mwinter posted a comment on Monday 18th July 2011 5:22am for Chapter 5

Nice chapter, nice rant at the beginning and end. waiting to see how you have Harry deal with the female population at Hogwarts and Slytherin in particular. Thanks for the update. Awaiting more.

iTz_RAVEN posted a comment on Monday 18th July 2011 5:05am for Chapter 5

Wow, in this chapter I could actually picture Harry as a powerful but lazy scholar slouching slightly in his chair as he described the three tenants of magic with a half full wine glass in one hand.

Palindrome102 posted a comment on Monday 18th July 2011 2:57am for Chapter 5

Another great chapter, I can't wait for the next one. :)

Ezrial posted a comment on Monday 18th July 2011 2:34am for Chapter 5

I love this series and its sometimes zany tangents. First impression of this chapter, it's great, the story is progressing, and the tricks you pull out of the hat are fitting and I love them. The twins are a riot, and I am loving to hate those who are 'hating' on Harry. Can't wait to see how the next family reunion goes at the Burrow!

One small thing that was very noticeable to me, was when the maitre'd (Jonathon) was speaking to Gabrielle, he referred to her as 'madame', which seems a somewhat jarring inconsistency in usage. Shouldn't she be referred to as 'mademoiselle'? I'm pretty sure that a young female child, no matter what species, isn't going to be mistaken for an older woman. Wouldn't the maitre'd refer to her as a 'young lady' to be polite and pleasant, rather than 'elder lady' which you seem to be saying here?
While a young girl will probably be pleased to be treated as a mature young lady, I don't think being called 'old' would be similarly so.

irezel posted a comment on Monday 18th July 2011 12:59am for Chapter 5

heeheehehehe....soooooo beautiful!! i love that harry is still a little oblivious. :)

forrestgreen117 posted a comment on Monday 18th July 2011 12:48am for Chapter 5

I. Love. This. Story. Every time a new chapter comes out, I re-read the whole thing and never get bored of it. The first part has humor out the wazoo, the second part shows a wonderfully gradual transition towards the seriousness; combined with Harry's transition toward adulthood.

WhiteElfElder posted a comment on Monday 18th July 2011 12:34am for Chapter 5

Harry sure gets up on a soap box doesn't he! This was a great update. Harry is becoming a force to be reckoned with at all levels, though he should tone down the flirting a little before it attracts the wrong kind of attention. Will Harry and Fleur ever move past animosity? You have stated that Harry will not get into any permanent relationship, will that stay true or will it change as time trudges along? Right now Gabby is alittle sister he never had, but what of the years ahead when she grows into her form?

Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Sunday 17th July 2011 11:28pm for Chapter 5

A fun chapter with that hilarious Weasley Twins meeting to start with and then a serious sequence that segues into a humorous/serious one in France. It should be rather interesting to see where this vineyard venture leads.

Rick D Gale posted a comment on Sunday 17th July 2011 7:47pm for Chapter 5

This is the type of chapter that you just want to go on and on and not stop until we see how Harry reacts when he discovers they've used Gabrielle as 'bait' in the second task.

I think he'll have a hard time waiting like he told the other champions he would.

Another excellent chapter. We, the readers, are humbled by your presence.

I look forward to your next chapter,

rdgale

scribbler posted a comment on Sunday 17th July 2011 6:37pm for Chapter 5

I really like this story - if only because it's very, very different than anything else currently being written. You've created an entirely new conceptualization of the HP world and in so doing, allowed us to see a very different HP. I like what you've done with the Delacours and I also like the way you've made Crabbe & Goyle a 'protection' unit for Harry. That totally suborns Draco & his 'authority' (if the ferret ever actually had any). I also like the Weasley twins (though I think you don't quite have their call-and-response pattern of speaking down the way some other writers have done it.

I would love to see this story head in the direction of Harry/Hermione/Gabrielle (when she's mature enough to handle that). I'm not sure right now what pairings you have in mind, but HHr has the most special place in my heart.

I'm definitely looking forward to more of this and hope you can post again soon.

Regards,

the_Scribbler

Lee Dickie posted a comment on Sunday 17th July 2011 6:22pm for Chapter 5

A great set of family domesticity scenes.

dpwheels57 posted a comment on Sunday 17th July 2011 6:11pm for Chapter 5

I love the way your story line is going. It is reading like a romance novel I didn't want to read but did a any way. It a smooth flow. the characters just fit, no other way to say it.

00_Knight posted a comment on Sunday 17th July 2011 5:46pm for Chapter 5

Another wonderful read!

KirijamaScion posted a comment on Sunday 17th July 2011 4:41pm for Chapter 5

Good chapter. A nice length and a lot accomplished. While harry was preachy it was the good kind of preachy. Inspirational and not too judgemental

OdinMage posted a comment on Sunday 17th July 2011 4:39pm for Chapter 5

I'd never thought of Bill like that before... in any case, I'm very happy for the update and can't wait for more!

Deborahsu posted a comment on Sunday 17th July 2011 4:09pm for Chapter 5

Hurray!!!! An update without a long wait! I really am enjoying this story. The twins are a hoot!

Cynrom posted a comment on Sunday 17th July 2011 3:51pm for Chapter 5

Another good chapter. Can't wait for a bit more action like the first task.

Chris. :)

Slytherin66 posted a comment on Sunday 17th July 2011 3:43pm for Chapter 5

Great chapter.

Good term that "a lady of 'negotiable’ affections."

The Twin’s summery of their family was perfect and I liked "the full Veela-lie-detector-whammy" it’s good the often overlooked words are being used and that we got more detail’s about Veela.

The Twins in France would do them good and they are better off far away from their family and the UK Ministry. The doubt over their names was a very good detail to add and gave some nice insight into the twins.
Very true about Harry/Fleur it is nice that Harry does not want to date her because he does not like her. I am glad Harry will get to decide for himself.

Essence du Gryffindor might make a nice gift for Minerva or Albus as long as Gabrielle is not hurt during its production. Ron and his followers looking stupid is always good long may it continue if they are the future of Magical Britain it’s doomed.

I have very much enjoyed the twins insight and role in this story they have much to offer and it has been fun while they change the world and help Harry achieve his potential. It makes sense doing what they love as a business would take some of the fun out of it or get boring. The plan to sell wine is a good one and has more potential for expansion and longevity as there are only so many jokes people want yet people will always want wine. The fact Harry can make it instantly is brilliant no wonder the Potters are so wealthy given how enterprising they are.

"Gabrielle had to walk here!" such a funny line it was a really good idea to have Gabrielle demand Harry carry her Harry needs the hugs and affection and its a nice detail about child Veela needing love and affection before they grow up and Harry carrying Gabrielle is cute.

Great banter between Michael and Marie having someone empathic near by would be very handy for avoiding or resolving misunderstandings. Harry feeling sad is not something many people give thought to.

The Veela Court how very interesting I really hope Harry gets a Veela for a wife or is planning on having one as the Veela are so interesting and he would need an exceptional counterpart to deal with his life and Harry really does deserve the love of a Veela or all of them and I would like him to be happy.

A good slogan for a t-shirt "I’m not supposed to be ignored, ever. I am Veela."

Harry giving Gabrielle his pudding was a nice gesture and very much like a favourite uncle the cuddle was good and the fact Gabrielle knows she is loved was very touching, the glow was a good reminder of magic and that Veela are really amazing.

Very funny "La la la," Harry sang, covering his ears. "That’s my sister!" I am so very pleased Harry has a family now I hope word gets back to his sister but Christophe does have a point about Harry attracting the ladies.

Harry more comfortable and relaxed is such a rare treat and makes him a much better character. The insight into magic was very well done Price instead of power and why Harry still uses a wand. It a welcome change in Harry that he made his view known rather than accept what he is told or say nothing for fear of being wrong.

I agree with you about the Weasley’s.

Thanks for this chapter I look forward to the next.

ryandark posted a comment on Sunday 17th July 2011 3:42pm for Chapter 5

Thank you again. Another splendid chapter. (And yes I do commonly use the word splendid.)

badboy1cdx posted a comment on Sunday 17th July 2011 3:13pm for Chapter 5

LOL...loved the chapter! I think you've turned a few cliches on their head with this chapter alone...can't wait for the next!