By Jeconais
Reviews
Rhyssia posted a comment on Sunday 25th May 2014 8:58pm
Lovely, lovely, lovely. The /only/ thing I could possibly pick at is I think at one point you called Andrew Adrian. Or vis versa. And I am totally looking forward to the rest of the stuff you are plotting out here and elsewhere.
LuxEterna posted a comment on Sunday 25th May 2014 6:54pm
i love you
i just reread this fic and though 'now what it needs is just that someone from little whinging stumbles upon harry's success/girls' but your idea with the fight against dudley is even better and i cant wait to see what happens next (and the reaction form the older guys at smelting that now harry has a third hot girl hanging around him/coming for him)
rey_naldo posted a comment on Sunday 25th May 2014 6:36pm
You can't just dressed up and Aurora and make a cliffhanger like that please update soon this is a great fic and i love it
The Seeker posted a comment on Sunday 25th May 2014 5:45pm
What a fun chapter! Only you could make nearly 15,000 words seem way too short. I was shocked when I reached the end and only hope you have the next chapter well under way. Or something on Harry and Wednesday.
Regardless, thanks for this chapter. Highlights for me included the spot on depiction of an upper-middle class Brit bitch. Loved how the Smelting equals gave it back to Megan, plus an extra amount because she had them then blew it by not knowing when to stop. As soon as you wrote Smeltings, we knew Harry would meet Dudley. Loved how you had Harry dance around him first round, then put Dudley on his arse at the start of the second. Let's hope Dudley is capable of learing the lesson taught, though it's doubtful.
Best of all, though, was Dawn's increasing humanization, as aided by your transcendant Gabrielle. It is my opinion that you created one of the iconic HP fan fiction characters when you wrote Gabrielle in your incredible Hope. Before that, she was an almost blank canvas from canon. This iteration is that one's equal, and there is no higher compliment I can give.
Next chapter promises to be sensational, with Aurora showing up at Smeltings, the deconstruction of the slag Megan, maybe some reaction (growth?) from Dudley, and some kickass kick boxing between Harry, Ben and Ivan, who is an amazing OC.
As always, thank you for your very much appreciated update and for all the time and work you put into them.
WhiteElfElder posted a comment on Sunday 25th May 2014 5:12pm
Dudley is lucky that Harry does have self-restraint, otherwise he would be a pile of bleeding bones. I wonder just how much trouble Harry is about to find himself dealing with when it comes to Aurora?
DizzyG posted a comment on Sunday 25th May 2014 4:44pm
Every time you post a new chapter of this I feel compelled to go back and read the entire thing again. And after I've done that I want the next chapter even more. I'm eagerly awaiting your next efforts - and I may have to finally force myself to catch up on whatever the hell Naruto involves. Ah, too much entertainment and too little time - damn having to work for a living.
WhiteElfElder posted a comment on Sunday 25th May 2014 4:30pm
This is going to be very interesting. I have read another story where Hogwarts manifests a female child's body and call Harry her daddy. In that story the body spends a lot of time learning to be real and then shows up to Harry when she feels she has mastered the skills we take for granted.
Hansi_Rahl posted a comment on Sunday 25th May 2014 2:59pm
good chapter. I'd love to see some ne BtVS stories. There aren't enough out there!
ILikeToRead posted a comment on Sunday 25th May 2014 2:56pm
I can understand Harry's position to a certain degree but he was more than willing to do what was needed to help himself and Hogwarts. Nice bit with Dudley and should be interesting to read how he deals with Megan. Oh, please post your out-there writtings as they are always quite entertaining and enjoyable to read! Thanks for sharing.
GlennCLP posted a comment on Sunday 25th May 2014 2:52pm
You amazing person you! I've been waiting for this chapter and you did not disappoint! It was spectacular, it had length and it had a few curveballs that I wasn't expecting. This chapter did seem edgier than your previous ones but it was still really impressive. Although you did lack a lot of Fred and George in this, I can't recall them having a single line? And surely they would be second in the hierarchy rather than Hermione and Fleur? Nonetheless, I'm really excited for the rest of your stuff! Hopefully Konoha's Legion soon?
gara5289 posted a comment on Sunday 25th May 2014 2:17pm
So glad to seen an update to one of my favorites. I will say though despite how long this chapter was, i don't feel like it made it very far. I kinda expected Aurora to at least show up before the chapter ended and for all the fallout of Harry beating Dursley, Aurora showing up and forgiving Dawn to be next chapter. Regardless of that, i did love the beginning with Dawn.
And ironically, BtVS still has a bigger following then you'd think - or that's how I choose to rationalize being forced to watch season 6 a month ago by my female friends. Seriously, I can handle the early seasons, but i can't stand the latter episodes. Pyscho buffy is as painful to read as she is to watch.
Mike C. posted a comment on Sunday 25th May 2014 2:15pm
I love your stories and am a big fan of BTVS and Harry Potter. I will check out that story if it is up and if it isn't I will when you put it up. I have reread this story at least a 1/2 dozen times and am waiting on baited breathe for the next chapter. I would have liked to see Dudley get more embarrassed by Harry then he did buy I still was lmao over that scene.
Pai posted a comment on Sunday 25th May 2014 1:14pm
The hell? So "dawn" admits to doing what harry wanted and figered was going to happen in the first place. And the rest of the chapter is him freaking out about it?
Do you read your own stuff? The chapters at the start basicly cover potter being aware his ageing faster from screwing around with time.
halhawk posted a comment on Sunday 25th May 2014 12:02pm
Another chapter at last! I keep re-reading this, so it's great to have another update and hope for more soon. Interested to see what happens with Dawn - she'll have a lot to learn about how to cope with her new 'age'. Not sure that Dudley will learn a lesson from the fight, it was all a bit quick, but it could be interesting to see. Sarah Perks? As in Sally Anne Perks? or just a coincidence?
DJPotter posted a comment on Sunday 25th May 2014 12:01pm
Is not Sirius' trial that Saturday?
And I loved IT!
Slytherin66 posted a comment on Sunday 25th May 2014 11:23am
A good chapter but not my favourite.
"Smasher, Crusher, Thrasher, and Nasher" really are great names.
I wonder what kind of wand will choose Gabrielle.
I liked the Uncle Salazar comment and "oily oik" comment.
I wonder where Draco ended up his schooling options should be rather limited now and I doubt his parents would be impressed with him being home schooled.
I wonder if Gabrielle's mother will want a picture of her daughter and Dawn together it would be a cute picture.
A good line "as you sought a way of increasing your power without losing your soul"
A good explanation for the changes in Harry although 6 years is nothing for a magical person given their long life span.
A Veela with hands on hips would be hard to argue with I think. Gabrielle is acting like a wise big sister I wonder what Fleur makes of the changes in her.
A nice twist to involve Dudley's school I am glad Dudley got taught a lesson and that Harry got closure as he really does need it given all that the Dursley's did to him.
It would be funny if Fleur did sleep with a Teddy Bear and Gabrielle had a Harry Plushie.
Some welcome changes in Hermione as she would be hard to deal with blindly following authority and not thinking for herself. She would hold Harry back too Hermione did need to grow up.
I look forward to the next chapter and I hope Harry spends time with Gabrielle and Dawn. Thanks for this chapter.
preier posted a comment on Sunday 25th May 2014 10:56am
not a fan of the huge exposition with dawn in the first part. and a castle not being completely humanly socialized is not a huge surprise ^^
liked the kickboxing part and laughed at the extended "cabal of gay men rules over britain" ^^
good job letting dudley have respectable traits as a boxer and on harry not ripping him apart.
not seeing the point of megan to the story at large, though in the context of someone with everything having wasted it, it's nicely done.
thank you for sharing your tales
asvaldson posted a comment on Sunday 25th May 2014 10:01am
Holy crap! I just want MORE! this is excellent, I always enjoy your writing though.
Patches posted a comment on Sunday 25th May 2014 9:22am
This is a very tumultuous chapter. First Harry finds out Hogwarts has finally found a physical form and then he finds out she betrayed him and used him for her own reasons without asking for his help. That and 6 years of his life. Now Harry is in a fight with Dudley that he easily wins. He has a bitch stalking him and Aurora is coming to save him from the bitch. I look forward to how you work this all out. Very well done. Thanks for writing. p
Bilyp posted a comment on Sunday 25th May 2014 11:15pm