Katsuhito posted a comment on Sunday 3rd July 2011 4:11pm

Yeah! another chapter. this was a neat chapter, even if it was mostly setup for following stuff. it'll be interesting to see what happens during the exams with shukaku/gaara and nibi/nii involved like they are.

Things are starting to move with Hanabi too. I assume she'll be unsuccessful in her bid to get all the other women away from Naruto, I wonder how she'll handle it. not to mention how N handles her attempts.

The introduction and characterization of Four as a unique clone is cool tool. So she's also got Jounin level chakra along with eleven, eh? Have all the "numbered" clones become L4's now, or just those two? either way it looks like she'll be an integral part of the group, especially with Kurenai involved. I look forward to seeing what happens when she finally disperses and all the "girl secrets" get absorbed into Naruto! (that's Naruto-Prime. heh, sounds like a borg. imagine millions of Naruto clones with rasengans in their hands saying "resistance is futile - believe it!" hehe).

on another note, which has little to do with your story specifically, I wonder why shukaku is the only tailed beast (that I know of) that is generally referred to by its animal name, rather than the number of tails it has. usually I see kyuubi instead of kitsune and nibi instead of neko (to use the two most popular). why is it shukaku and not ichibi? something to ponder...

Pai posted a comment on Sunday 3rd July 2011 4:05pm

Awesome. It's great to see all these fics updated for this weekend.

I really enjoyed reading them all. it's rare to get good writing now days.

darthme1011 posted a comment on Sunday 3rd July 2011 3:04pm

Then thanks you Tenhawk great chapter this is my favorite naruto fic

Greg Johnson posted a comment on Sunday 3rd July 2011 2:46pm

Thank you for posting!
Can't wait for the next chapter.

OdinMage posted a comment on Sunday 3rd July 2011 2:30pm

YAY! Last night I read Perfect Slytherin's and mentioned wanting updates on your other stories... this morning I wake up and THERE ARE UPDATES! To both the stories I was thinking of, Konoha's Legion and Hogwarts' Dawn. Another great chapter, keep writing!

neqs posted a comment on Sunday 3rd July 2011 10:05am

I was really thrilled to see this update, since I just finished re-reading the previous chapters. I love the quirky places your mind goes. :) I liked the details about the clones and the bit of character development for Sakura and Sasuke, as well as the more complex insight into Kurenai and Anko's situation. I know it's greedy of me, but I'll be looking forward to the next chapter like it's the summer's first ice cream!

NuitTombee posted a comment on Sunday 3rd July 2011 9:53am

Another excellent chapter! The cute Naruto/Hanabi interaction does make a nice ending. Unfortunately, I have to wait for tomorrow to read Perfect Slytherins because it's my self-imposed bed time.

As always best of luck with RL and for those stories of yours.

Thanks again,
James

Chris1 posted a comment on Sunday 3rd July 2011 9:27am

This just keeps getting better and better :D

joeBob posted a comment on Sunday 3rd July 2011 8:28am

Alright, an update! Thanks for that.

Solid, entertaining reading, as usual.

Teucrian posted a comment on Sunday 3rd July 2011 7:23am

This is an awesome story. I think that you might be getting a little off track with the clone thing, though. Its really interesting, but its a very different focus than the prank vs. dangerous/lethal fox dichotomy that you had going earlier.
Also, have you read chunin exam day by perfect lionheart? The author went really overboard with the shadow clone learning thing. Naruto had hundreds of skills/trades completely mastered, and clones for each of a dozen wives or something. It ended up being completely ridiculous. The independent clones shtick is pretty cool though, so I wouldn't cut that part out. The original goal was to have a 1000-strong army of jounin, right? So maybe focus more on that, and have the current personalities end up leaders, throw in some command structure stemming from the clone politics that was introduced earlier and introduce a couple of low ranking grunts for comic relief.
Rather than make Naruto a self-contained village with specialized independent clones for every skill, make him a one-man army like his original intention (maybe start by building squads or regiments with his current level four clones?).

I just thought that these were some interesting points that you might want to consider while moving forward with this story. What I'm thinking basically comes down to shifting the focus from learning life skills or random techniques (randomly assigning a full independent clone to only learn to cook? ninja leg shaving?) back to pranks along with more lethal combat techniques; the added implication is of shifting the allocation of clones from infrastructure type skills to ninja skills.

Orion posted a comment on Sunday 3rd July 2011 6:56am

Great! I agree that it's not a realistic story, but that's just fine. It's a fun story to read.

As always, thank you for writing and for sharing what you've written with us.

alec_potter posted a comment on Sunday 3rd July 2011 6:48am

Nice the way this story is shaping up. Great stuff. Can't wait for the Chunnin exams.

thehoboking posted a comment on Sunday 3rd July 2011 6:18am

good chapter...really like this story...but the only thing i didn't like about this chapter is the part where kurenai talks about how she wants anko more than naruto, since you made it seem like kurenai is barely interested in him at all...beside that sticking point...this was another amazing chapter...

zoroz posted a comment on Sunday 3rd July 2011 4:21am

This fic is sooo FUCKING AWESOME!!!, its probably the best Naruto fic I've ever read (I've read thousands) the only thing that would make it better is more frequent updates *wink wink* but other than that thanks for the chapter :)

Robert Peeples posted a comment on Sunday 3rd July 2011 4:14am

Loving it! Naruto is a functioning crazy :) he has very strong personality traits and then gives them form. I've always loved the stories where the clones can think independently.

Genericrandom posted a comment on Saturday 2nd July 2011 11:35pm

"Arguing with myself is always the best way forward." ~ This is an awesome line.

I like how you're blurring the line between 'jutsu' and 'whatever the hell Naruto does that isn't magic but probably should be'. Of course the usage of freaking life energy certainly does open up a few new and otherwise impossible avenues.

It's been too long since the scene would have happened, so I don't know that it didn't already, but it would have been nice to see someone make a comment that lead to Naruto wanting the gennin to pass or fail on their own merits. Again, that's assuming I just can't remember a a scene that did basically just that. If it did, then I just forgot, if it didn't it shows a distinct but slightly boring jump in Naurto's wisdom. He at least needed to argue with himself about it a bit more.

I liked the chapter though, and I really liked the continuing inclusion of Hanabi's, Kurenai's and Tsunade's growth and changes. It's important that the writer references back to and continues to show a major character's growth, but it's always awesome when a secondary/minor character's development gets rolled up into the natural flow of a story.

Looking forward to the next installment as always.

loiosh posted a comment on Saturday 2nd July 2011 11:00pm

Awesome new chapter! Been wait for updates from you and I can say it was worth the wait!

Lordamnesia posted a comment on Saturday 2nd July 2011 10:50pm

Fantastic chapter! Character development and explanations abound, which is perfect. Keep up the fantastic work, this is, and has been, one of my favorite Naruto stories just because on how your treating it.

Alrissa posted a comment on Thursday 30th June 2011 1:56pm

1. Brilliant
2. Amusing.
3. Plausible. (Mostly :P only 2.6% suspension of disbelief needed.)

Summary: Keep up the good work.

Rayah posted a comment on Thursday 30th June 2011 3:40am

*giggle*
Oh man! I do love this fic ^_^ and I'm really glad that you're still writing it (for a bit there I was afraid it had been abandoned)

wonderful part! and looking forward to more