By Jeconais
Reviews
Logan_MacLeod posted a comment on Friday 16th December 2005 11:41am
I love this story
Prince Charon posted a comment on Friday 16th December 2005 10:19am
Nice. Very nice, all the way through.
I look forward to the next one.
Em posted a comment on Friday 16th December 2005 8:26am
Loving the story so far! Keep up the good work. (Although I suppose more frequent updates would be muchly appreciated, eh?)
One point: You keep referring to the "Imperious" curse. I believe, when giving the actual name of the curse, it's actually just the "Imperius".
Joe Ritter posted a comment on Friday 16th December 2005 8:09am
You sure can spin a yarn. And I think I've fallen in love with Sammy. I would love to see her fight a little more with Ginny until Ginny proves herself to Sammy too. Ginny and Harry definitely need more time with this starting relationship.
Oh, this story is very much in your style. After all the varied stories you've done, I consider it just another of the wonderful facets. I love it and please continue writing your visions!
Fate posted a comment on Friday 16th December 2005 3:51am
This was absolutely lovely!
I can't wait to read the last story of the trilogy!
noylj posted a comment on Friday 16th December 2005 12:16am
What's the name of the story and why are you ending it here?
Maxennce posted a comment on Thursday 15th December 2005 10:27pm
very very cool chapter, but I had absolutely no idea that Sammy was quite that possessive. Shocked me that did. Keep up the great work, and just when is the next installment of Hope coming out? I was shocked when your seven day interval updating didn't happen Tim. But seriously, you should be entitled to have a life, and I shouldn't be so shocked when you act on your god given right to use it. So when you get a chance, think of us poor losers who hang on your every word and take it as drug takers going through withdrawl. Keep up the great work
Cheers
Max
Ali posted a comment on Thursday 15th December 2005 10:16pm
Tim, I hate to say this, but I was a little disappointed with this chapter. I enjoy H/G, but this felt a little sacchrine, a little off, and a bit of a step back from your progression as a writer.
The whole situation with Ginny was funny, but I feel that you've done this route one too many times. It'd be much better if she had set this up because she felt the aurors were slacking, and then threw in a remark about it being nice to talk to him as well. Let Harry put two and two together and realize he was shutting her out (unless it was deliberate). Ginny throwing herself at him reeks of desperation, and to be honest, doesn't sit well with the strong character I feel like you're trying to portray.
As for Harry, well, he just went with it. Once he'd pointed out to Ginny the situation, and how he didn't like being manipulated, he just went along with dating her. The only difference between her and the other girls is that he knows her and knows she isn't in it for the name. If anything, the Harry you've portrayed here seems like he wouldn't go out with Ginny, not because of her manipulations, but because he doesn't have those feelings for her. I just feel funny about this, but hopefully the next part will make things work for me.
As for Harry and Sammy, well, I feel that this is the best part of your series. Their relationship is very cute, and reminds me of my uncle and how close I was to him. I grew up wanting to marry him as well, and even told his fiancee at her first family gathering that I hated her (I was six, I had an excuse!). Sammy is perceptive, and loves Harry for who he is. Now, I don't know if it would work out in the long run, or if she were older, but I see more chemistry and more potential in this pairing than in H/G. To be honest, I thyink I would have rather just had a story about Harry and Sammy, and how their relationship develops, romantic or not.
Overall, it wasn't bad, nor poorly written. Just, well, disappointing. I'll withold judgement until the next part comes out, though. As we all know from Hope, the addition of a chapter can change everyone's perceptions.
Jack-A-Roe posted a comment on Thursday 15th December 2005 7:02pm
That was an enjoyable story. I loved all the Weasley's changing women.
I wanted to see Harry yell at the auror's, but it wasn't actually needed in the story.
AnnieBee posted a comment on Thursday 15th December 2005 5:33pm
I had forgotten that there was a cliffhanger on the first part of this story.
I must give you a huge THANKS and a standing ovation. Your story made me laugh until tears streamed down my face and my middle began to hurt.
I had a feeling that the challenge was going to be good, interesting and worthwhile but not hilarious.
Goo with the taste of strawberrries and cream ummmm. Ingenious!
I really enjoyed the portrayal you did on Sammy. That's one smart cookie!!!! And the event being seen on a BIG SCREEN by all those who remained behind. This story could have been a hazard to my health if I was to do as I usually do; eat and read at the computer. I think I would have choked on my food more than once.
Once more thanks; I was feeling kind of flat today. Now that the semester is over and I no longer have to live running from the bookstore to school, to pick-up my daughter and home to do the things Moms who are back in college have to do and steal some time from all of them nasty chores in order to be ablle to read my fanfiction.
Thanks for sharing a great story!!! ;)
Are you planning on taking it further? Just curiosity... Anyway Happy Holidays and thanks
for writing it.
Cheers, AnnieBee
PhishBulb posted a comment on Thursday 15th December 2005 4:54pm
I guess I agree and disagree with you saying that this is not one of your standard stories. You've written a girl who loves harry, who understands him better than most, who is fiercely loyal to him, and who inspires him to be someone better than who his is. These characteristics find their way into many of your stories. Only difference is this time they are in a 7 year old girl.
I enjoyed it, as I enjoy everything you write, but I can't help but wonder how things might be different if Sammy was 17 instead of 7. I can't help but feel a little bit sorry for Harry especially since Ginny, so far, has been so uninspiring. I'm very much looking forward to the next chapter.
kittykatluver posted a comment on Thursday 15th December 2005 3:23pm
Ooo, how sweet!!! I like it! Please make more!
Manatheron posted a comment on Thursday 15th December 2005 2:12pm
AWWWWWWW....
Excellent! Is there going to be another chapter? or is this it?
Knight_Hax0r posted a comment on Thursday 15th December 2005 1:05pm
Oooh, another incredible story from you Jeconais. You always produce Superb literature, and this is just another example! I particularlly enjoyed Harry's thrashing of the Aurors!
Thiago posted a comment on Thursday 15th December 2005 1:03pm
WoW!!! Tim, It's truly excellent, This is your Stile!!! (sorry if my english, is not far so good, but understand me I'm from spain and it's not my mother language, and not spanish also, Ok stop talking about me!!)
Hey !! I really enjoy all night long, now with alone, I really want to read the third part, and with kokopelli, he's awaesome too!!!
I really want to read all your unfinished stories, Hope TMW and all, be good and continue writing like that, you make me feel like if I'm inside of the sory this is my firs review in all th websit so hope to enjoy it.
Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Thursday 15th December 2005 9:17am
Some interesting twists there that I didn't expect - mark of a good author that. It'll be interesting to see how this relationship develops and how well Sammy reacts to it. Yet another story for me to follow carefully.
nonjon posted a comment on Thursday 15th December 2005 7:32am
You know, it's kind of weird, but from you, learning this entire auror exercise and such was an elaborate poorly designed plan by Ginny to try and get Harry is a little disappointing. Were this story from any other author I would be applauding their creativity at an interesting twist and clever ruse. But for some reason, it feels like this is the sort of plan/twist you've done before, though I'm not sure I can identify which story or stories (or even if it was Ginny). Maybe it's the whole Padma/Gabrielle thing where they try to come up with a way to impress Harry and he always seems even more impressive than their plans.
Not really sure to be honest.
But you should take it as a compliment that I hold everything I read from you to a higher standard. Were this anyone else, it would be a really good story. But from you, and the consistency and quality I've come to expect from your writing, I find this story seems just kind of average. Not bad in the slightest, but not very remarkable.
And as always, average from you is still about the best stuff out there.
Thanks for sharing. Looking forward to your and Kokopelli's follow-up.
Jack B Nimble posted a comment on Thursday 15th December 2005 7:13am
I think my thesaurus is broken. I need another word for "wow," but that seems to be about the only thing I can come up with. This story could have been very different. As much as I liked Sammy in the first part, I really thought it was more of an aside.
This is very different from most of your stories, but a great addition to the library. The action and humor we expect were there, the banter was especially good (loved when Ron comments on Sammy's perception), but the scenes with Sammy put a real twist, and a very good one, on the whole story.
Best image: Ginny being chased away by Sammy's fireballs!
What's missing... More Shack interaction -- great development there. Also wanted to see Tonk's reaction after the exercise.
Sonicdale posted a comment on Thursday 15th December 2005 6:47am
Nice.
Love the part with Sammy.
The competition was great too.
So, if Harry marries Ginny, um, does that make him win? Or does she capture his flag?
:)
Good work.
the-ravenhaired-one posted a comment on Friday 16th December 2005 2:49pm