By Jeconais
Reviews
Cale posted a comment on Saturday 15th December 2012 11:58pm
Brilliant chapter. Just one thing. The plural of ninja, or nin as you used, is ninja and nin. To be more acurate; Japanese doesn't have a plural in its grammar. One shinobi, ten shinobi, five kunai, nine hundred seventeen kunoichi...
loretta537 posted a comment on Saturday 3rd November 2012 12:38am
this is a great story, i cant wait to see what will happen next
Sml posted a comment on Tuesday 23rd October 2012 4:09pm
... Kinda hypocritical of Naruto to be dating multiple women and then threaten Kiba for dating one. Hinata or not. Good story otherwise.
agnar posted a comment on Friday 19th October 2012 8:27pm
I realized my review for last chapter mostly was about a possible mistake, and found myself feeling guilty. So I wanted to be sure and review here, and mention how excellent the fic is and how much I'm looking forward to more.
I love this fic for various reasons. The humour is an obvious one. But I love the more ninja-ish attitude towards how to fight and naruto's repeated 'we're not samurai' point which is too often missed in naruto canon and fics.
Also great was the quick and clean disposal of danzo and the 'advisors' along with the hilarious de-fanging of the cliche civilian council. Way too many otherwise good fics lose so much appeal, by having danzo, the elders, and civilians pushing around the Hokage in a village that ought to be a military dictatorship.
You removed those cliches and headaches in a quick, clean, and funny manner, well done! Also nicely done in showing us Naruto has obvious 'issues' from all the crap he suffered through. But doing so without overloading us with angst, and having the Ninjas acknowledge that all serious Ninja have issues of some kind, that's part of thier lifestyle.
agnar posted a comment on Friday 19th October 2012 8:14pm
I love this fic, and this is a re-read for me. But I'm finally remembering to mention something that confused me but I kept forgetting to review about it.
You had Yoroi Akado in the 2nd round of the exams, but he was one of Kabuto's teammates wasn't he? The Hokage ordered his teammates picked up, and even if they got off they'd be a man short for an exam that requires a full 3 person team, and have missed the 1st part of the exam.
So were kabuto's teammates different than canon? Or was this a mistake? Because I thought kabuto's teammates were the chakra sucking guy who fought sasuke in canon, and the stretchy arm guy who fought kankuro in canon.
kitsu524 posted a comment on Monday 3rd September 2012 11:51pm
Wow I dont remember where I first heard about your story but daaayyyuummmm I love it. At first it was kinda chopy but I still read as the idea of naruto's clones having personalities makes me gidy... when done right and I must say you really did it right :).
It definatly gets better the further into the story as you go more depth per scene(? sorry spelling is my bad point and seeing as I have been up for 20 hours I cant be damned to look it up for each word I'm not sure of) instead of being just a road map to a good story it is the story. Yes it does kinda skip and the pace is fast... but then again... if you watch the anime/ read the manga/ or even any real book the pace is just about what it should be I think... you covered aproximatly 6 months (if I go by cannon I think again tired lol) in 9 chapters in what took aproxamatly 50 episodes not bad for a read that took me about 4 or 5 hours. So yeah I loved it so far.
Love the fact that they know they are insane and embrace it with open arms XD for truely how could you see Naruto and his clones as one person anymore? lol. The clones .... wow finding myself repeating things and trying to go over everything in my head but seeing as I stayed up 4 hours past when I normaly set aside for going to sleep hence the being up 20 hours just to finish reading this I figure I'm not doing to bad even if my delete key is getting a work out lol.
I guess I am just trying to get this review out while I still have the emotions in place for this story... In all honesty I love this story not for being well writen or any overt charachter scheems or 1XXXXX times amazing story plot but because it was enjoyable at first and then became more then a simple fic IDK how exactly but this story will truely have a special place in my heart :) and Im a bit sad to hear that it will end soon lol at the same time would love to actually read a story that finishes (no idea how many of the best writers seem to just kinda die off on these sites.... its always a little sad but thats life... some how wonder if Im a little bit of a masochist lol) Speaking of being a Masochist I cant help but think every time you refer orochimaru as a gimp I cant help but think of Scorpious from the tv show farscape.... dont ask me why it just does lol.
Also love the nice...? kyubi lol always do that always tends to lead to a higher rating from me when ever kyubi is not just some raging evil demon lord with the thoughts of wonton distruction :) its actually the reason why my name is kitsu524 lol started out as kitsunoyoko XD then went to this lol
So finaly sorry for this horably writen review(mainly sentance structure and run ons and gramar and everything I just had to review now before I head to bed)
Always reading in hope
Kitsu524
traviswj posted a comment on Monday 3rd September 2012 12:19pm
This story is awesome!
Trscroggs posted a comment on Thursday 9th August 2012 6:03pm
I really like this story, it's hilarious. In fact my only real problem with it lies in this chapter. Naruto starts it down, recovers, and then is down again by the end of the chapter. Espetially after he came to the realization, jsut earlier ni the chapter, that he could subsitute offensive clones in to take blows instead of himself.
alucard964 posted a comment on Tuesday 7th August 2012 10:11pm
love this story was just wondering if you were gonna continue it?
rowil07 posted a comment on Tuesday 17th July 2012 1:49am
I love the story and hope you finish it, not asking you to rush and no criticisms needed. I love the fic.
gara5289 posted a comment on Thursday 12th July 2012 8:24pm
I realized one of the big reasons i love this story. It's a really happy story.
gara5289 posted a comment on Thursday 12th July 2012 5:06pm
I'm having trouble finding a job after college and your story literally cracks me up when i need to laugh. On a unrelated note, you write an awesome Hyuuga. People make them so one-dimensional and boring. Glad you're original
Selkor posted a comment on Monday 9th July 2012 2:32am
I just want to say how much I like all of your stories that I have read so far. This must be the only naruto story where Sasuke is gay and it is not seen as some horrible personality defect, so thank you ^^.
LoganBlackisle posted a comment on Friday 29th June 2012 2:56pm
Certainly not at the same quality as your other fics, but awesome just the same. I look forward to the last few chapters.
Logan Blackisle
gara5289 posted a comment on Wednesday 27th June 2012 3:28am
Flat out i now want my own pirate ship.
gara5289 posted a comment on Tuesday 12th June 2012 2:24pm
Gonna be real sad when this story is over. It's unqiue but i think my favorite of all of yours. Really looking forward to the next chapter.
gara5289 posted a comment on Tuesday 12th June 2012 5:32am
Also, you write a great Hiashi. You also are great at using the 'hn.' To many authors overuse it in an attempt to make the Uchiha into an ass and instead make their story painful to read.
gara5289 posted a comment on Tuesday 12th June 2012 5:14am
One of my absolute favorite fanfics as i am now rereading after a week. But seriously, it's the most amusing Naruto fic i've ever read and yet it's not a crack fic.
gara5289 posted a comment on Wednesday 23rd May 2012 6:17pm
Great story, easily my favorite of your Naruto stories
preier posted a comment on Sunday 16th December 2012 12:28am