The Seeker posted a comment on Sunday 17th May 2020 6:15pm for 5 - Barcelona

This was one of the best chapters I've read in HP fan fiction. Especially in the dance scenes, it seemed like I was watching a movie. It was sensual, seductive, powerful, yet the foundation was Gabby's innocence and Harry's power. Brilliant decision to add Harry picking up on the negatives going on and reporting them for the police to handle. That scene perfectly counter-balanced Harry and Gabby's actions. Thanks for this wonderfully evocative chapter.

Noble Korhedron posted a comment on Friday 6th June 2014 10:15am for 5 - Barcelona

FOR THE LOVE OF ALL THAT'S HOLY, PLEASE FINISH THIS!! It's marked as a W.I.P since 2008!!

AragornII posted a comment on Wednesday 2nd January 2013 5:11am for 5 - Barcelona

Wow...the final scenes, starting at the nightclub, are pretty sensational.

Also really appreciate how grounded and real this has been. Can't when authors start off with solid premises and then go all stupid and have the characters being asses; appreciating both the perceived need for a bit of deceit and the honesty that immediately arose when needed.

Thanks

Marauder Neyo posted a comment on Sunday 1st April 2012 5:03am for 5 - Barcelona

Aww... This was a sweet one.... And I simply love it! :D

Keeroo92 posted a comment on Thursday 20th January 2011 6:04am for 5 - Barcelona

The description of the dance was excellent. I could see it in my head! Well done!

Mihir posted a comment on Friday 30th April 2010 9:11pm for 5 - Barcelona

You know, one has to wonder why the Cannons sucked so much if they have such a rigorous training regimen ... It doesn't seem to fit!

ficbob posted a comment on Saturday 16th January 2010 1:51am for 5 - Barcelona

Great flying class. And a great date.

Concealed Convict posted a comment on Sunday 15th March 2009 6:16pm for 5 - Barcelona

I must admit that at first I was skeptical about this story, but someone recommended it to me and I agreed to read it. i am very pleased that I did; it's an excellent story. The characterisation is brilliant and the dialogue is more or less flawless. There aren't any grammar errors as well, which always helps. It may be half one here, but the only reason that I've stopped reading is that I have to get up at five to catch a flight and I want some sleep.

Keep up the good work
Concealed-Convict

rikfairclough posted a comment on Tuesday 18th November 2008 2:14pm for 5 - Barcelona

This is possibly the best written fan fiction story I have ever read. Brilliant story!

scribbler posted a comment on Sunday 11th November 2007 9:32pm for 5 - Barcelona

Hey!

Of course...I love this story. I've read it all the way through three times. You're a brilliant writer and I'm deeply envious of your skills.

BUT - you screwed something up and it needs to be corrected. You wrote:"
"Specifically, on your relationship with magic. It’s different from anyone I’ve ever seen or ever known, and I will not miss out on the chance to graduate a year early."

It should be written: ""Specifically, on your relationship with magic. It’s different from anyone I’ve ever seen or ever known, and I will not miss out on the chance TO BE GRADUATED year early."

OK - why, you say? it's because it's the SCHOOL that is doing the graduating. We MATRICULATE to a school and then we are GRADUATED FROM that school.

Anyway - it's a picky grammer point, but SO MANY morons get it wrong and you're just too good to be doing it, too.

Regards,

the_scribbler

MonkeyAxman1302 posted a comment on Tuesday 8th May 2007 1:13pm for 5 - Barcelona

Great chapter. I'm trying to find things I liked and disliked to try and be constructive buts its nigh on impossible. Its all so very good. The quidditch try outs; the prefects wouldn't be much use if they've never played either.
I liked how you made Ron and Hermione apologise separately. Harry seemed a lot harder on Hermione but it was justified.
Thanks for writing.
Monkey

Silo posted a comment on Thursday 3rd May 2007 7:40am for 5 - Barcelona

so when do u plan to update this one and post the uther Harry gabby fic

James13 posted a comment on Saturday 14th April 2007 12:53am for 5 - Barcelona

Now that is how you dance the pants off your date. Woot!

haroon hameed posted a comment on Tuesday 30th January 2007 9:29am for 5 - Barcelona

This chapter was really well written

Ben10 posted a comment on Saturday 30th December 2006 11:02pm for 5 - Barcelona

Kokopelli says 'the next chapter will blow you away', but I don't know if I've ever seen a better chapter to any story.

So far, this is turning out to be one of my fav. stories of all time, and I've read an almost obscene, embarrassing amount of fanfiction.

I cannot wait to read the next chap.

Ben

xBizzle posted a comment on Sunday 10th September 2006 2:48pm for 5 - Barcelona

WOOHOO! Harry and Gabrielle take there relationship to another level. Love the nightclub scene. The way to described her was perfect. I like how Hermione got a talkin' to and how Harry handled it. Awesome chapter.

xBizzle posted a comment on Wednesday 30th August 2006 5:59am for 5 - Barcelona

WOoT! Harry/Gabrielle. Even thought I'm a big Harry/Ginny fan, I find this story very good. I also just found that this space is used for leaving comments. Looking for forward for the next chapter....Until then...

darthme1011 posted a comment on Friday 25th August 2006 12:43am for 5 - Barcelona

i love harry/gabby or harry/fleur pairings

Crys posted a comment on Tuesday 25th July 2006 10:32am for 5 - Barcelona

You know, you're just making me feel so freakin' inadequate as a writer with this story.

Certainly not the first time I've read this story, but still enjoying it immensely.

Crys posted a comment on Tuesday 25th July 2006 7:37am for 5 - Barcelona

"like a whisper over the wind"
Hmm. Albus, knowing it would help Harry out in the long run, just implanted the suggestion without any coercion . . . Young and impressionable Gabrielle, who'd just had her life saved, jumped on the possibility.

Or maybe it was Magic herself? She owed him a life-debt, and this was the most immediate and obvious way to pay it back.

Oooh, lots of possibilities. Looking forward to learning which (if any) are right.