazing! Once again I have been enthralled by one of your stories. By the gods I can't even begin to describe the undeniable power that this chapter has. I won't even attempt to do so for it would fall short of the truth. Saying that I can't wait until the next chapter comes out. Until then keep up the great work.
Lon Huey posted a comment on Thursday 17th November 2005 7:48pm
Wow. Just......wow. I think I might be falling in love with Gabrielle.
Chris King posted a comment on Thursday 17th November 2005 7:30pm
your beta is evil you dont leave us cliffy he does
ridmania posted a comment on Thursday 17th November 2005 7:06pm
awesome buddy it was aweosme!! keep up the great work!! cant wait till the next chapter how long will it be until you put it up?
Sean Melton posted a comment on Thursday 17th November 2005 6:44pm
This is one of those stories that I wish would never end.
Bravo.
Philipe posted a comment on Thursday 17th November 2005 6:38pm
Just waiting then.. A good story, not your best, but a good story.. Let's see what is behind door number 6..
margaret1 posted a comment on Thursday 17th November 2005 6:18pm
I really enjoyed the quidditch tryouts, and Harry and Ron being drunk — I’m glad he is friends with Hermione and Ron again, he showed a great deal of maturity in accepting their apologies, and moving on; and letting them know that if they did this to him again — their friendship would be over.
She punched her pillow a few times; she really didn’t like this taking-things-slow business.
I loved this line *laughs*
I really like that the relationship has shifted a little, and now Harry is going to be the aggressor (privately). I enjoyed them dancing, it was an intimate moment between them and I loved when they were having dinner and Harry took Gabby’s hand in his — it was a sweet moment.
Margaret
Gardengirl posted a comment on Thursday 17th November 2005 6:16pm
Tim, this was indeed fantastic, as usual. John, you're a dreadful tease and should be flogged with a wet noodle.
Looking forward to chapter 6 and wondering where it will be set!
Michelle
Arnold posted a comment on Thursday 17th November 2005 6:11pm
Err isn't it engaging the brain before speaking rather than engaging the mouth since that constitutes the same thing? Or are you saying that he shuts his mouth so he can't speak.
Alan posted a comment on Thursday 17th November 2005 6:05pm
I really am enjoying this story. I enjoy the way you move the story from place to place. Your descriptions are so vivid, they really pull me into the scene. Can't wait for the next chapter.
Gayla posted a comment on Thursday 17th November 2005 6:01pm
I just have to say that the descriptions of the dance scene were mesmerizing. I could feel the sensuality of the scene and picture it as if I was watching a movie. Wonderful. I am really enjoying this story.
makileus posted a comment on Thursday 17th November 2005 5:53pm
Damn, and you are going to make us wait. Out of curosity, how many chapters is this fic going to be?
Jack B Nimble posted a comment on Thursday 17th November 2005 5:40pm
Just... wow. You have such a great touch, managing high romantic moments without the usual soppiness.
Your approach to Ron and Hermione is very interesting. I find it hard to believe that the Ron I don't much care for at this point would turn out that good... but that is neither here nor there. Hermoine I can easily see making that kind of mistake, as much as I like her.
As always, I thank you for all the hard work, and for sharing the results.
Jack
AzureSky posted a comment on Thursday 17th November 2005 5:25pm
Wow, great chapter as usual. It's very romantic...
I always love to read your stories.
Keep it up.
Scott Hawkins posted a comment on Thursday 17th November 2005 5:18pm
Wow - what a chapter.
I love the way you've portrayed Harry in this, going from what seems to be a down in the dumps 15 year old in a 21 year olds body, to someone who knows himself and his life, and knows what he wants to get out of it, despite his past.
As for Ron and Hermione - I think you've portrayed them both very well, especially Ron, who you've added a whole new perspective to his character in his understanding and dealing with Hermione about Harry’s relationship. You can definitely see Ron's inner chessmaster coming out, and it’s been superbly portrayed.
Hermione is still Hermione, just a little older, though no less tenacious in what she wants, and in this chapter you've shown that despite growing up some, she's still got a few flaws that she's yet to overcome.
It shows how far Ron and Hermione’s relationship has come when, while drunk, Ron can still remember what he’s been told about swearing, and that Hermione has a bit of a kinky streak with a nurses uniform. Given how they’ve grown up in this, you can tell that it’s very much a mutually beneficial relationship.
I've lurked about in the Yahoo! group, and from the many, many posts about how this could have easily become a Dark!Harry fic, you've written all those possible plot-paths away with a degree of craftsmanship that most fan fiction writers can aspire to.
Kudos to you, Jeconais, and a nod in well deserved respect to your beta team too.
Gerry Pochel posted a comment on Thursday 17th November 2005 9:13pm