kstchr posted a comment on Monday 24th November 2014 2:16am

Exciting kick-boxing tournament! Some of the rules were contradictory, first saying that it's illegal to kick the back of the head, then in the next paragraph saying it's worth more points to kick the back of the head??????

You're one of the best fan fic writers I've ever read, seriously, so I always enjoy your work. Just watch the grammatical stuff and the spelling a bit more, such as to/too; loose/lose; choose/chose; you're/your -- for these can really make people cringe. I'm sorry if this screams criticism, but my thought is when a writer is as good as you are, mistakes like that just seem all the more glaring. I love your stories, and really hope to see some Harry & Ginny sometime...or a certain one of your steamy Harry/Ginny stories (the one about their enjoying their empty nest) finished, pretty please??? :)

Tlcatlady posted a comment on Monday 24th November 2014 1:55am

Aurora is a deep character and I'm glad you brought her in more for this one. Looking forward to the next update and I hope you have a good holiday season. TLC

kstchr posted a comment on Monday 24th November 2014 12:52am

Loved how Dumbledore (and McG) saw/learned exactly how it's going to be ... though I do feel bad that McGonagall is set in such a bad light with Dumbledore. I also thought it was wonderful how they spent their "detention" playing poker with the various implements cleaning up the manure - a la Sorcerer's Apprentice!!

kstchr posted a comment on Monday 24th November 2014 12:04am

Wow, what a chapter! Yes, I thought the draining of the lake (and the way the water was replaced in it) was a bit over the top, but it all added to showing just how much "beyond normal" Harry's power really is. Great use for the shelving charm!! lol Also enjoyed reading about how they got their revenge on everyone before and during the trial - well said!! There was a mix up in pronouns in this (...where his hand was firmly covering his mouth.) This is the part where Harry was apparently covering Gabrielle's mouth to get her to stop sharing so much information, so the second 'his' should be 'her' instead. There have been other little things here and there, but I thought I'd mention this. ;) I've really been enjoying this story, though, as even though it's not got my favorite pairing (Harry & Ginny), you've made it so interesting in its "out there-ness". (Sorry about the made up word!)

Pennywise posted a comment on Sunday 23rd November 2014 11:09pm

Awesome chapter.

kstchr posted a comment on Sunday 23rd November 2014 10:44pm

Wow, I loved the insightfulness of Harry's little speech, explaining everything they need to know about Magic. I also very much enjoyed Gred & Forge's meeting at the beginning of the chapter!!

MaMoKe posted a comment on Sunday 23rd November 2014 10:16pm

I want to say thank you for posting 10 weeks straight ;) but I kind of also want to say GDM for that ending! haha loved the chapter especialy the dance scene somehow spoke to me, but that ending! :)

keichan2 posted a comment on Sunday 23rd November 2014 9:49pm

A spy? And to think that the martini had me thinking about James Bond…

"Our agent in Hogwarts" Oh? I would guess that it is someone that came with Durmstrang, but it may be too easy…

"you’re under arrest." Well… I saw this one coming…

I get the feeling that his new justice troubles may be harder to get out of that the magical ones…

Thanks for the new chapter!

I hope to read more soon!

Torrey posted a comment on Sunday 23rd November 2014 8:37pm

What a horrible terrible evil place for a cliffhanger! :) Been enjoying this and blue steel, but I think this one is slightly better. Thanks for writing so much for us to enjoy reading!

dogbertcarroll posted a comment on Sunday 23rd November 2014 8:35pm

I don't buy the ending to this chapter. He could have knocked the kid out easy and it would have been just as effective and I'm sure he knew plenty of spells for that, plus the police showing up and saying he was under arrest without even bothering to find out what was going on while he's holding an injured boy and obviously trying to help him doesn't work, sorry.

LuxEterna posted a comment on Sunday 23rd November 2014 8:30pm

thanks for posting it was great

Renzo7 posted a comment on Sunday 23rd November 2014 7:31pm

Hello, Tim. I hope you're well. This was a nice chapter, but that ending was just mean. Quite a cliffhanger, you evil mastermind! I particularly enjoyed the dance scene woth Annie, and the interactions with Aurora. I hope inspiration sticks with you these days, because that cliffhanger was just plain evil and we need to see what's coming next.

gadriam posted a comment on Sunday 23rd November 2014 7:26pm

Thanks.

Absolutely stellar. The exhibition scene was very nice, the restaurant with Aurora was breathtaking in its simple elegance and the show segment with Annie hinted quite clearly that the world is watching him. The involvement of agent Tiemerovna struck it home; If you're larger than life, people might just notice. The closing part was extremely intriguing. It shouldn't be too difficult to clear up. On the other hand, if that is so, what's Chekov's gun doing there? How willl he identify himself with the whole age thing?

I've already told my computer to scream loudly when the next installmment appears. I'll still be checking every day, but you do write after your schedule, not mine so take your time. No point in rushing it.

Also, for the first time, i have some CRITICISM! Lately, you've been confusing "too" and "to". It's a recent development and it makes some sentences difficult to read, as the mind stutters at this kind of typo. The kind that doesn't show up on a spell check are not easy to catch, but please think about it. That's it. The first minor mistake i've ever found and i do believe I've read everything you've written.

Thanks.

g

noylj posted a comment on Sunday 23rd November 2014 7:10pm

I hope Harry has a brain. I HATE Russian spies and hope Harry has already "sensed" her.

TempusLupy posted a comment on Sunday 23rd November 2014 7:01pm

I'm glad you've updated this one, I love it so far.

You did say there would be spies and Mata Hari's at the beginning, but I'm not sure how that would work now with the Harry you've made. His look into their eyes and seems to see their soul thing seems to me like he would be able to see Natalia's false pretenses for being there, no matter how deep it's hidden (you even said the Russian's estimate a 75% chance of success, without knowing of his ability to do that, and 75% isn't that great) and with his dislike of being used or manipulated means I can't see Natalia or any other spy ever getting close enough to actually learn anything secret. I hope Natalia will either be corrupted to Harry's side or flee back to Russia next chapter.

The gang thing at the end of the chapter... It's something I could see happening, but it also seems like another way of putting off the much awaited talk between Dawn and Harry. Also, the ending of the chapter was a bit questionable. The boy was being beat alone, by gang members, and the police somehow arrive right after Harry beats the crap out of the gang and mercy kills the boy. I can't see Harry being in police custody for longer than the questioning of him and that he was trying to save the boy. Anyways, I can't wait for your next update!

Pamela St Vines posted a comment on Sunday 23rd November 2014 6:54pm

What an evil cliffie... Another great chapter added to a great story. Thanks for sharing.

Riegert8 posted a comment on Sunday 23rd November 2014 6:52pm

That interesting how Harry handle being blacked mailed

BJH posted a comment on Sunday 23rd November 2014 6:17pm

Nice chapter and now we've added some international intrigue Into the story. I like that Russia hasn't (yet) been portrayed as an evil aggressor which is so easy to do but instead merely motivated by self-interest. They aren't trying to kidnap Harry, just make him feel friendly towards mother Russia.

And will this police activity be kept strictly Muggle or does the identity of the poor dead boy's father cross over into the magical?

BJH

WhiteElfElder posted a comment on Sunday 23rd November 2014 6:15pm

Well, Harry is in trouble now. He will likely have some legal complications and other issues soon that may or may not interfere with the TWC. If Harry is unable to get back for one of the events in time due to being in jail, what would happen? I wonder if Harry's use of the AK registered?

Lee Dickie posted a comment on Sunday 23rd November 2014 3:41pm

A well written and enjoyable update.