Slytherin66 posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 5:14pm for Chapter 9

A very good chapter.

Dumbledore present was a surprise he always seemed so passive, but I can now easily picture him telling his deputy he had Ministry business only to go off and watch other competitions. I wonder if Dumbledore can place a bet with a bookie on Harry or with the Goblins next time.

It was a good point that usually when Harry wins its a team effort, I think he would like to win on his own and prefer it to team sports.

I wonder if a kiss from Gabrielle can fix Harry’s eye like the scratch he had in the first task.

A good point about intimacy and some interesting insight into the Veela and the myths surrounding them, but I so hope Harry ends up married to a Veela as they are such interesting people and would make a fantastic counterpart for Harry.

Brilliant names Crusher, Nasher and Thrasher.

Some good banter between Harry and Sirius and a good point about Harry poor childhood.

I liked Iain it was good of his to talk to Gabrielle and make sure she was happy and not feeling left out.

"I wouldn’t object." And the last time she had look on her face, Gabrielle was conceived, and I needed a week to recover!" both funny lines.

A very powerful moment between Fleur and Harry I hope she will start to warm up to him more as I so love Harry/Fleur and it comes with the bonus of making Gabrielle happy as Harry will be around.

Sirius is right Harry is impressive to make a Veela blush and to not get slapped.

The thoughts of Gabrielle was a nice change of pace and an interesting and unique perspective her conversation with Fleur was enlightening. A brilliant line ""All this knowledge in your golden head without the understanding needed beneath it." Fleur sounded wise and a bit like a mother. I wonder if her mum used that line on her when she was young.

A great line about Harry being like stone, it was well done and very cool.

I am pleased Gabrielle got to spend time with just Harry and that Harry was told he was loved as he rarely ever is by someone who means it absolutely. Harry carrying Gabrielle is always a good thing as it gives such a sense of closeness, safety and belonging which is not often found in the world of Harry Potter.

The fighting was good but not my favourite part of the story but it was different and something not usually done in fanfics. A good and valid point about Harry escaping his parents shadows being a Potter is both a blessing and a curse given the legacy and expectations that come with the name.

I look forward to the next chapter and thanks for this one.

Lise-ann posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 5:10pm for Chapter 9

Awesome to see another chapter. Glad that things are settling down for you as well.

Crys posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 4:43pm for Chapter 9

Okay, Mr. Myagi. Hot hand massage, thing.

And all the Veela fanon cliches crash and burn. Good and bad about that. The cliches can be used to make stories (which you've done well), but won't fit in well with this one. Glad you're going this route here.

> "Was he really that bad?" > "You know the answer, but you ignored it." That answer doesn't work in many fics, but here, it does. The way you've portrayed both Harry and AD makes it work. Whether AD would suspect Harry (before or after that comment) is another question, but not worth pursuing unless it becomes important later.

Huh. Makes sense that the dance clubs would sell the jars of glo-paint. Never really thought about it. And just saying that proves I've never been there, I'm sure.

Personally, I think you over-did the dance club scene. Too many people, too much money, everything went too perfect (though the bouncers helped). But you have stated that you unabashedly write fairy tales, so it's right in line with that.

That Gabrielle and Fleur scene was good. Gave us a view of their different psychologies. Fleur may well be right. Gabrielle is right, from her point of view, but as you mentioned, she's only 8 and so her worldview is different.

Good to see Fleur recognizes the core of darkness in Harry. She might actually make the right choices for herself.

Personally, I don't think any of them are right for Harry. Or, rather, none of them are right enough. This Harry won't be able to settle down, or at least what normal people consider to be "settling down". Sad, maybe, but as he is, I don't know what personality would fit with him.

But that decision is yours, not mine.

Loving the story. Thanks for writing.

Katsuhito posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 4:42pm for Chapter 9

Great, as always! Loved the whole tournament, especially as I train in martial arts too. You presented it in such a way that it wasn't too wordy (as some people do, to "show off" their knowledge), but still had enough description that I could fill in the rest and picture it in my mind.

Also liking the rising ... tension? .. or whatever with Kate and Fleur. Or rather, within them both. Still not sure which way you're going with that, although I have my suspicions.

Anyway, I look forward to the next installment. A couple weeks? Wow. Nice (projected) update speed. :)

Lee Dickie posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 4:20pm for Chapter 9

A cracking good take on the group moving towards adulthood.

Hoping you have a better new year.

Lee

Princess Fictoria posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 3:35pm for Chapter 9

I thank you for yet another amazing update. I hope Kate and Harry realize that they could actually work together. They remind me a bit of Mel Gibson and the prostitute from the movie Psyback. I hope that life is treating you well. Thank you again for your hard work and God bless you and your family throughout the coming year!

Nights_Silhouette posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 3:17pm for Chapter 9

A nice chapter, keep it up.

KuilanVampire posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 2:48pm for Chapter 9

Man, I'm going to be waiting these couple of weeks for the next chapter. I love this story and I would love if Harry and Fleur got together. You haven't written a story that is solidly romance between them. Thank You for writing, I hope to see the next chapter as soon as possible.

Bilypt posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 2:22pm for Chapter 9

Wonderful chapter! And Harry and 3 women awesone!

epsilon posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 1:18pm for Chapter 9

I really love this story. Great work.

Will we see the Dursleys reaction that day? I would think the local paper would carry a story about the championchip. Long term that will cause some problems, I imagine. Would some of the local politicians call to meet with Harry before the World Championchip? Would Grunnings ask Vernon to bring him in for a visit (and some free press)? Not sure how big kickboxing is in Britain, but it sounds like things that would happen.

Anyway, I love Gabrielle and everything to do with her. Very well written. The nightclub scene was great as well, but teasing us with Harry and three gorgeous girls and then having all of them head home to their own bed. :(

lol :)

I can see both Katie's and Fleur's perspective though. And the characters are better defined than in almost any story I've read, fanfic or book. So I'll accept the disappointing outcome.

Thanks for sharing and I'm really looking forward to the next chapter.

ghanima posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 1:08pm for Chapter 9

I'm thoroughly enjoying how you're developing the romantic relationships. It's nice to read about uncertainty characters are facing, feels very realistic.

Zamia posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 12:06pm for Chapter 9

So wickedly interwoven relationships between the 3 women and Harry and now Gabrielle coming onto the scene, surprised Harry knows which way his backside is pointing. Excellent read. Cheers.

Z

Hidohebi posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 11:15am for Chapter 9

Wonderful to see the update, im having just as much fun following this story as I did with Hope. Keep up the good work.

Hansi_Rahl posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 11:04am for Chapter 9

Great chapter! ^^

preier posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 10:30am for Chapter 9

very good chapter.

the finale to the tournament was great, especially good to see harry earning his victory.

very interesting reaction from fleur too. gabrielle's thoughts were ... impressive and the connection to hogwarts, already foreshadowed, is nicely mysterious.

thank you for sharing your stories.

GremlinXTJ posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 10:11am for Chapter 9

Heh, funny situation - 3 girls, each missing something to be his match. :D

Wolfric posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 8:28am for Chapter 9

Fine chapter. It is very nice to hear from you again. Thanks for writing. W.

gadriam posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 7:47am for Chapter 9

Amazing.

The only thing that felt a bit out of place was Annie. As you introduced her as rather normal, her responses felt odd. They do fit the story and the tone you've set, but not the character.

See? I had to dig and think a bit to find something to critisize. Your writing is indeed stellar.

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Thomas posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 7:33am for Chapter 9

I think I' m going to have to re read this. The chapter was nice to read, in a grammar and spelling kinda way, but i've forgotten who some of the side characters are.

Chris1 posted a comment on Sunday 13th January 2013 7:14am for Chapter 9

Iiiiiiiinteresting! It's good to see a new chapter of this :) I'm looking forward to how the situation between Harry and Kate resolves :D