Katherine posted a comment on Wednesday 23rd October 2013 3:32am for Chapter 11

Please tell me you are going to post another chapter soon. I want to see the reactions of the other students. Will Harry claim that Dawn is his daughter? Or tell the truth?

command posted a comment on Friday 18th October 2013 10:37pm for Chapter 11

I liked this, which surprised me given how SUPER! Harry it feels. But after taking a step back, I realize that's not the issue. The issue is that Harry almost seems too good to be true, too perfect to be real. But thats not the case. If you step back you can see enough issues to make him real. The issue, is you put too much into the story. I think you've easily got enough content here to make at least 4 fleshed out stories. I think that in cramming it all together you, quite naturally, ended up glossing over much of the conflict in the story. That said, your doing so wasn't nessisary wrong. Sometimes we need these tremendously overdone, over plotted stories. For all I tink you brushed over some of the conflict and could have done four stories in place of this one, I like this a lot. And I'll look forward to more.

MizukiYumeko posted a comment on Thursday 17th October 2013 2:55pm for Chapter 11

Wahhahhha that's it?!?!?

Come on, there's got to be more! Right?

It's fantastic!

Zpenergy posted a comment on Saturday 12th October 2013 5:40pm for Chapter 11

Cool chapter I totally wasn't expecting Dawn.

gtgrouch posted a comment on Wednesday 2nd October 2013 1:22pm for Chapter 11

Interesting, but very odd. You have several layers here - and a *lot* of explaining to do!

Please avoid making this just another 'super Harry' story. Your story's charm is in how you've involved other characters.

Keena3105 posted a comment on Saturday 28th September 2013 8:10am for Chapter 11

i love this story so much, i can't wait for the next chapter to be up :D update again soon! <3

ibskib posted a comment on Friday 20th September 2013 12:15pm for Chapter 11

Oh, I always thought the title was meant to allude to the dawn of a new era, or something like that.

One thing I found positively cringeworthy was the way the other characters kept praising Harry for basically being awesome in all manner of ways, it felt pretty heavyhanded, and showing is better than telling, as long as restraint is used, which this chapter especially could use a bit more of.

The whole flying into the air when giving Hogwarts energy in front of everybody made Harry seem a bit too much like a showoff. Something to be wary of when creating a wishfulfilment/super! fic.

With great power, should come at least a modicum of humility and discretion to avoid creating an attention whore ;-)

TheGrimmChaos posted a comment on Wednesday 4th September 2013 10:02am for Chapter 11

Loved it. Keep up the good work!

-Destiny/TheGrimmChaos

Winsfind posted a comment on Wednesday 14th August 2013 1:36am for Chapter 11

Amazing fic love the party section laugh so hard it was hurtful lol love the line "Hey look its Dumbledore, everyone wave." loool love it

VampHunter001 posted a comment on Tuesday 13th August 2013 10:39am for Chapter 11

Wow, this is an excellent story! The characters are vibrant and alive, most are utilized in incredibly new ways. Eagerly looking forward to the rest.

Noble Korhedron posted a comment on Thursday 1st August 2013 10:23pm for Chapter 11

Interesting.... How do I follow this - i.e. get notification of updates?

wimvincken posted a comment on Wednesday 31st July 2013 2:02pm for Chapter 11

Did you mix up the chapters or is it me? Excellent story by the way

Ian Morgan posted a comment on Friday 19th July 2013 9:32pm for Chapter 11

Please donot leave a cliff hanger loke that for long please

LadyPhoenixFireRose posted a comment on Friday 19th July 2013 5:21am for Chapter 11

I'd say Potter Begins sounds way better than Harry Begins. But I like the name you gave it.

On a completely side note, I was actually watching that movie while reading this. This is the second time I read this, but watching the movie made it so much easier to connect Harry to Bruce. I could actually see the similarities. It probably didn't help that it was several months since I watched anything Batman the first time I red this chapter. Now though I really can see the similarities. So, there was talk about his costume, but what about his Super Hero name, no one mentioned anything about it, and I must know.

I am positively loving this story. It has to be one of my all time favorite stories. The only thing that would make it better in my books is if was Harry/Ginny. Not that I have a problem with Harry with anyone else, or Ginny for that matter, I just think that those two will always end up together, even if it does take two hundred years or so...

Elaineprt posted a comment on Tuesday 16th July 2013 5:04pm for Chapter 11

loved it as usual, glad to see your back.

DJPotter posted a comment on Monday 15th July 2013 11:04pm for Chapter 11

keichan2

"Someone, or something, took control of his body" And I’ll guess that THIS someone did play with time… But who could that be? An why? And I just had a frightening thought: Hadn’t this already happened when he was playing with time? What if "Christopher" in chapter 3 was created by the same entity that just took control of Harry?

Okaaayyy… The shield and the way the intruder dealt with Gabrielle were both hints… The plea for help, I thought came from Hogwarts because the intruder was siphoning her magic… Now I think it was Hogwarts but because Harry was about to prevent what happened…

I believe that THAT somone is Dawn. Harry did'nt known It is Hogwarts or Dawn and He want to prevent it. If you remember Dumbledore said that Time does not match Hogearts has more memories of Harry then Harry has of Hogwarts (Chapter 10 If ı remember rigth)

DJPotter posted a comment on Monday 15th July 2013 10:54pm for Chapter 11

keichan2

"We can licence Muggle movies, pay someone to see it" I’ve read this one, before, except that they did NOT licence the movies…

I belive you are talking about Runemaster by Tigerman

noylj posted a comment on Thursday 11th July 2013 10:54am for Chapter 11

Thank you, thank you, thank you.

I hate the wait, but am so happy when the update finally comes out.

immortal7 posted a comment on Wednesday 10th July 2013 10:56am for Chapter 11

always happy to se a new chapter on just about anything you write. I felt some of the scene a touch choppy or it could be that its 4 in the mornign as i was reading this. any way looking forward to meeting Dawn next chapter.

Princess Fictoria posted a comment on Tuesday 9th July 2013 4:58pm for Chapter 11

Lovely to see more of this. I have enjoyed the forward moving force that Harry is.... The fact that he is clearing the way and bringing his friends along fir the ride is even better! Thank you for all your hard work!