Bobmin356 posted a comment on Thursday 12th June 2008 10:46pm for Chapter 4

While I like this story, the reference to cards went completely over my head. Must be a British thing.

Wizard posted a comment on Thursday 12th June 2008 9:58pm for Chapter 4

This isn't exactly a "Fairy Tale" per se - 'cause I don't really see any of the Brothers Grimm's traditional themes in here, but I can see you're having a blast with this.

I take it the particular Fairy Tale to this story is done and gone, and that we're left with the sappy end - for better or for worse, but it's turning out to be a bit of a fun read.

True, what you've written can be found in nearly every other story you wrote before this (including that the general majority were also "Happily Ever Afters"), but it's nice to see you perfecting the end technique.

I both look forward to and wish to delay reading what else you may post, because with each story you write and finish (however engrossing it individually may be), we're that much closer to the end.

So, I'll write one last comment before resuming my lurking status. Over the years that I have been reading your work, it's been great to the dedication you have put forth in writing so many stories delving into the Harry Potter world. You have matured, you have developed your own writing style, and both are very easy to see and read.

However, if there is one piece of advice I can give, it is that if you want to further progress as a professional writer, you will need to branch out into different themes, some darker some lighter. (Nearly) Every story of yours I have read follows the same format, and after a while it can get a bit tedious. While what you write works, after a while it becomes... saccharine.

Of course, this is only one man's opinion, and in no way, shape or form does it reflect the broader image your majority of fans exude.

It is a shame you are leaving this particular world of imagination, but I wish you great luck and courage in your future ventures.

Zicou posted a comment on Thursday 12th June 2008 9:56pm for Chapter 4

Another awesome one !!!!
I love it !
Continuuuuuuue !

Z.

joeBob posted a comment on Thursday 12th June 2008 9:50pm for Chapter 4

Swell chapter, thank you.

GinnyLover posted a comment on Thursday 12th June 2008 9:45pm for Chapter 4

Only 48 hours left? I want to see YEARS!

Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Thursday 12th June 2008 9:40pm for Chapter 4

"Remember, the mind of a woman is a strange and mysterious place, and is not safe for navigation by mere males."

I think I may want to borrow this, with a slight tweak, for a story in another fandom. I figured I'd ask permission now and simplify matters.

I love this installment as further plans start to unfold and those with uncharitable feelings for Harry start to realize, however belatedly, that this might be a rather ill-chosen course of action.

Bravo!!

noylj posted a comment on Thursday 12th June 2008 9:36pm for Chapter 4

You left the ferret alive? What is wrong with you and Gabby? Have the Azkaban revolving doors been fixed? Will Malfoy lose his money? Will Harry ever get married? Will Albus simply die and let the rest of world have something else to be thankful for? Will Harry be seeker? Has the school already forgotten he was a seeker?
Great story (still liked Hope more, but this is still Harry/Gabby and Harry is having some fun and he might just get the WW to achieve some degree of humanity.

jilumasam posted a comment on Thursday 12th June 2008 9:25pm for Chapter 4

Nice!

Still that's a busy 38 hours!!!!

Liz

Patches posted a comment on Thursday 12th June 2008 8:47pm for Chapter 4

Another great chapter. Harry is certainly moving and shaking the wizarding world. And he has only really had one night's sleep since he woke up! I'm glad everyone who counts has accepted Garielle and Harry as a couple. That is great. Thanks for writing such a good story. I look forward to more! pms

liquidfyre posted a comment on Thursday 12th June 2008 8:13pm for Chapter 4

Damn good chapter i think i must of reread the part where McG lost her cool at least 5 times before i could move on

Wolfric posted a comment on Thursday 12th June 2008 7:58pm for Chapter 4

Great chapter. Too bad Malfoy didn't hit Fudge. Thanks for writing. W.

frankocsic posted a comment on Thursday 12th June 2008 7:23pm for Chapter 4

i like harry making waves in the wizarding world. i also like watching all the different plots unfold. very good job.

ladyimmortal posted a comment on Thursday 12th June 2008 7:21pm for Chapter 4

Tres magnifique!!!!

Tres, tres, Magnifique!!!
Bon!

J'adore!

I think I've run out of the French I remember.

Great chapter. The Malfoy treatment was brilliant. The Fudge treatment was even better.

J'adore!

Lon Huey posted a comment on Thursday 12th June 2008 7:11pm for Chapter 4

There we go, the detail I was looking for. Still moving at a good clip, but a little insight into the budding relationship.

I'm really enjoying this.

Spag-bol?

Ginny Luvr posted a comment on Thursday 12th June 2008 6:46pm for Chapter 4

Yay!

Another update. I don't suppose your readers can talk you into doing a large "info-dump," and posting the whole story? Please please.

Viridian posted a comment on Thursday 12th June 2008 6:41pm for Chapter 4

Dammit Tim! I just ate and this line:

"We are so screwed," McGonagall groaned, before clapping her hands over her mouth and looking appalled at what she had just said.

Got me laughing so hard I nearly threw up! I think you need add a warning to your disclaimers like they use for particularly boisterous amusement park rides...

The rapid-but-logical evolution of Harry and Gabby's relationship is quite amusing to watch as well.

I am a little sad that Draco was so quickly disposed of... it's hard to predict where any future conflict will develop now, but I'm sure you got something incredible up your sleeve.

Musings of Apathy posted a comment on Thursday 12th June 2008 6:19pm for Chapter 4

Excellent chapter as always. Let's see if the charges can stick to Malfoy, but I guess with Hermione having a month with him, it might not matter.

Thank you for writing.

Mike (MoA)

James Kennedy posted a comment on Thursday 12th June 2008 5:38pm for Chapter 4

I want to love your story. I really do. I've enjoyed reading your works, your drabbles, really most everything.

Unfortunately "Happily Ever After" doesn't work for me thus far. Other than the fact that it's a Jeconais story, there's not anything that attracts me to reading it.

While "Happily Ever After" is not one of your better works, I'll continue to read it in the hope that I see some hidden treasure. Your well-earned reputation deserves at least that much from me.

Gardengirl posted a comment on Thursday 12th June 2008 5:14pm for Chapter 4

Woo hoo! It's such fun getting to see it all again ~

Wonderbee31 posted a comment on Thursday 12th June 2008 5:04pm for Chapter 4

Well done here! Reallyliked the way that things sped by in this chapter, and all the little things that added up, to Minnie and her "screwed" statement, to Penny and her cooking prowess, to Albus finally leaving well enough alone, and Draco and his little idiotic steps there along with Fudge who seems to have no working braincells anyway you look at it.