OriksGaming posted a comment on Wednesday 24th June 2015 9:04pm

Ok, some dark stuff at the end, and I wasn't expecting that, but this is a fanfiction and she's an OC so I can't really expect to know everything she's gonna do. Sadly, I now have to actually wait for you to post the next chapter. It took me all night(well, 1 am- 7 am approximately) to finish the first 13 chapters, at which point I blacked out, as a side effect of not really sleeping for 48 hours lol. Anyways, so I woke up at 1:00 and finished reading the story. This is all PST btw. Yeah, I'll try to stop rambling now. I'm still loving the story, even though the scene with Kate at the end was a little sad. I've read a bunch of your other fics and I've come to really admire you as a write.Anyways, thanks for writing, I can't wait for the next update, and keep it up!

OriksGaming posted a comment on Wednesday 24th June 2015 3:48pm

Well, that was a surprising ending. I mean, leading up to it, I kind of expected it when he first came across the boy, due to his conversation in a past chapter, but I wasn't sure if he'd actually do it. I'm not that happy that he did, but the rest of the chapter was up to par. Great work and keep it up!

OriksGaming posted a comment on Wednesday 24th June 2015 3:21pm

HarryxAurora happens because of a side plot with a complete b****. Cool. Great work and keep it up!

OriksGaming posted a comment on Wednesday 24th June 2015 3:01pm

Wow, I didn't expect that at all. Can't wait for him with Sinatra or Fleur, I am a male teenager, and so I completely support Harry with a hot blonde. ^_^ Great work and keep it up.

OriksGaming posted a comment on Wednesday 24th June 2015 2:21pm

Yay, Harry's getting together with Fleur! My only comment, short review, I've commented on most of the great things you've done in the story that stood out to me. Great work and keep it up!

OriksGaming posted a comment on Wednesday 24th June 2015 1:54pm

Interesting thing you have going with Michael. I'm not that into slash, so I hope it just stays as a longstanding joke, which I think it will. It would be weird, extremely weird if it went further. Anyways, great work, keep it up!

Hytekrednek posted a comment on Wednesday 24th June 2015 1:33pm

Just wanted to say that I have really enjoyed this story so far and look forward to seeing it to the end. Keep up the great work.

James

OriksGaming posted a comment on Wednesday 24th June 2015 1:28pm

Wow, that food fight was insane. Hey, it's Dumbledore. Let's wave to him! I was... actually giggling the whole time. I don't know how to describe it, and giggling fits the bill, but it's awkward to admit, even in writing. I'm still hoping for Harry and Fleur(I love HarryxGabrielle and HarryxFleur stories), and I would hope for a HarryxGabrielle but that would just be completely and totally awkward and perverted at this point. Anyways, great work, keep it up!

james27 posted a comment on Wednesday 24th June 2015 1:02pm

Somewhere in the back of my mind, I remembered reading this story... I couldn't remember where I read it or what it was called and I've been looking for it for awhile now. This is already a great day just because I can now read this fine work and relax knowing it's been found...

OriksGaming posted a comment on Wednesday 24th June 2015 12:55pm

Wow, seeing Fudge put in his place is always fun, as well as Umbridge being completely put in her place, which she so often tries to rise out of by abuse of power, luckily to no avail. Yeah, really fun chapter, but I'm having too much fun reading to write much more than that. I'm only really writing a review here because it has become a very short term tradition for me to write a review on every chapter of this story ;) Great work and keep it up!

OriksGaming posted a comment on Wednesday 24th June 2015 12:26pm

I keep forgetting to say it, but your twin speak is masterfully done. It just feels natural. I agree with most of what you said during the first part of the chapter, I didn't need the explanation as I understood pretty much all of it, though I'd never thought of it that way with Bill lol. I really want to continue reading so this review was super short(by my standards). I'm still loving the story. Keep it up ;)

OriksGaming posted a comment on Wednesday 24th June 2015 11:57am

Crabbe and Goyle decided to kill their parents and their mothers agree. LMFAO. Beautiful chapter. A lot of humor, some beautiful emotional manipulation(of your readers of course) at the end, and giving Dumbledore redemption, after Harry does something that's actually smart, that he would never do in canon. But still, plausible(I really like using this word lol). I have mixed feelings on Dumbledore but you made me forgive him for all of my imagined slights that he has commited against Harry. Also, your OCs, oh my god. I find myself liking their characters a lot, and even find myself wondering where they are when I think of canon, I've gotten so used to them. I usually hate OCs. As usual, wonderful job, and keep up the fantastic work!

OriksGaming posted a comment on Wednesday 24th June 2015 11:29am

I was a little nervous when you said more adult themes(I am a teenage boy, I'm not entirely nervous about reading them, but I like to share good fanfics, and since most of my friends online know that I'm only a teenager, "extreme adult themes" might be a bit embaressing to share. But reading the story is more than enough for me. I enjoyed this chapter immensely. Not quite as humorous, but it showed a powerful, confident, older Harry(please make him date Fleur now that he's older(again, I'm treating this as if you haven't written the next chapters, maybe I can change the past with my wishing if you haven't made him date Fleur :D), and someone realizing he's powerful, older, and more confident, with knowledge of things far beyond his age, rather than the stories with OP Harry where everyone knows and he acts like a piece of s*** to everyone he meet. I mean, he's not overly welcoming in this, but he's willing to judge people based on their actions, and give them a chance and I like that. Again, great work, I'm loving it, and keep it up!

OriksGaming posted a comment on Wednesday 24th June 2015 11:02am

I'm cracking up a lot with this story, and still loving it. Fred and George's influence is amazing, but still plausible, based on what I imagine they could have done if they were not limited by the contrictions of being part of what was essentially, a children's book series, up until the two final books, which I didn't like quite as much as the rest anyways. Anyways, I know you're already on something like chapter 9 in this story, but in my future reviews, just to make it easier on myself, I'll probably write my encouragement as if you just posted it. You know, still enjoying the story, keep it up, that kind of thing. And I am still enjoying the story, and I'd love for you to keep it up!

OriksGaming posted a comment on Wednesday 24th June 2015 10:32am

I love your stories(Harry Potter ones), and I'm going through them, and I can tell this one won't be an exception, as I'm loving what I've read so far, which is just the first chapter, but I'll most likely finish reading it tonight anyways. The main thing I love about your writing is that you change the course of events ever so slightly in a completely plausible(after thinking about it for a bit) way and I can actually read it without the usual thoughts. "Is the author serious with this? Why is Harry sucking a hippo?(just an extreme example)" I've read a couple of your stories, mostly one shots though, and chanced upon this story. So I just wanted to say, it's obvious you have a lot of experience, I love your writing, and keep it up!

JVTazz posted a comment on Wednesday 17th June 2015 6:53pm

I hope to see an update!! :D

fitzgema posted a comment on Thursday 11th June 2015 2:47am

Hey there! Just wanted to let you know how much I enjoy your story telling abilities. Thank you for sharing your talent. I've read and re-read your stories multiple times, they always make me smile.

Full_Pensieve posted a comment on Sunday 7th June 2015 3:05am

Looking forward to more of this. The complexity just keeps ratcheting up, though, and I know all too well how that can slow down the writing. Bringing in the Russians and the Chinese, plus whatever Jonathan's goddaughter is, and writing out the Polish lady of negotiable affections... and atop all of that, isn't there a self-named Dark Lord lurking around somewhere? ;)

You referred to Melissa as Melissa Cuthbert throughout this chappie, BTW; isn't it Mockridge? I thought Cuthbert Mockridge was her father.

kcgx23 posted a comment on Sunday 24th May 2015 11:57pm

Wonderful. I can't wait for more. Will Kate remove her head from her posterior?

Aries-Antares posted a comment on Monday 18th May 2015 5:47pm

Incorrect - Age of Consent in France is 15 and has been like that since 1945. Before 1945 it was 13, which it has been since 1863, before then it was 11. The only European country with a low AoC is Spain where it is 13. In Germany it is 14. In the UK it is 16 as far as I know, but Gabrielle is french and if the old fanon thing about the magical world being behind the muggle, then the age of consent in magical France would still be either 11 or 13.