Raven69 posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 5:08pm for 9 - London

Viktor trying to keep training on target was wonderful.
Thanks.

Black's Phoenix posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 4:56pm for 9 - London

It is another thing coming, so you are right and no offense meant to your betas here they are wrong.

Not a bad chapter although some parts seemed to progress a little slow for my tastes, but you have the right to write it however you choose as it is you that is writing the fic and not myself.

It will be interesting to see what you choose to do with Snape and Dumbledore as Harry has now significantly changed the situation.

However the whole Cho thing confused me somewhat as you never made a clear point one way or the other. You stated that she betrayed them but then later that Voldemort put her into St. Mungos permenatly. Is it that she actually gave information away to the death eaters or was she tortured, they took the information from her before she snapped, and then put her into a condition that would leave her in St. Mungos, or did she join Voldemort give away the information and then displease him and get put into St. Mungos upon displeasing him?

Call that some musings if you like but it is something that occurred to me as I was reading the chapter.

Overall I would rate it at exceeds expectations as there is room for improvement but there is almost always room for improvement and as long as you are pleased with the work you put out it does not matter.

DAUFahnder posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 4:47pm for 9 - London

As I was one of those who asked for infos on the update, I think I schould at least leave a review :)My English is not one of the best, but I think that wont matter much for you.

WOW
Brilliant chapter, really.
I am starting to think that Dumbledores problems are coming from Trelawney, not from Snape. Has she perhaps given him a false prophecy or something, that makes him act like he does? Anyway, something seems very wrong there. Imperio would not work on him I assume, so there are not many things in cannon that could be a reason. But, of course, perhaps you came up with something different?

I realy hope that ne next chapter does not take that long. But even if, there are only a few authors who write something that is realy as good as yours. So, please, dont stop. And of course, dont let yourself bother by people like me, who ask to often about updates:)

Greetz,
MK

April posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 4:41pm for 9 - London

Long time reader, first time reviewer...

I have no words. That was fantastic. Reading well-written stories like yours and the others on this site makes me want to sit up and slap my hiding plot bunnies into submission.

Your plots are so intricate and exciting that I'm actually jealous. I like how you have this little plot points or story arcs that you tease with at the beginning, before moving on to something else, and just when you think everyone is going to go prancing off into the sunset, you bring it back to make the ride that much more interesting.

Good show. :)

April
arielbrt6@yahoo.com

I know you just finished recruiting new betas, but if you ever do again, I'd like it if you keep me in mind. I'm a writer for a living - writing communications at a major health plan here in the states - and I spend 2 hours a day proofreading my coworkers materials. :) hehehe. my plug for the day is finished.

Again, I really appreciate you keeping up with writing this. So entertaining!

Cuey posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 4:31pm for 9 - London

Awesome chapter Jeconais. TY for the update, it was well worth the wait :D

Nick5 posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 4:30pm for 9 - London

... not bad, if a little late, but it's been well worth it. I wonder, though, just how many pieces Draco's going to be found in? More, soon, please

nostaw posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 4:27pm for 9 - London

I have been anticipating this chapter for a long time and you didn't dissapoint (you never do). Wonderful chapter.

One of the best written quiddich matches I have ever read in a fanfic. I love how you have incorporated your own plays into it.

I was a little worried about that chapter in the middle between Ron and Hermione with Hermione possibly finding a way to stop the bond, but I confident it will all work out fine.

I'm looking forward to everyones reactions when Harry and Gabrielle finally go public (those few who do not know the truth) and how Harry will find out and deal with Trelawney.

Keep up the good work

-nostaw

Tolias posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 4:27pm for 9 - London

w00t

makotochi posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 4:21pm for 9 - London

Great Chapter one of the best in the story. I wonder which auther would be willing to do a one shot drabble or what ever you want to call it. When Ron finds out Harrys quitting the cannons

AK posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 4:20pm for 9 - London

Oh and also the : Ich Bin Ein Berlinner really means, isn't it a reference to what Kennedy (me believes) said?

Mayjest posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 4:18pm for 9 - London

You know, I was hoping to be in bed before midnight today. Then I figured I'd check FFA.net as the last thing I do before I start getting ready. Now it's 1.15 and I have to be awake in 7 hours. I picked the worst time to check this site.

That said, another splendiferous chapter. I love seeing Malfoy humiliated, it always brightens my day. Now he's cast an unforgivable he can be caught and go to hell, I mean Azkaban. I wonder how Harry and Gabby are going to play Trelawny and Rita's articles. I hope that Rita gets exposed at least, it would certainly make me feel better.

lap10 posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 4:16pm for 9 - London

What a wonderful surprise to come home and find! I think my favorite parts of this chapter were "Ich Bin Ein Berliner", Minerva's reaction to her supposed demotion (it's the little details), and the thought of a new Quidditch team... this particular team, of course. However, as usual, the entire chapter was enjoyable, and the story one that I will enjoy rereading, as I do with all your stories.

AK posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 4:13pm for 9 - London

*Cheers* Great story. And really nice chapter.
Though being an American (Canadian) I will refrain from commenting on European food (yuck) *evil snicker*

I am also wondering how Trelawney has actually managed something half workable. And why is Mafloy so stupid?

Is the next chapter going to be the final one? (And are we gona wait for it 2 more months? If it is as good I can wait :))

Oh and also is it just me or is the forum server down?

daven1223 posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 4:08pm for 9 - London

Oops! I hope I didn't just ruin a funny scene later on.

Philipe posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 4:07pm for 9 - London

The site is full.. i accidently close the tab before reviewing, and it took some time to load it again..

Tim, my friend, you're a genious.. You got me shaking.. This will be my first review, so later i'll tell you the things i missed in this one:

The pain from disobeying him been equal to the cruciatus curse was great.. It's logical, and in the right dose.. I was afraid it was going to kill her..

the new team thing.. It's great, because it shows how his ideias come from, and that he really is capable of this ideias that we know he had, but can't follow the process.. It reminds of the moment in TMW when he tell Hermione and Ginny his plan about Wormtail and the M-mail.. And the ideia is great as well

Snape having something to do with Albus problem: It only makes sense in this chapter, not so much on the others.. okay, maybe on the one were he visits Hogwarts to learn about the bond..

The games: Very well written, as only you can makes us "see" them.. The hogwarts game was the best one ever.. i laught my ass off..

the malfoy Duel: It was great, specilay the fidelius part.. But the bond part got me a little confuse, because i tought that harry would be able to hide his pain from her..

Hermione Spell: Why does it look like a sub plot waiting to happen.. Like someone using against them..

As i said when reviewing the Darkness, i love how you've mature in your writting tim. The politicals problems are great, real, credible, and make a lot of sense i the long run, as in what happens as the story progress..

I'm not gonna rate your chapter my friend, but your stile just keeps getting better and better..

To the Betas: thank you for a fine work, Sorry for the for always wanting to read sonner ang bugging you all about it..

Love the work you all put on this.

Philipe.

P.S. - Stupid tornado.. I WANT MY FORUM!!! :P

Jeff posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 4:06pm for 9 - London

Looks like they've got Snape and Malfoy running. Makes me wonder when they're going to wake up to the divivation professors as a threat?

daven1223 posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 4:04pm for 9 - London

Longtime reader, first time reviewer.

Awesome chapter. I could gush praise, but I wouldn't add anything that someone else wasn't saying.

I wanted to comment on your end-of-chapter comments. "Ich bin ein Berliner" is actually a correct way to say I am from Berlin. For examle, if I said, "I am a Parisian," you would assume I was from Paris, and not that I am a Parisian omelette. It works the same way in German.

Here's some more information:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ich_bin_ein_Berliner#.22Jelly_doughnut.22_urban_legend

Carlos posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 4:02pm for 9 - London

oh my god!!!!
I think this has been the best chapter that I have ever read ever!!!!
making your own team, and embarrasing the hogwarts staff and making malfoy look like a an ass, wow!!!!

C. Harris posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 3:57pm for 9 - London

Wow... that was absolutely wonderful. Really liked what happened to Peter.I look forward to reading about the "Godric's Hollow Thunderbolts" or something- honestly, a Quidditch team is brilliant!

Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 3:35pm for 9 - London

Quite the wait, but well, well worth it; thank you very much. *snicker* That last little bit has some fascinating implications as to just how "out of it' Sybill Trelawney really is.

And I quite understand about the beta process taking time all around. It was, however, quite worth it.