Hope
9 - London
By Jeconais
Reviews
Sam3 posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 11:07am for 9 - London
Yes!!! an update, you are one of my favourite authors and the fact that we hadn't heard from you in a while is slightly sad. Very good chapter, and definetely worth the wait, it was long, well structured and intersting. You actually feel part of the story!!!
Very well done
Asad posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 10:51am for 9 - London
An excellent update to Hope.
I thank you for sharing this wonderful fic with your readers. The betas have done an excellent job.
YOu covered quite a bit in this update and I eagerly await the next part which would close this masterpiece.
Liane posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 10:41am for 9 - London
Well, you know you are very frustrating, don't you? I can't think of anything to say about this, other than I love it (like all the chapters, it isn't very original). The professors match was wonderful, and seeing Malfoy get his due was very good. I'm now eagerly awaiting to see what will happen to Snape (there are some fics where I like him, like TMW, but here, he deserves anything he gets!). Please, keep going on like this.
Liane
hyper_swain posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 10:39am for 9 - London
it is crabbe not krabbe other than that it was another excellent chapter!
mjc posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 10:37am for 9 - London
Actually, Tim, since it was part of spoken dialog, the think/thing is really a non-issue. You are 100% correct, people do SAY it that way, so writing it as someone's dialog is perfectly valid.
Now...
WOW! WOW! WOW! WOW!
There was so much in this chapter...
Where to start...
The heck with it, great chapter!
Only one slightly disappointing item...she didn't do "The Amazing Bouncing Ferret" Act 2, but the "Transvestite for Hire" sign was a good substitute.
The use of Fidelius during the duel was truly inspired.
And I eagerly await what is coming for The Bat...
carlinonthebrain posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 9:58am for 9 - London
fabulous work, as usual. I espcially enjoyed the ferret bashing. your harry is as devious as they come, and that is the best kind IMHO. I hope the next one is not so far off, but i understand that real life gets in the way of updating. congratualtions on another stellar chapter
t_gebhardt posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 9:27am for 9 - London
So you have Sybill Trelawney as the evil mastermind and true seer behind the scenes? Well that is a novel approach, as far as I know.
Ben Russell-Gough posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 9:16am for 9 - London
Well... That went as well as can be expected. There is, after all, no enemy weaker than the one who has come to believe he is invulnerable and, therefore, has no need to try. This fault has clearly brought Snape and Malfoy low.
Malfoy... well, after casting and unforgivable, he has nothing to lose, so he will be back (probably for the last time) with an idiotically spectacular attempt to kill Harry and/or Gabby. If Snape doesn't have an embolism and end up in St. Mungo's Long Term Care ward, I will be a surprised man.
Who would have ever thought that Trewlaney would be the main threat? Such as she is. She is aware that Harry is a national hero and, as a Veela, Gabby's mating to him has all the legal power of a marriage, isn't she? Maybe not. After all, doing the honourable thing is foreign to her so she has probably got a problem understanding why anyone else should do it.
Both the duel and the Quidditch match were very well-written, not sacrificing dynamism for detail. Looking forward to the wrap-up.
BenRG's Rating: 8/10
Meteoricshipyards posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 8:37am for 9 - London
Oh, wow. That was great. Wonderful action, story progresses, you got two Quidditch games in (it was wonderful getting the great Griffindor team back together!) The duel was fantastic! I love it when Draco gets his nose rubbed in it. And his own quidditch team, interesting.
Lee Jordan's commentary - excellent. Harry's manipulations - perfect.
Evil foreshadowing! Great!
Thanks so much for writing this.
Tom A.
Terry Chang1 posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 8:36am for 9 - London
it took a while and was worth it. i'd rather read a polished piece of writing. i'd also like to say that the beta didn't really take very long. it's not like 6 months went by before you said it was done and the betas finished with it. geez, i'm married and have a baby on the way, i barely make it to my computer every week as it is.
love the story. that's for granted though. really like observation that Susan made. Love the idea on the new team being formed. very curious as to what Snape's doing to Dumbledore. here's to the next chapter.
Paul Dueck posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 8:29am for 9 - London
Congrats on another great chapter.
The only (useful) comment I can make is that at certain parts, I.E. Ron's fairy tale speech, the dialogue is a little stilted. I have noticed this a lot in your work, and it does not bother me all that much. It just seems that in certain areas the story in does not flow organically, instead of allowing the reader to draw their own conclusions about the characters, they relapse into something different, into being a medium of the author to speak.
I would argue that that kind of synthetic idea insertion only occurs in a few kinds of places in your stories. First, you seem to insert it when you are talking about the love of your characters for each other, or their strength (magical or personal), or their craftiness. Often times the dialogue is totally unnecessary, as you set up the story in a way that the reader could draw those conclusions on their own.
Those segments of the story are not bad, just awkward, as it feels like the characters are explaining the story inside of the story. You are still one of the best authors in the entire HP Fan-fiction community and I love your stories.
Please update soon
Paul Dueck
Tumshie posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 8:20am for 9 - London
Just to add to the debate, 'you've got another think coming' is probably correct,yes it's bad grammar but so much spoken English is. Rendered another way it is, "If that's what you think, well think again"
Tumshie posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 8:12am for 9 - London
What can I say,
We are not worthy,We are not worthy,We are not worthy,We are not worthy,We are not worthy...
A fantastic addition to your story, when a story is as good as this it is a reflection of the time taken to write it and tweak it until the author is happy with it.
Who cares how long the updates take if we get quality writing like this
Quizer posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 8:11am for 9 - London
Whoohoo! Finally!
Heh. This story is still as fun as ever. I liked the duel best, there are a lot of creative ideas in there. Harry starting his own Quidditch team is a fun idea, too, and I didn't see that one coming. I guess that one more chapter will finish this story. Keep up the good work!
Quizer
bluephoenixfire33 posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 7:56am for 9 - London
Absolutely fantastic!!! I wanted to be able to give a balanced review, but all I can say is WOW! That was brilliant and completely worth the wait. Thank you so much for your wonderful work.
patsh posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 7:53am for 9 - London
This continues to be my favorite piece of fan-fiction. Absoluetly wonderful.
"I don’t want the world, Gabby," he whispered. "I just want you."
Made me sigh like a hopeless romantic.
andy redfearn posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 7:52am for 9 - London
fantastic as always, HOPE that chapter 10 isnt months in the making.
Harry2 posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 7:45am for 9 - London
good story. i know that the next part will be as good. trelawney is going to get her just desert as well as the ministry and the prophet. a) it isn't an affair and b) she is and adult and an assistant professor. this next chapter will be very interseting.
Carnivean posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 7:43am for 9 - London
Hey another wonderful chapter, this story is one of the best on the web :).
An unique pairing with a good background story, a believable plot and a lot of humor mixed in, i like it :).
Rick Gale posted a comment on Friday 12th May 2006 11:48am for 9 - London