kstchr posted a comment on Thursday 4th June 2020 5:27am for Chapter 1

This explains so much, since I mistakenly read the 2nd chapter, first. So Harry actually admitted to the Enclave that he had a plan to fake forcing Fleur to be his servant??

Maddie86 posted a comment on Sunday 3rd July 2016 9:35pm for Chapter 1

I don't know which one I like better, this version or the "original". Both are amazing! :)

Rover19923 posted a comment on Tuesday 23rd June 2015 6:51pm for Chapter 1

Very good writing

Kinsfire posted a comment on Monday 9th March 2015 9:00pm for Chapter 1

I think the reason that this one comes across as unpopular with so many people is that you have a history of doing a larger than life Harry - he is a fairy-tale prince. In this, he is really the most selfish that we've ever seen him in one of your stories. The entirety of the story is really him proving that he's emotionally fourteen years old, which is actually a little unusual for you. Your Harrys are usually much more adult. However, I am reading this many many months after the first time i read it, and I like the story more than I did at first reading. Still not one of my favorites (that seems to be Blue Steel at the moment, given how many times I've reread it), but more enjoyable than my first reading.

Kairan1979 posted a comment on Friday 19th December 2014 10:47pm for Chapter 1

Interesting twist on the 'Veela Bond' stories.

-) Harry thrown out of Gryffindor house thanks to Ron's jealousy and everybody jumping on 'Potter the Cheater' bandwagon wasn't surprising. I'm disappointed that Hermione bowed to peer pressure, but I guess Harry will never leave Hogwarts if he had at least one friend left.

-) Hogwarts staff doing nothing to stop the bullying of help Harry to prepare to the Tasks - once again, no surprises here. McGonnagal is useless, as always, Hagrid is blindly devoted to Dumbledore and the Headmaster is playing his little games. I'm surprised Moody/Crouch gave him no hints about the First Task; Harry killed by the dragon means no 'blood of the enemy' for Voldemort.

-) At least after his expulsion from Gryffindor Harry was able to talk back to Snape, not caring about House Points lost by his former house anymore. And even stop Dumbledore's lecture by demonstrating that he doesn't care about his wand snapped.

-) Nice job avoiding Helpful!Goblins cliche. They are bankers, not solicitors. At least they answered to Harry's letter, something the editor of Daily Prophet never bothered to do.

-) I'm glad to see Harry had fun 'dancing' during the Yule Ball; something he'll never have if he was forced to attend.

-) Nice scene with Merpeople; Harry trying to figure out who exactly is his hostage (using Ron the Traitor as a hostage was a dumb move on Dumbledore's part'), befriending Chieftain's daughter and protecting mermaids from Snark!Krum.

-) I had to admit you completely fooled me when Harry approached Beauxbatons carriages to confront Fleur. I really believed he became the cold uncaring bastard able to enslave Gabrielle despite her age. So his words in Dumbledore's office, when he pledged his alliance to the Veela Enclave and immediately released Fleur from the Bond were just as surprising for me as they were for Delacour family.

-) I'm pleased to see Snape beheaded. I don't know why he attacked Harry despite Veela escort. Maybe he snapped because he saw the son of James Potter doing something completely Slytherin. Maybe he realized he can't abuse Harry anymore. Honestly, I don't care. The vile pathetic man who was ruining the generations of students by offering substandart biased teaching; the man who was drooling at the thought of two innocent men Kissed by Dementors deserves nothing less.

-) While the end of the chapter sounds Harry finally found his place in the world, I'm not so optimistic. Deluding yourself into thinking you are not a human is not healthly; it's only a question of time before Harry loses touch with reality if he keeps thinking like that. I can only hope Veela can notice this tendency before it's too late.

gtgrouch posted a comment on Monday 24th November 2014 2:54am for Chapter 1

Terrible how Snape lost his head in that meeting with the headmaster.

paladin nox posted a comment on Saturday 12th April 2014 9:51am for Chapter 1

Loved it. Thanks for sharing

dg Fry posted a comment on Friday 28th February 2014 12:10pm for Chapter 1

Very interesting story. While I'd like to see some more of Harry's life as a memeber of the Enclave (all those sisters and nieces and cousins etc) I can see why you've stopped after two. Glad to see you back in the writing game

mykakal posted a comment on Thursday 27th February 2014 9:42pm for Chapter 1

A nice story.

It's darker than your former creation with less optimism.

The story's structure is quicker and the character (magic people) seems to have less personnality. They follow the flow without anyone saying no ou trying to help.

Deborahsu posted a comment on Tuesday 25th February 2014 1:01am for Chapter 1

Like! Totally unexpected, completely different, and well done! I do look forward to updates on all of your stories!

potterfanchuck posted a comment on Monday 24th February 2014 8:55pm for Chapter 1

Go Harry!!!! I'm sure they'll come back to you begging for help.

Riegert8 posted a comment on Monday 24th February 2014 6:01am for Chapter 1

I was suprise that Harry was kicked out of Gryffindor House, I wonder if Harry ever be friends with any member from that house. I like to see the Gryffindor member that had a hand in kicking Harry out pay a heavy price, they have to learn that there always a consequence for their actions

I have doubt that Harry will ever be friends with the Weasley's again, I have doubt that Hermione will remain a friend. Since she taken part in Harry getting kicked out

Machelle posted a comment on Monday 24th February 2014 5:55am for Chapter 1

I saw the comment for part 2 and wanted to comment before reading it. I loved part 1 and thank you for whatever you choose or can share with us. It was different but different does not equate bad just different. Thanks for not letting the naysayers stop you from posting.

A dedicated (though review challenged) reader.

LoBass posted a comment on Sunday 23rd February 2014 5:42am for Chapter 1

Unusual perspective. Enjoyed it. Looking forward to part 2.

thankyou

Brian

Lisagrace posted a comment on Saturday 22nd February 2014 11:27pm for Chapter 1

Wow, loved this. I could see this happening easily.

midevildle posted a comment on Saturday 22nd February 2014 5:54pm for Chapter 1

Interesting idea. The human hate/idolatry for non humans felt incredibly forced. The Veela enclave and inhabitants were to accepting for my taste. But still, an interesting idea.

20cent posted a comment on Saturday 22nd February 2014 4:42pm for Chapter 1

Nicely written, great angle !

Thanks for this beautiful strory !

T.Zukumori posted a comment on Saturday 22nd February 2014 2:23am for Chapter 1

Unique premise -- I've never read anything like it. It was enjoyable, and makes me wonder how/if Voldemort will fight against the Conclave in his pursuit of Harry.

But all in all, it's good to see that you're still writing. Welcome back.

Hansi_Rahl posted a comment on Friday 21st February 2014 4:26pm for Chapter 1

Great story!

Nigel Wood posted a comment on Friday 21st February 2014 4:22pm for Chapter 1

Good to have you back.

As usual you develop a very good idea into a well thought plot and then execute it with outstanding writing.

I was told that anything worth reading was hard work to write. You must sweat blood over you pc to give us this great story.

Thank you