By Jeconais
Reviews
BJH posted a comment on Friday 25th November 2005 5:06am
Hmmm - The way you describe Gabriel's feelings and obedience is almost like that of a house-elf. Joyful servitude. I wonder if that is the reason the Delacours employ a human staff rather than use house-elves?
I am enjoying this story tremendously and can't wait another week for the next update. Thanks for the efforts.
BJH
Jamie46 posted a comment on Friday 25th November 2005 4:43am
That was a great chapter; once again you deliver in full. I loved how Harry's friends got all protective over him...and now the Twins are corrupting the Beauxbatons youth! ;) hehehehee. Awesome. And I am ALL FOR Harry sending Beauxbatons to Hogwarts! ;) hehehehe. Ohhhh yeah.... :( Damn, Severus and Draco are gonna cause problems, that much is obvious. Why isn't Skeeter in jail, or exposed? Because she makes a wonderful plot device, I know. ;) lol. I wonder how people will react to the Mating--b/c y'know that Skeeter's gonna report Harry putting the moves on Gabrielle, and then the Mating will have to come out... let's just hope that Harry's ready for it when it does. (I'm getting visions of Gabrielle breaking the bond b/c of all the bad publicity her love is getting, and Harry being so upset about that that he actually recreates it... :) hahaha, now *that* would be interesting... and telling, so I won't ask ;) lol) Thanks again for such an awesome chapter, and, really, for such an awesome site in general.
brad posted a comment on Friday 25th November 2005 3:46am
Very nice!
With the whole spiel about King Arthur and Merlin I was starting to think that this was going to end up with Harry & Gabrielle going back in time or something. Just being silly; as I recall Merlin's lover was an enemy and ultimately his downfall? And anyway, Merlin's body lying there put paid to that theory, I guess.
Gabby's healing Harry was very nice; very symbolic that he'd let his guard down and trust her like that.
I can't help but feel that the spell that Hermione knows that "gets around" his nullifier field is going to be important later on, levelling things up a bit between Harry and Dumbledore and co. Harry's Achilles heel? Just my paranoia.
The big setup between Harry and Snape/Draco due to ... Sybil Trelawney's feeling that her prophecy was thwarted? I can't help but feel that that's very anti-climatic, a very weak reason for any major fireworks that might take place later on. Which prophecy anyway? Wasn't she predicting his death on a weekly basis up until the end of OotP? Still, I would have expected skullduggery from the Slytherins simply because of their enmity of Harry, regardless of any external motivator like Trelawney. I just felt that her inclusion was a bit awkward and unrealistic.
A couple of grammar mistakes that I stumbled across in my reading. Plus my mozilla 1.8b to a HP 8150 laserjet didn't do quite as good a job as normal in printing this latest chapter; the spaces between words where one was italic were deleted in the printout (i.e. "aaa iii" would be printed as "aaaiii" where 'iii' is in italics) and some sentences were right up against the right-hand margin line, sometimes the final character even crossing over past the line into the margin. Just a problem with mozilla? 1.8 is the latest version but I appreciate that I'll have to move over to Firefox eventually; maybe my Christmas project, hope the final 1.5 is released by then. Thanks for the chapter!
ulkser posted a comment on Friday 25th November 2005 3:08am
ummm... well. it was good. ok here it goes. i know harry is "god" in this fic or some people use super power term. anyways but please he must not be able to resist her when she does so much to please him.
that being said, i like it. take care jim.
Adam posted a comment on Friday 25th November 2005 3:04am
Another great chapter, this one had me in stitchjes at times, especially after bringing the twins in lol. I do find it interesting though that Harry was blaimed for the purple hair incident by that teacher. As for Draco he is a slimy git and it will be fun seeing him shot down by Gabby.
Terry Swain posted a comment on Friday 25th November 2005 2:42am
that was a great chapter.
Ann F posted a comment on Friday 25th November 2005 2:05am
Lovely. I am addicted to this story now. Love that DD is a baddie, as well as Harry the grown-up.
Alexander1 posted a comment on Friday 25th November 2005 1:47am
Alright, I'm trying to come up with something intelligent to say....But I can't.
All I can say is that I like the story A LOT and I hope to read more. There were a few spelling mistakes but nothing that can't be looked over.
Also, I liked your twist on the Arthurian legends. Never really liked Lancelot, anyway. Always thought he was a poof.
M. Kearney posted a comment on Friday 25th November 2005 12:07am
Excellent. This story just keeps getting better.
I'm really enjoying a tale with Voldemort out of the picture. Without that aspect gone,this reads like a good old fashioned action/romance; and that is one of my favorite things to read.
Great work.
Prince Charon posted a comment on Thursday 24th November 2005 11:55pm
Wow! I like it. A lot.
You're very good at this.
Thank you for the update. More soon, please.
TheGimp posted a comment on Thursday 24th November 2005 11:54pm
Happy Thanksgiving!!! THANK YOU for this gift.
James Rayner posted a comment on Thursday 24th November 2005 11:28pm
i love it u are in my opinion one of the TOP fanfic writers out there
Los posted a comment on Thursday 24th November 2005 10:28pm
great chapter, im loving it how you are making this relationship work...and having harry being compared to merlin and him behaving the way he does with compliments is great...cant wait how this story ends...
Lia posted a comment on Thursday 24th November 2005 8:31pm
thank you for updating
that was a fantastic chapter
i love the merlin story and the crazy golf
very nice additions to the story
i look forward to reading more!
Meg posted a comment on Thursday 24th November 2005 8:19pm
There is nothing I can say to start this review that can express the depth of emotion you pulled out of me.
As usual, I laughed and I got teary......but wow......Jebus.......as I said in my last review I didn't think after WKGQ you could do better......
That last line, Tim......"He was no longer alone." It pulls something from me. Not only images of an 11 year old Harry in front of the Mirror of Erised in PS, but the feelings I have from my own upbringing - knowing as an adopted child that I was /never/ alone due to the love and acceptance of two people who wanted a child more than anything else in the world. /That/ is what your relationship between Harry and Gabbie is bringing me in this story. It's not so much the angst or the drama just so much as the fact that it's /there/.
I've always known unconditional love from my parents (and have never felt the need to seek out birth parents), but what you've written perfectly expresses that "what if" factor as well as the warmth and acceptance of simply KNOWING that the love is true and that it's solid and protecting and not going away.
A beautiful chapter. Just heartbreakingly and heartliftingly beautiful.
Meg
WNabors posted a comment on Thursday 24th November 2005 8:01pm
Whoot!!! These chapters are really rolling the story along. The interaction between Harry and Gabby is thrilling to read. WNabors
Lon Huey posted a comment on Thursday 24th November 2005 7:34pm
Just. Absolutely. Loved. It.
This is why HBP was a little of a disappointment for me. You are taking the characters into ways I just love. HBP was okay, and I'm sure it follows her outline, but what you do with the characters, it really is magic. I'm not squeeing like a fan girl here, I almost quit reading fanfiction due to the asinine writing most people pass off. This is good. You REALLY have a talent. This is believable, given the characters, and even the stuff you've made up is great. I buy it. I would buy it, were it necessary. Now if you knew me well, you would know that's the highest compliment I can afford, no pun intended. I spend money as though it were my own blood. A little Scottish heritage goes a long way.
I will anxiously await the next chapter.
And...Thank You, very much.
Lon
Samantha posted a comment on Thursday 24th November 2005 6:59pm
HAPPY THANKSGIVING!!!
THANKS!!!
Crys posted a comment on Thursday 24th November 2005 6:56pm
"French is one of the most romantic languages in the world, yet you sound like you’re butchering a pig when you speak it."
*laugh*
"Throwing me to the lions?"
*snicker* We'll ignore that all the English wizards in the room were Gryffindors . . .
"Why did you not just Summon the egg?"
*laugh* I've toyed with the idea of a ficlet that gives quicker answers to the tasks. Glad to see someone else had the same damn answer to that one :)
Ah, so we have Gabby's story of what AD said. And he DIDN'T mention the merpeople. Where he DID mention to the others (didn't he?). More "manipulative AD" proof.
"when the idea came to me to Mate to him"
*sigh* We still don't know if that was a natural thought or if it was forced on her. And you're being amazingly tight-lipped on that count, not to mention all these chapters that don't give a solid answer either way.
"Good-looking? I’ve got a pet frog that is good-looking, but I wouldn’t compare her to Gabrielle."
Wonderful way with words, George, wonderful.
Nice touch with Nev.
"... she would wait here, for as long as it took, for him to come back to her. At some stage she was going to have to explain the phenomenon to him, but not today."
Hmm. An obedience clause in the Mating . . . We first heard how this affects him and the ultimate "downside" to her. Filling in the remaining blanks makes this sound worse and worse for her.
Ah, it's comforting to see that miniature golf exists elsewhere. Of course, the parent game WAS invented in your neck of the woods . . .
[An evil smirk forms.] Oh, we get to watch Gabrielle utterly destroy Malfoy? *wicked grin*
"It’s going to get better than that?" He felt a little awed.
"If you’ll stop talking about it and let us do it again."
*snicker* Damn, gotta love that "I instinctively know what he wants and do it" Veela trait.
Yeow. Helluva ending. I'm actually kinda surprised he didn't say anything. No, I didn't expect an "I love you, too", but maybe "I'm starting to love you, too".
BJH posted a comment on Friday 25th November 2005 5:18am