By Jeconais
Reviews
rune1806 posted a comment on Friday 4th July 2008 6:30pm
So there is a bad guy (parents)? and a good guy (Harry) but there is only one more chapter? Come on three more please?!!
ShadeHawk posted a comment on Friday 4th July 2008 1:11pm
Minerva smiled broadly. "Yes. Oh, for your information, I’ve allowed Natalie Jones to enter the Gryffindor Common Room. Harry apologised to her for using her in today’s prank, and they’re now friends."
It would take Minerva a long time to work out just why Albus started to roar with laughter at that point.
Wonderfull. Just wonderfull. ROTFLMAO.
Good work!
Dustin Hoeppner posted a comment on Friday 4th July 2008 12:55pm
Very good. Can't wait for the next chapter
CootiePatootie posted a comment on Friday 4th July 2008 12:37pm
The song was BRILLIANT. Absolutely BRILLIANT! I was laughing so hard that I couldn't catch my breath, and my husband wanted to know what was so funny, and I couldn't make him understand...ah, it was great! :-)
I like the idea that Harry is being the Prince as he thinks he should be. I suppose Gabrielle told him about Princes and Princesses while he was Sleeping?
Love the escape from Gryffindor tower. Now, about that kidnapping...
ta,
Cassie
hayeth posted a comment on Friday 4th July 2008 11:52am
Oh that AN ruined it for me. I was certain you made the song up. Oh well, was funny as hell though.
Anyway, looks like my previous notions on the "dragon" being the parents was right. Though I still feel that was the wrong fairy tale metaphor. Cant wait for the next update and have a happy forth.
BaltaineShadow posted a comment on Friday 4th July 2008 11:50am
Wonderful!
I love the last sentence - and little Natalie is just too perfect a character to be true! I love her too.
It is also a nice idea to let the Headmaster play a little prank on Harry - and now I hope that Gabbi's situation isn't really serious...
I think it's really heroic to let Harry fly from Scotland to France for getting his beloved Princess back...^^
Just keep up your good work for the next chapter (I think you said at some point that it would be the last... T_T)
Thanks for uploading this chapter!
noahshonor posted a comment on Friday 4th July 2008 10:04am
perfect
Jujuberry posted a comment on Friday 4th July 2008 8:04am
That was really great- I'm so glad we got to the the "Harry's invading France!" line in action finally! Natalie and Zach are great original characters, and Harry's dealings with the goblins and Narcissa was pure genius!
Thanks for another wonderful update.
Carol Layland posted a comment on Friday 4th July 2008 7:46am
Hi, I will say that this is a most amusing chapter. I will have to go back and read the rest of the posted material before I can truly appreciate the irony I can read between the lines here. After I do the re-read I will come back and add more to the review in another installment of reviews.
FireFairy posted a comment on Friday 4th July 2008 7:31am
awesome chapter! again! Please update this soon!
Clell65619 posted a comment on Friday 4th July 2008 7:18am
- Very nice... I thought I recognized the Wizard's Staff song...
razor_M posted a comment on Friday 4th July 2008 5:46am
maaaann! not cool, you killed the owl! other than that, it was a good story.
Tumshie posted a comment on Friday 4th July 2008 5:08am
Can we get the promised sequel to White Knight, Grey Queen after this one?
Love this story by the way
Karenelaine posted a comment on Friday 4th July 2008 1:59am
Only one. I'm going to miss the story when its over. Its been very entertaining. I'm looking forward to the next.
Patches posted a comment on Friday 4th July 2008 1:34am
Well Harry has certainly covered a lot of ground in this chapter. Arranging business contacts, account managers, business managers and accounting personel. Then he pranks Albus Dumbledore. Only to find out that Gabrielle has been kidnapped. Now, due to Albus manipulations Harry is reaccquainting himself with a new broom by flying accross international lines as well as the English Channel! Quite a day so far. Thanks so much for writing another of your nice long chapters. I look forward to more of this story. pms
Daranel posted a comment on Friday 4th July 2008 1:14am
Well, since I've yet to review this fic before, I'll start by the generalities:
I like your portrayal of Gabrielle. She's less perfect than in Hope, while still maintaining the points that made me like her there. Your explanation for her behaviour is very interesting and well thought out, as well, and pretty novel (at least it's the first time I've seen something like that).
As for Harry, I find it difficult to believe he would develop like that, but perhaps that perception is tainted by the darker times he goes through in the later books which he doesn't have to deal with here. It also seems to be a pretty consistent part of how you write Harry (except maybe when you wrote the darker one-shots, though I see undercurrents of that there, too), so it might be just different interpretations of the character.
It doesn't really distract me from enjoying reading your fics, anyway, and it makes for good light reading. Just thought I'd point it out, though I'd imagine you're already conscious of how you usually write Harry.
I like the more "overly concerned and mistaken" approach to Dumbledore's manipulations, rather than the all too common "Albus Dumbledore is an evil manipulating bastard" approach, too (though it does have it's interest, I just think it's been a bit overdone). I really like how you handled it in Hope, too, where Albus is not only the perpetrator, but also partly a victim.
As for this chapter, I loved your use of "A wizard's staff...", it had me laughing for a while. I'm a big Pratchett fan. Natalie is cute as a button, too, and I agree with the rest of your reviewers that "Harry's invading France!" is hilarious.
I'm not ashamed to admit that Hedwig's death bothered me enough to go look up the life expectancy of snowy owls (it's the "old age" bit that threw me, more than anything). We aren't told how old Hedwig was before Harry got her (or at least I don't remember it), but a snowy owl in captivity usually lives up to 35 years in captivity (9.5 in the wild), according to owlpages.com. Still, I can imagine that Harry's coma might have put enough stress on poor Hedwig to drastically reduce her life expectancy.
To end this tirade (this is starting to look more like my thesis dissertation than a review, as it is), I just want to point out a little thing that kinda jumped at me when I read it. When Hermione tells Harry of Hedwig's death, you write: "the world really had changed while he was unconsciousness." Shouldn't that be "while he was unconscious"?
Anyway, keep up the good work, and thanks for keeping us entertained :)
Zicou posted a comment on Friday 4th July 2008 1:07am
An albus pranker ? very good !
Continuuuuuuue!
Z.
redhandgrunt posted a comment on Friday 4th July 2008 12:16am
Great chapter. I can't wait to see what happens when Harry attacks the French.... I can hear the surrender already.
motherjenjen posted a comment on Friday 4th July 2008 12:02am
PS
if harry is invading france can i invade england????
WILL THERE BE A SEQUIL?????????? if there isn't i'll hunt you down and do a Moody/Barty on you and turn you into a ferret even though Mc'g said that we're not allowed to disiplin students via tranfiguration....dammm
MJJ
Jiapa posted a comment on Friday 4th July 2008 6:37pm