Genericrandom posted a comment on Wednesday 8th September 2010 7:02am

I'm happy you like this chapter, I rather liked it too. I am, in fact not surprised, but I am also incredibly thrilled by that announcement. Good stuff.

The plot thickens, and the story develops, and it just keeps getting better, I can't wait to see what comes next. 9.7/10 Because you dealt with the Naruto/Hanabi in a way that perfectly fit her character, fit his character after the growth you've allowed him or rather, I think it's very much like what he would have said were something like this to happen in canon, just much more of a rationalized and well presented response instead of a chicken panicking with its head cut off.

I liked this chapter, a lot. Looking forward to more.

xardoth posted a comment on Wednesday 8th September 2010 5:32am

* Incessantly giggles.*

Like how this chapter ended. Not really sure what you meant by the comment on why Jiriaya is there, don't remember the first chapter plot too well. Anyway.. liking how you have the 'harem' dynamics sorted out so far, and the logical reasoning vs believable argument is interesting. I don't think I've read any decent Naruto harem with plot not by Fosfor or Daneel Rush. The best stories (rather the ones I like the most) are ones where Naruto has interactions like what you did here with Hanabi (the whole adopting sisters thing) - which isn't really a harem anymore as much as a skewed amount of female chars vs male involved in the character interactions. Anyway - hope you keep having inspiration to continue this, I'd like to see what you come up with, and stopping at the Sound Invasion seems like a nice point for this sort of fic (haven't seen *any* decent character interaction on post-timeskip fics that aren't completely AU or altaverse.)

darthridian posted a comment on Wednesday 8th September 2010 3:09am

great addition mate, liked it when Jiraiya got his butt kicked and saved by the Hokage, very well done.

I wonder what Naruto taught the terrible trio to use, well keep up the great writing mate.

Ronnie McMains posted a comment on Wednesday 8th September 2010 1:58am

Obviously (to me, anyway), Jiriya's here to take a look at the seal, because the Hokage might be worried that if Kyuubi can get out with Naruto's help, she might be able to get out without, and he rather likes his little village the way it is (his little body, too).

As for Kakashi, if the Konohamaru Corps plus Hanabi can get his book away from him, Naruto can lay one on him, especially since he was drinking at the time.

Yes, poor Hanabi. Especially since, if this does end at the Invasion, she won't be old enough to join the pre-harem by story's end. Do please get that one-shot out when you can.

Yes, Tsume giving the Talk to Kiba would be funny, as long as it isn't anything like Kyuubi's from chapter one.

Thanks for the new chapter, and now I'm going to check my settings here, since I still didn't get an alert for it.

DasRaven posted a comment on Wednesday 8th September 2010 1:28am

I want to say I love everything you have written. This one has made me laugh till tears come to my eyes. Keep up the great work.

rockcock posted a comment on Wednesday 8th September 2010 12:55am

You're on a roll nowadays with you frequent updates.

I don't know what it is that you are doing but there is only one thing for me to say, keep it up it's fantastic to have you back with such a frequency of updates.

Oh and i think that the inferiority complex or whatever it is that makes you say things like "It's not good", "I don't like how this turned out" about your stories... well stop it.

I think the attention that your fics and the site for fanfiction stories has attracted is a testament of your skills.

Yes, it's a good thing to keep your feet on the ground but where credit is due...(there's no need for cash...lame joke I know).

Anyway keep up the good work and here's something intriguing for you, why don't you try writing something original, an idea, a story of your own creation see how that goes...food for thought.

Bye

Davideg posted a comment on Wednesday 8th September 2010 12:38am

thank you for sharing this fantastic chapter snd story please continue to update a.s.a.l.a.

liquidfyre posted a comment on Wednesday 8th September 2010 12:34am

I R so happy. My demented and twisted genius jecy-poo is back and in Excellent form. This is a silly and hilarious story. I have to admit it is, in a way the Perfect counterpoint to Perfect Slytherins.

Keep up the good work man. Any chance of a hint on when the next PS is coming out?

David Thacker posted a comment on Wednesday 8th September 2010 12:08am

That was great and I pity Kakashi if he forgets and reads the books in public again. And Hanabi getting the talk form Naruto was very funny. I also can see Hanabi's thoughts has she summoned Naruto " I do not wish to do it! But they made me do it."

Chiyo posted a comment on Tuesday 7th September 2010 11:15pm

Loving this. Really fun especially since I haven't watched Naruto in several years (got sick of all the filler and gave up on it as an anime). The Manga's I would read from time to time but stopped after life got too busy and sort of lost interest in anime in general. Hell the SN I have here is from when I had just seen Azumanga Dai-Oh for the first time! lulz

Great stuff!

Garnth posted a comment on Tuesday 7th September 2010 10:41pm

again great chapter

now I wonder how far in timeline are you planning to go as I really want see this version of Naruto interact with Itachi and Deidara

Lordamnesia posted a comment on Tuesday 7th September 2010 9:51pm

I like this chapter as well. The serious bit with having to give Hanabi the talk, releasing some Kyuubi chakra and killing the 3 Hyuga elders, well, most of the chapter really. But, it fit extremely well, and you have got to love the finishing move he was going to use on Jiraiya!

darthme1011 posted a comment on Tuesday 7th September 2010 9:30pm

funnyest chapter yet

NuitTombee posted a comment on Tuesday 7th September 2010 6:51pm

The only thing that was potentially wrong was the use of the word 'git'. Though I could be wrong seeing as I've never looked into the history of the Elemental Nations. I was going to insert some witty remark but I'd make myself look like an idiot. Anyways, I love the story and I will be sad when it ends, just like all the others.

"...grinning like a necrophiliac in a morgue." ~The Light Fantastic, Terry Pratchett

wolfey posted a comment on Tuesday 7th September 2010 6:45pm

You should try writing naruto with lesser characters too sometimes. Like I read this great story on fanfiction that was a naruto/karin story. I loved it. But I mainly like stories with naruto/tsunade, naruto/tsume, naruto/koyuki. I am in to the older women lol.

Jim_xinu posted a comment on Tuesday 7th September 2010 6:39pm

Fun chapter. It's great that you're enjoying writing again. Thanks for sharing it with us.

sithknight01 posted a comment on Tuesday 7th September 2010 6:26pm

very nice, once again you pull another amazing chapter for one of your stories.
my only complaint is the time it takes for a new chapter but that just me being unrealistic as i know that real life can get in the way and you have multiple storeies going at once

tangentsferret posted a comment on Tuesday 7th September 2010 6:06pm

Pardon me, pardon me, cogent, intelligent, verbose and extremely erudite review in progress here:

WHEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!


That is all.

joeBob posted a comment on Tuesday 7th September 2010 5:41pm

Entertaining chapter.

But, Mexican soap-opera in Japan? Naruto's reaction to the Hanabi-pedophile incident seems too much. Public shaming for Kakashi? Borderline. Publicly shaming Hanabi, who was trying to act honorably? Uncalled for.

>> The alcohol settled him a little, before his chakra burned it up.
You now how gross a drunk's sweat smells (alcohol and its metabolites)? Now Naruto just pulsed out a concentrated 3-beer stench, in a minute or 2, and with nothing being removed via the kidneys? Eeeewwww.

>> Haku was needling Sasuke
Har, har.

>> "On what?" Konoha asked.
Konoha speaks and acts several times. Should be Konohamaru. (Unless the village has embodied an avatar.)

Naruto, was more than a bit of a jerk in this chapter, but it's still a great story.

selonianth posted a comment on Tuesday 7th September 2010 5:20pm

As to why kakashi got punched. Add a part 'was utterly terrified of naruto at that moment'