Alone
Part 1
By Jeconais
Reviews
Hoshi posted a comment on Thursday 4th August 2005 2:16pm for Part 1
Another master piece to love !!
Richard posted a comment on Thursday 4th August 2005 5:25am for Part 1
I really liked this Tim. i did notice that Hermione said "I don’t have class" but you knew I had to pick at something didn't you?
crawfsh posted a comment on Wednesday 3rd August 2005 11:42pm for Part 1
Great sequel! Fantastic writing as always. I'm looking forward to the CTF game in the next part. I just know it'll be spectacular and full of humorous events.
Bill posted a comment on Wednesday 3rd August 2005 11:03pm for Part 1
Outstanding as always, Tim. The Sammy scenes are so obnoxiously cute that I can't help but love them. If you put this much effort and spunk into future chapters of 'Alone' it will be a hit much like the rest of your fan fiction. Keep up the good work and I'll be checking for updates quite often!
Steven posted a comment on Wednesday 3rd August 2005 9:01pm for Part 1
Very nice start to an interesting story. I like the imagry so far. You have gotten better at your writing as time has passed and you were not bad to begin with.
Anime Ronin posted a comment on Wednesday 3rd August 2005 8:49pm for Part 1
Hmm, quite liked this one - I almost feel bad for the other Aurors, almost, but they appear to need it. Hope more comes out soon.
Joe posted a comment on Wednesday 3rd August 2005 8:06pm for Part 1
Loved the story, in fact I love pretty much all of your stories. I can't wait for the next chapter to see Harry take on the Aurors. Just one little mistake in the masterpiece that I noticed was that you change either Fred or George's wife as you started off with them being late for Penelope and Katie but then had Sammy say they were married to Penelope and Alicia.
Jack B Nimble posted a comment on Wednesday 3rd August 2005 7:20pm for Part 1
Out-freaking-standing!
It is amazing how much, and how well, you flesh out a story. Most authors would not have thought to bring in a character like Sammy, as they would be too caught up in the romance or moving the story along, but the scenes with her added a great many dimensions to Harry's character. Add in the interaction with Kingsley, I really like what you've done with him, and Harry stands out in stark contrast from the other 'Harry Potter' you talk about.
Your other characters also make this a real treat. Hermione works well, and Sumi fits in nicely. Molly is even human. Percy was rather one-dimensional, and that's okay.
All of this does come at a cost, though. We have little idea about the type of character Ginny has grown into in this world, as she has precious little dialog.
There is a great deal to look forward to, especially some of the DA students showing up soon, which leads me to a question. Assuming Alone was mark 'Complete' in error, how long do you expect the story to be?
Thanks for all the hard work, and thanks for sharing the results! Looking forward to more.
justme posted a comment on Wednesday 3rd August 2005 6:52pm for Part 1
Part 1 was good, but this was better. I can't wait for next sequel (this would make a great series... nudge, nudge).
The Silent Legend posted a comment on Wednesday 3rd August 2005 6:50pm for Part 1
Excellent...I love the portrayl of Harry as two different people, both 'Harry Potter' and 'Uncle Harry.' I eagerly await the 'battle' between Harry and the auror corps, though I suspect it won't be much of one, if the auror's are as lazy as portrayed...
Cheers...I love Shacklebolt and Percy in this one.... very well written whole way through,so far...keep up the good work ;-)
Steven Augart posted a comment on Wednesday 3rd August 2005 6:47pm for Part 1
I should mention here that, on your story listing page, this story is marked as "Completed". I don't know if that was your intent, though I doubt it was, given that this is titled "Part 1".
Steven Augart posted a comment on Wednesday 3rd August 2005 6:45pm for Part 1
what a pleasant little read. Nice story. I don't know if this'll be a multi-chaptered fic; it's fine as a stand-alone, too.
Hood posted a comment on Wednesday 3rd August 2005 6:38pm for Part 1
i like this alot can't wait for the next chapter . keep up the good work and hope all goes well with your move
Chris posted a comment on Wednesday 3rd August 2005 6:10pm for Part 1
Awesome story. Had the exact amount of humor added to it. Don't keep us waiting too long for the next one!
Goyana posted a comment on Wednesday 3rd August 2005 5:58pm for Part 1
Great story, cant wait for the next one
bachgwion posted a comment on Wednesday 3rd August 2005 5:48pm for Part 1
One of the things that makes this story tiresome is that it is poorly conceived and has no interest value aside from the fact that you seem to be writing this and the other as an escape from finishing WKGQ for a while. The great girlfriend hand off seems to be the case in point within cannon Ron/Herminone, Percy was with Penelope and Bill was with Fluer. The only purpose there seems to be for these choices is not even worth mentioning. I would have thought that with your high standard that you have set with your other stories that you would have rethought this story line and save the rest of us suffering through your discardings. I like your stories very much but think that this is not worth the minute thought process that birthed it.
Kaiya posted a comment on Wednesday 3rd August 2005 5:42pm for Part 1
*giggles* sammy is adourable!
are you going to write the flag game?
more please ^_^
Aaron posted a comment on Wednesday 3rd August 2005 4:38pm for Part 1
I liked it when Sammy says, "Uncles Fred and George have Aunts Alicia and Penelope." Even a seven year old knows to group them together like that...
Debby Smith posted a comment on Wednesday 3rd August 2005 4:18pm for Part 1
I love this and can hardly wait for the next intallment.
Debby
BJH posted a comment on Thursday 4th August 2005 4:58pm for Part 1