Jason9 posted a comment on Sunday 5th June 2016 6:04pm

I enjoyed this one - definitely saw the influence of 'Pureblood Princess' buy thought the society was a little more realistic. Very interesting to see a different take on how Harry just being a 'normal' kid could have made a massive difference. All it took was having some real friendships for everything to change. I think the story lacked a real villain, which is fine because so did canon. And fanfiction has come up with every possible way to make Voldemort somewhat credible, and also every conceivable way any sort of competent person could defeat him - it's not even really necessary to re-write them again. Anyway, good, fun story, good new characters (although they were all a touch on the similar side) and always great to get new stuff from you! Thanks Tim!

freetraderbeowolf posted a comment on Sunday 5th June 2016 5:23pm

Well I really enjoyed this one. When I got to the point where Riddle lost his spiffy new body, I at first felt it was to easy, then I realized that the club and all the hard work that went into it for Harry and the others was the real reason behind Riddles defeat. As to this being rated Mature I am not sure it deserves that rating. I found the material rather clean more like a PG-13 with maybe flirting with an R for the scene in Malfoy manor with Riddle and the others.

parakletos posted a comment on Sunday 5th June 2016 4:59pm

There's very little being written these days that is worth reading, so thanks for sharing this.

A few typos where its Room of Requirements and not Requirement, but thats a minor quibble.

John Wilburn posted a comment on Sunday 5th June 2016 4:08pm

I really enjoyed this little story, so thank you very much for the time and effort you devoted to the story.

John

deeniebee posted a comment on Sunday 5th June 2016 2:44pm

Loved this, Harry always struck me as the curious sort. And I really enjoyed there being other friends in his life. Ron actually getting a clue was marvelous. And I love love love that Lucius and Narsissa had a squib daughter. I cried hard at how proud she was and his response to her. Lovely story all around!

Slytherin66 posted a comment on Sunday 5th June 2016 2:30pm

A very fun story.

I am glad Harry made other friends as I don't think Ron and Hermione are good ones they are very different and so are their interests. Book Harry had no idea about friendship or how to be a friend. Thanks for giving him support beyond the usual people.

Hermione is not very creative I think she is like Percy good at school work and happy to work somewhere like the Ministry with rules and structure and very little free thought. Hermione never creates or modifies a spell or potion even when we know its possible and she should know why.

Well said "Hermione, I’m allowed my own opinions," he stated firmly. She, along with Ginny, looked shocked that he was answering back and standing up for himself. In the past, he would have let it ride to keep the peace." that sums up the books and the majority of fanfics. Harry does what he is told. I really don't like Hermione anymore she is too much like Dumbledore, smart and thinks she knows best and nobody tends to argue with her.

Well put by Lavender about the prefects being suck ups. They don't seem to do much. I do like Lavender and I think she got badly treated in the books and films and deserved better.

It's nice how Harry gets lots of hugs as he won't have gotten any growing up. Thanks for having very overlooked characters in the story. Harry I think would be good with younger siblings and the first years. I also think people other than Molly would look after Harry better and ensure he feels loved and is cared for.

Good thinking regarding the third task, the ball, how to deal with Snape's lessons and Harry's summer. Harry was in danger or miserable in the books yet did nothing about it and that makes no sense to me.

I loved the line "just as we agreed we wouldn’t use my participation as some sort of recruitment drive" I never liked how the DA was done Harry had to do all the hard work and was in real danger of being expelled, killed by the Ministry or sent to jail. Yet Hermione pushed ahead fixated on getting a good grade for DADA and avoided the worst of the trouble when the club was discovered.

A nice line "Mother thinks that you hung the moon," thanks for having Parvati friends with Harry I think she and Lavender would be good to know and help Harry understand or manage gossip and PR. Also Book Harry is expected to fight Riddle and save the magical world yet he is isolated and ignorant and is not even instructed to floo properly. It's decidedly unfair.

I liked the riddle, that Harry solved it and how, too often Harry has others like Hermione do his thinking for him.

Well put regarding the male to female ratio. I wonder what Slughorn thinks of the club. His Slug club will be losing influence. Harry a facilitator is best as then he can get things done without really adding to his fame, which would appeal to him I think.

I am pleased Harry can be grumpy and not made to feel bad or forced to change because of others. Also that things like maths help make life easier in the magical world rather than cause wholesale change as it bothers me how often the magical world is made out to be inferior to the muggle one and that everything much change to the muggle way of doing things.

Marcus is rather overlooked cheers for including him. I like Millicent too as she often gets a hard time in fanfics. The Carrows are very interesting. Courtship would be a big deal for Harry he needs to continue and secure his line and marrying from a magical family would help him learn about the magical world.

"Whatsisface" how brilliant and apt given his snake visage. Riddle is lucky he is not classed as a rogue magical creature and hunted by his own followers.

Harry the godfather well done I never liked him being lined with Teddy as all it would do is remind him of loss and tie him to the UK. I am pleased Harry can cope with attention and innuendo as he was so timid in the books.

Talks a rarely done or mentioned at Hogwart's in fanfics but its a clever way to inspire interest and ask questions for the students. Learning from a Goblin would be handy as goblin relations suffered badly in the books and would come to cause Harry trouble I think.

Politics is something Harry needs to be aware of as he gets older. It's very rare for politics, debates and options to be discussed at Hogwart's which is odd especially when the students are older. Harry not being Dumbledore's man or linked to him is for the best. I think Fudge and Albus are too closely linked and we know supporting Albus causes Harry problems.

A means to summon help is a good idea, Hogwart's is dangerous.

Very true "Your loyalty is amazing, Harry. But there’s a limit as to how far you should go." Perhaps Harry should have been Hufflepuff I think he values loyalty and hard work.

Well put "Mr Weasley has no incentive to grow up, and Miss Granger has yet to learn that there is more to life than books. Young Miss Weasley revels in being the girl of the family." Ron did not grow up in the boos at all even during a war. I don't think Hermione will change until she is told no and has to deal with failure or rejection. I think she would be happy as Hogwart's librarian.

I am glad Harry mentioned almost being in Slytherin. I think the House would want him in the House for good PR and influence if nothing else.

Squibs are very overlooked I have wondered why the pure bloods did not have more children to secure their line. Draco with a sister is a nice twist and would explain why Lucius did not seek out his master as he would know his children would be in danger for different reasons.

I enjoyed some insight into potion making and runes both are fascinating subjects. I also liked to see a softer side to Lucius. Draco would be a worry, as the heir he could ruin the Malfoy name or squander its wealth if he does not learn cunning and some skills. It might also hurt the Malfoy's that Draco caused Harry to request not to be in Slytherin. The Malfoy's as an enemy does make life more difficult for Harry.

A nice twist regarding Snape's motive and that use of existing laws a power is being used to deal with him. Use of memories is a good idea.

I do like the display of manners and respect as Harry was too much like Ron in the books. Astoria's actions and use of title help add depth to magical culture as well.

Thanks for the charm from the Black library as it always seemed to me the old family knew too much or were to sly to be marked and not have a way to deal with it should it be needed. Riddle risked and lost so much pure/magical blood during his war. It also fits that Regulus would not oppose the Dark Lord unless he had a way to deal with the Dark Mark.

I liked mention of why Lucius needs a cane as that is something I have not read in ages.

Given how rare and taboo the Horcrux is I can see pure bloods being disgusted at their use. The Dark Lord being half blood would be bad but I think being a Gaunt would be even worse given how far they fell.

Riddle falling foul of the wards was a nice touch the practitioners or the Dark Arts would need strong wards and needs power and knowledge to survive.

Switching sides would be something old families would be good at or have a plan for given how long they have existed. Wormtail the sauceboat how wonderful.

I liked knowing that stains are still an issue in magical homes. Memory charms and the mind arts make protective fathers very formidable. I do like the term "beast" also.

I do like Lavender what a fun line "you’re about as subtle as a drunken, love-struck giant" I think it's a very good point about Hermione she is ambitious and Harry's fame will help her and the same is true for the Weasley's who need some wealth and fame badly. I loved what was said and done to Hermione and Ginny both are dangerous to Harry and would not be well liked I think.

The wine is an interesting idea I wonder if the elves would get anything asked or might also want Harry to be happy.

Snape does seem fond of other men's wives. I liked the map I think Harry would want to create a map like his father or add to it. It's a very handy example of magic.

I do like the pairing for Harry it's rare and well done. It's nice Harry is allowed to choose who he supports for Head Girl as often it seems Harry must do as Albus, Granger or Minerva tell him. Wonderful no (love potion) beast in the chest.

A good sum up of Harry's status I like the idea of him being considered pure blood as it will make life easier for him and heir to the Black family is something I always enjoy as they are my favourite family and its better for Harry to be formidable rather than famous.

Very true I think Harry would need time and want a relationship especially now he is cared for and supported so less desperate. I liked what was said about the Dursley's and pleased they will be dealt with and that Harry was not pushed to tell his friends everything. I think Lucius would enjoy dealing with the Dursley's they are exactly the type of muggles he would want to destroy.

Hestia and the popcorn that was brilliant. I wonder if the elves keep want via the portraits and report to Albus.

I enjoyed getting a ladies point of view of the magical world. I am glad the Greengrass family is wealthy as I always thought wealth as an issue and motivating factor for the Weasley's and Harry could be taken advantage of.

Again I do love how Lavender deals with Hermione. I think Hermione likes to keep Harry dependent on her or stupid as a way to boost her own self esteem .

SPEW really would not do Hermione any favours. People who like the elves or value the work they do could make her life difficult.

I enjoy the fun side of Harry it's rare to see it.

A good entrance by Sirius and the Turkish delight was a very nice touch.

I like the parents of Astoria and the line " As if our daughters have been playing the roles of Pure-blood princesses at Hogwarts." Although now I really want a kebab.

A very funny line "Perhaps she felt that the Muggles had stolen her intelligence."

Draco's reports might make a fun one shot and insight into the mind of an idiot. The reports from characters like Lavender would be interesting.

Thanks for explaining why Lucius does not like house elves and why they are kept around. Horcrux hunting left to two muggle raised teens and an oaf of a pure blood was not a good strategy by Albus.

A very clever strategy to discredit Dumbledore.

I fantastic line "Taking legal advice from Sirius would lead to you being arrested as a bigamist." there could be a story there.

Harry flying inside the school is a rare treat.

Good thinking by Harry to keep Lucius honest. If even the Dark Lord thought him slippery he must be.

I am pleased there will be an investigation as Harry's scar could have helped stop Riddle sooner the same with Sirius being given a trial.

Some nice banter with Victoria I liked the description of her too "the scary midget"

A good point about the secret keeper and a good sum up "He’s not a bad man, but not as great as he perhaps thinks" Although I think Albus should lose all power and positions he has much to answer for and is too dangerous to keep around.

Well said about Minerva too often she gets away with just following orders.

I hope Whatsisface is what is used from now on.

A very good line " Of course it wasn’t fair on the rest of the school, but that was the rest of the school’s fault for not being in the Society." as too often Harry has power and privilege that he worked for only to feel bad using it.

I don't like Ron and was glad he and Hermione had minimal presence in this story as I am bored of them. Still I liked what you did with Ron and how he acted had he been this way in the book I would have liked him better. I am pleased there is no Ron/Hermione they are an awful couple.

It's fun to ponder the fate of Draco.

I liked death and thought it a good tribute as an idea will endure even in death which is funny as it is death.

Thanks for this story it was a most interesting and enjoyable read. I am glad you had a good Birthday and I hope you keep writing.

Michael Cornfoot posted a comment on Sunday 5th June 2016 1:30pm

Great story, although I think it was set too early with Harry getting with Astoria - maybe it would have been a little better with him having a relationship with an amicable break up before he and astoria "realised their feelings" and got together

Anya McLerie posted a comment on Sunday 5th June 2016 1:16pm

Such a fun story, with a simple and very appropriate conclusion for Voldemort! Thank you!

pazed posted a comment on Sunday 5th June 2016 12:56pm

Load of fun! Thanks a heap.

Spent at lest five minutes wondering if Victoria was based on the st trinians head girl or Daria (I expect it was neither but I had fun googling awesome Gemma images)

MarcusTrax posted a comment on Sunday 5th June 2016 12:07pm

As always fantastic story.

AlisonK posted a comment on Sunday 5th June 2016 11:13am

Well, speaking as a punter, I think your really long one-shots are awesome. Word economics are over-rated. ;)

Very much enjoyed this, thanks!

Zamia posted a comment on Sunday 5th June 2016 10:30am

Happy belated birthday, ya young pup. Feel as if i was reading this as if it was a negative - everything white was blak and vice versa. Another excellent yarn to warm the cockles. Cheers.

Z

jilumasam posted a comment on Sunday 5th June 2016 10:20am

In one word...brilliant!!! Thank you so much for writing!

William Martin posted a comment on Sunday 5th June 2016 10:11am

Excellent story! Thanks.

Wolfric posted a comment on Sunday 5th June 2016 8:25am

It is great to hear from you. I enjoyed the story. As tough as reaching 40 might be, the alternative is worse. Having passed that milestone 20 some years ago I can assure you that there is some truth in the old addage that every day above ground is a good one. Its just that some are better than others. Thanks for writing. Until next time. W.

Zvoni posted a comment on Sunday 5th June 2016 8:21am

What's wrong in jumping out of perfectly fine airplanes?

i do that every weekend!

on a completely unrelated sidenote: nice story!

Mistress of Potions posted a comment on Sunday 5th June 2016 8:20am

First, Happy Birthday

Second, Yes, Sirius is an awesome wingman and very cool

Third, thank you for another excellent story.

Dezwijger1982 posted a comment on Sunday 5th June 2016 8:16am

fantastic as always!

lostandthedamned posted a comment on Sunday 5th June 2016 8:13am

The best Sunday morning I've had in a long time. Thanks for the great read. Get out there and do more stuff, I've realised that most people are happy just sitting around being "content" with their life. A group my friends is going Tank Paintballing in a few weeks....

corrigan posted a comment on Sunday 5th June 2016 8:12am

Hey love the story just curious question is it done or will you be writing more