By Jeconais
Reviews
lilskippy posted a comment on Thursday 26th June 2008 3:34pm
I haven't any clue who the bqd guy would be, I don't think Albus or Hermione maybe the doctor though but even then, and Fudge well he is an idiot but if the economy is stuck where it is maybe he just wanted it to be like this because it would keep him in power, then again someone could be hiding in the backround...
KenF posted a comment on Thursday 26th June 2008 3:28pm
Now I understand the dragon thing. I like the way this is picking up fragments of Hope while managing to be its own story. Most excellent!
Chris15 posted a comment on Thursday 26th June 2008 3:10pm
No it is not any clearer. The only possibilities I see are Fudge, who I deem incompetent and a nuisance more than a villain and maybe Gabby's father, who may try to keep them apart in the belief he is doing the right thing for her.
Do have one suggestion. Since Gabby and Harry seem to enjoy getting people together. If they get Remus and Tonks together I would suggest that Sirius and Harry spring a dowry on him. He can't refuse because it is traditional and after Sirius gets his head on straight she will be a member of the Black family. It is a little cliched with the Remus poor but to proud to take charity. Though with a few years as a teacher he should be doing alright it probably wouldn't be enough to start a family with and this could provide a nice foundation for starting a family.
More soon please.
Crys posted a comment on Thursday 26th June 2008 2:59pm
Doris: Wow, that's something (a living ex) that I haven't seen before. AD volunteering to follow the crusade isn't unexpected. Harry reversing it and dumping him into the deep end about his own life most definitely was. Kudos for the completely-out-of-left-field move.
F&G do make a great speech, don't they? "Welsh Sheep Council"? Your closing A/N address this, but I didn't find it forced. They were a bit odd (they ARE F&G, after all), but mostly within the bounds of taste. Their general reticence to go over the top I attributed to it being a family wedding.
> "Is Firebirdie allowed sausages?"
> Dobby shook his head. "Sausages gives Firebirdie gas."
*shudder* Phoenix with gas? That is a truly scary combination.
> "Floor forty two, office negative three,"
*blink* Yeah, why would the WW number the offices in anything approaching a logical method? Nice touch.
> Catalan numbers
Dammit, you're going to make me look this up, aren't you?
[Wiki-search] *goggle* Gah! You're trying to drive us insane with high-level mathematics, aren't you?
> "You!" a voice shouted. "Do you know what you’ve done?"
> "Yes," Harry replied instinctively.
> "Good," the man responded. "So many people come in here and don’t know."
*laugh* Oh, that ENTIRE scene is beyond priceless. Nice to see that Luna got it honestly :)
Ooh, that is a wicked prank on the Ministry.
Whirlwind of a story. Looking forward to next week.
amulder posted a comment on Thursday 26th June 2008 2:56pm
Hermy Hermy Hermy. Playing a joke like that!? I do hope that Harry manages to get back at her soon. Maybe he can get someone to compliment her on _her_ breasts. Hmm.
And no, I really don't know who the bad guy is. Though I do think that Albus caved a bit quickly. I don't think it is Remus or Sirius. The psychiatrist is too far removed to be an issue, aside from him being in Hermione's sights. Just who is benefitting form all the economic slowdown that happened? Where is the motive? I'm grasping.
It's not ... Dolores is it? She has no motive either, really.
Still, it's fun. Though it is suddenly odd to read a chapter with so little Gabbi in it.
best wishes, tim!
...art
Amamama posted a comment on Thursday 26th June 2008 2:38pm
No, it's not any clearer who's the bad guy. And I do look forward to being surprised. grins* Though, on second thought - Gabrielle went visiting her parents for a quick chat and didn't come back. That doesn't sound too good. So, we'll se Harry rescuing her in the next chapter, then? I flatly refuse to believe that Hermione is the villain because she gave Gabrielle the portkey. Nope. Not true. Can't be. The wicked parents is a possibility - or maybe rather the disgusting shrink... What's that shitty doc done to her parents? *grumbles*
This chapter was wonderful of course, and no, I don't have far to high an opinion of your intellect - your writing and story-telling abilities otoh... They're magnificent. Truly.
Filodea posted a comment on Thursday 26th June 2008 2:28pm
I must be incredibly dense, I didn't realize there was a bad guy, there was supposed to be a bad guy, or that the story even needed a bad guy. I guess, if I had to guess, I would say Fudge. The situation the bad guy is causing is the economy issues? I don't know. I just like reading your stories. I always enjoy what you write.
UdderPD posted a comment on Thursday 26th June 2008 2:26pm
That chapter was a bit strange; I enjoyed it but it was a bit strange.
TTFN UdderPD
redjacobson posted a comment on Thursday 26th June 2008 2:04pm
Ya know Tim, if I weren't far too masculine for it, I would have Squee'd in delight when I got the alert for this chapter *GRIN*
However, I will tell you that I almost stopped reading in the center of the chapter to leave a review thanking you for the Dumbledore bit, you've done more to humanize him in that one brief section than most 30K stories.
Now, because Lorien has been quiet lately:
Ahem! "JIG, TWIRL, BOUNCE, REFRESH!!!!"
Thank you very much
red
Rebel Goddess posted a comment on Thursday 26th June 2008 6:19am
Lol at Remus being so respectable his shoes now squeak. I like the idea of Gabbi being borderline sociopathic. Great chapters.
Rebel Goddess posted a comment on Thursday 26th June 2008 4:09am
LOL at Gabi's conversation with the Hat. I think my first review got lost for chapter 1 but I am enjoying this so much and thought that Harry's glee at Snape's death tied in perfectly with 4th year (but not 7th year) Harry. Anyone who thinks otherwise should reread books 3&4 - no love lost there.
The Slytherin v. Gryffindor argument was great.
This is true fairy tale stuff and I also love Harry's nonjon-ish attitude to life. Great so far.
mashimaromadness posted a comment on Wednesday 25th June 2008 11:10pm
And a great fairy tale, at that.
mashimaromadness posted a comment on Wednesday 25th June 2008 12:10am
What really happened? Intriguing...
mashimaromadness posted a comment on Tuesday 24th June 2008 1:14am
I love the pure joy of Harry and Gabrielle together. It's magical and refreshing
mashimaromadness posted a comment on Tuesday 24th June 2008 12:34am
This story, fairy tale that it is, comes at such a perfect time in my life. It's just what I need to restore me. I'm really looking forward to it
Dustin Hoeppner posted a comment on Monday 23rd June 2008 2:29pm
Very good!! Keep them coming
brad posted a comment on Monday 23rd June 2008 2:22am
Well, I feel better knowing that all this "fairy tale" prince & princess stuff actually has a hook into 'real life'. What, Gabby has a mild tendency to 'disregard or violate the rights of others', she 'lacks a sense of moral responsibility' (according to the definitions I just looked up)? So, knowing this, she fixated on fairy tales and then onto Harry as her moral compass? I think I grok it.
Thoroughly enjoyed the anti-interview intent to have proper baby names, and not pop out Lily-and-James-version-3 and so forth. Whew.
My respect for Hermione grows ... thank you for keeping her dedicated to Harry.
sunrisesunset posted a comment on Sunday 22nd June 2008 2:40pm
I like the psychology here. I was honestly worried at the beginning about where this story was going - it was the shallowest first chapter from you that I can remember. But you've shown that there was a reason for that, and are developing all sorts of wonderful complexity. I'm looking forward to see where you go from here.
Amamama posted a comment on Sunday 22nd June 2008 11:10am
Oki-doki... the antagonist is hinted at, and I seriously don't get it. I've read and re-read, but I'm still drawing a blank. It can't be Gabrielle's parents/father, can it? Because that's just wrong, but maybe that's what makes it fit? I guess I'll just do what I do best, sit back and enjoy the ride. Because the ride is spectacular, even if it makes me slightly dizzy with everything going on. I guess that'll change after a while, as I get a better grasp on the story. I do love fairy tales, and you are a great story-teller, blessedly free from angst. I appreciate that.
Cheers!
Philipe posted a comment on Thursday 26th June 2008 4:39pm