crs_seq posted a comment on Friday 23rd April 2010 4:08am

Funny, Hope there is more where that came from. Can't wait to see the mayhem Naruto comes with on Gai's team.
Anyways Update Soon.

Guy posted a comment on Friday 23rd April 2010 3:11am

I could go for more of this brand of insanity.

fallensoul110 posted a comment on Friday 23rd April 2010 3:03am

Very cool story idea. Can't wait for the next chapter.

Jamey posted a comment on Friday 23rd April 2010 2:43am

Thank you! Your un-beta'd stuff is a lot better than stuff I've seen pushed through an entire committee of betas!

I'm also loving your entry into the Naruto-verse. You've come up with a number of fairly unique new jutsu, and a method of using them that really really works for the lovable idiot. And you really haven't completely removed the idiot part - you've just let him catch onto one part of the issues he was having with the rest of the world, and made that work for him!

Where ever you choose to take this story, I'll be following along!

Memory King posted a comment on Friday 23rd April 2010 2:38am

Definitely wasn't expecting a Naruto fic from you, but this was a very pleasant smile. A very fun piece all around, though I wouldn't have minded some more mechanics behind the new jutsus.

Will definitely be looking forward to more.

Scott Sakraida posted a comment on Friday 23rd April 2010 2:37am

I like that you are branching out to this genre and it is a good story so far. It is a little bit more surreal then your other stories but that could just because of Naruto in general, can't wait for more to find out.

dan26 posted a comment on Friday 23rd April 2010 2:30am

Sasuke or anybody wanting the Kyuubi in them is the most insane thought I've ever heard. I do wonder thought what are you going to do with poor Hanabi, will you wear her down by actually liking Naruto's hugs, then falling for him, and have her fight Hinata over Naruto?

joeBob posted a comment on Friday 23rd April 2010 2:17am

Good start and promising story.

Nice prank on the village :)

Naruto is a OOC (not such an idiot) but it works well.

}} "That’s it, I’m having his virginity later," Anko announced.
:)

Jon Schuman posted a comment on Friday 23rd April 2010 2:10am

Okay, that was seriously twisted. Hysterically funny, but twisted. You have a nice balance with using just enough Japanese to keep the flavor of Naruto, but you don't go too far. Definitely loved the opening prank and Foxy-chan. The different jutsus he has developed are great, nobody will know what's coming next. By claiming some things as a bloodline, he can get away with almost any thing. Hiashi impressed me with his ability to think on his feet and own up to his own mistakes. Keep up the good work.

spritestar posted a comment on Friday 23rd April 2010 2:09am

please tell us this isn't planed as a one shot? please?!!

Orion posted a comment on Friday 23rd April 2010 2:04am

Um . . . Kawaiiii! Or maybe Squeee? This isn't cute per say, but it certainly was a nice, upbeat, happy read. I'm always happy to read anything that you care to post. And welcome to the wonderful world of Naruto fiction, btw!

Ok, so I'm very happy with this. The characters believable and close enough to IC without going to "the character is the same as canon because everything in this story is the same as canon". Not that there aren't places for that . . . good episode tags, for example, meant to fit in between episodes of canon.

I also like the 'major change' of Naruto's, well, getting a clue might be the right way to put it. The majority of differences so far seem to stem off from that - perhaps bolstered by a somewhat more agreeable Fox, and a slightly less "Uchiha Lover" council. (I've encountered a fic or two where they were so far up his arse, they would have tried to figure out how to grant his wish, not question his sanity.)

Also, I didn't have any issues with this not being beta read. I don't really think I saw a typo. (Or am I just so used to reading unbeta'ed stuff at that other site that I'm able to block out minor issues?). Well, there certainly were not any major issues.

As always, thanks for writing, and thanks for sharing with us.

ringofan01 posted a comment on Friday 23rd April 2010 2:01am

Forgive me, but ZOMFG! I was laughing my ass off. This is brilliant in concept (though you REALLY, REALLY need a beta). I would tend to agree about the japanese (in that if you don't know any, don't try to use it) but if you ever bring in Jiraiya, please, for the love of God, use Ero-sennin, not any anglization of it. (Every time dub-Naruto says "Pervy-sage", God kills a puppy.) Most of the 'jutsus' you've created so far are better with english names anyway, as far as the humor of them goes. I'm highly anticipating the next chapter already.

Longreach posted a comment on Friday 23rd April 2010 1:56am

Oh god! My sides are hurting, you have cracked my ribs with your pure awesome funniness. More! For the love of Foxy MORE!

stevej1397 posted a comment on Friday 23rd April 2010 1:42am

Very good.
I couldn't stop laughing for most of this story.

lonegrim1980 posted a comment on Friday 23rd April 2010 1:29am

Good start i'm looking forward to the next chapter

JGregory32 posted a comment on Friday 23rd April 2010 12:34am

This is all kinds of crack.

Greg Johnson posted a comment on Friday 23rd April 2010 12:31am

This is a very interesting story.
I am in love with the Kawaii No Justsu! It is awesome. :)

Thank you for posting. I can't for more.

Ladegard posted a comment on Friday 23rd April 2010 12:17am

More than mildly insane and in need of some beta work, but great fun. Thank you.

Shepherd posted a comment on Friday 23rd April 2010 12:16am

Cute, but the changes are happening so fast as to seem absurd. If the events in this chapter were spread out over four or five chapters, it would be more believable.

Neil Glover posted a comment on Friday 23rd April 2010 12:13am

Great start I look forward to the next chapter. love the new jutsus.