Lady_Hope posted a comment on Tuesday 28th August 2007 6:05pm for 1 - Discovery

this is really good so far. of course its only chapter one.
i was really tentative about reading this because, i mean come on, harry and pansy? but i think im gonna have to work REALLLY har not to read it all tonight and get no sleep.

Zane posted a comment on Sunday 22nd July 2007 1:54pm for 1 - Discovery

Very enjoyable.
Finished Deathly Hallows yesterday 'round lunch.
Been looking for somthing nice and AU.

roche posted a comment on Sunday 15th July 2007 8:23am for 1 - Discovery

i liked the story but i didn't like part with implying harrypansyginny in the story woulda pefered just harrypansy

Daily Prophet Reporting posted a comment on Thursday 10th May 2007 12:53am for 1 - Discovery

Tim,

I know I said several times before that I was going to give your non-H/G fics a try, but since I've been here the last few nights finishing up TMW anyway I figured it was about time I actually did it. Hope probably would have been my first choice to start with, but I'm also trying to stay away from in-progress fics, so here I am giving this a try.

And to be brutally honest, you almost lost me in the first section.

Draco has only paid attention to me, as I’ve been a simpering hanger-on. I know that I have friends who like me for my personality, not my looks, and it’s been a really Slytherin thing to do - trick everyone in the house, including Snape, for my entire time there.

As the kind of canon-thumping reader who hangs out at sites like PS and SQ, being told five books worth of Jo's portrayal of a character was all a lie is not something that goes over well. I couldn't make that jump for some random author, but I know and respect your writing enough that I was willing to keep going. And I'm still here.

Where you deserve the most credit is for the state you put Harry in when the Parkinsons found him. Making him that helpless -- and I don't think that was too huge of a stretch from the Post-OotP perspective -- really disarmed a lot of the trust issues that this pairing naturally creates. And, as we've seen in canon, nothing brings characters together better than a good rescue.

I still think Harry here is a bit too open too quickly for my tastes (especially about the Prophesy), but given this background I could definitely see Harry being desparate to trust someone. That's especially the case given his lack of trust in Dumbledore and the Order, something that certainly promises to be an especially interesting point of conflict going forward.

At first I was also put off a bit by the fact that Pansy here acts so similarly to Ginny in TMW. But the more I think about it, if I'm willing to accept that Pansy's not a brainless cow, the ambition, the ruthlessness and even the willingness to commit to loving Harry almost blindly fits a lot more naturally here. As you've made clear in both stories, it is a rather Slytherin attitude. And it worked in TMW, so I'm guessing it might work better here.

And lest I sound too negative, I greatly enjoyed the Parksinsons' reaction to the Dursleys. It was refreshingly gratifying after all the righteous anger I've seen so often in canon and fanon.

So, anyway, that's enough rambling for Chapter 1. I'm definitely interested to see where you're taking this, and I'll do my best to keep an open mind.

-KC

noylj posted a comment on Monday 26th March 2007 10:18pm for 1 - Discovery

Why, oh why, do so many people have a dislike of profits? It is time that the WW and RW realize that the profit motive if the best control to ensure that resources are used to their fullest by the whole of society. As long as the Parkinson's are not involved in fraud or coersion, they are a benefit to both worlds.

mashimaromadness posted a comment on Saturday 27th January 2007 11:58pm for 1 - Discovery

I thought a reread was in order, as you seem to have updated since I suddenly stopped recieving your alerts. I know I've read this story, but even ignoring the fact that I love it so much I had to reread it, I'm sure it will give continutity to the chapters I've yet to read, so I don't end up spending the whole new chapter trying to remember details from a year or more ago. So, I'm not sure yet, but I may not review every chapter, as I normally do, because my custom with rereads is only to review if I have something to say other than the fact that I love it, because likelyhood is you already have a review along those lines from me for each chapter. That being said, I may find the need to remind you how much I love it every once and a while, when the mood strikes me. So lack of review from me is a good sign really. Cause it something is bothering me I'll be sure to tell you about it.

Anyway, I actually do adore this story, I could barely put it down last time and I am looking forward to repeating the expierience and actually getting to read the end of the story, which I had been waiting for.

Bye now,

Mashimaromadness

Jeffrey1 posted a comment on Saturday 27th January 2007 9:23pm for 1 - Discovery

excellent.a topnotch chapter.

paulaluv2001 posted a comment on Friday 24th November 2006 8:38pm for 1 - Discovery

Please finish White Knight Grey Queen. I love this story and would love to read more.

noylj posted a comment on Thursday 31st August 2006 11:18pm for 1 - Discovery

So, Pansy has to be beautiful to get Harry, huh? She couldn't just be a good person inside?
I love all your stories, but I sure would like longer stories with more frequent updates...but I'll take what I can get. For as much as I am paying you, I can wait...if I HAVE to.

Rebel Goddess posted a comment on Sunday 25th June 2006 5:29am for 1 - Discovery

I knew I was going to like Pansy when you had her quote Hamlet as Macbeth to Dudley. It just made me laugh. I liked her even more when she knocked Dudley out the hard way. I now love the girl. She’s beautiful and clever but not a Mary-Sue. Fantastic beginning. I actually believe these two could have a relationship.

ghanima posted a comment on Friday 21st April 2006 8:20pm for 1 - Discovery

I've read this fic several times and I think it has a good plot and is well written, however every time I read it this bit of dialog makes me want to pull my hair out.

Will you fix it? Please!

"Wonderful news! The owner of GP International, our parent company, is coming here on Wednesday for dinner. He’s bringing his wife and daughter. If it goes well, I will be promoted to the parent company!"

"Oh, Vernon," Petunia whispered breathlessly, and then leaned in and kissed him on the cheek. "That’s wonderful news."

The loud clomping of feet announced the arrival of their elephantine son. "Yo, wassup?" Dudley demanded, his arms folded in front of him.

"Duddikins, what have we said about talking like that at home?"

Dudley rolled his pig-like eyes. "Don’t," he mimicked.

"Exactly. Now, listen carefully son. I have a chance of a huge promotion. My ultimate boss will be visiting on Wednesday with his wife and daughter. You have to be on your best behaviour and in your smartest clothes."


Oh, and I'm thrilled that you have so many more fics sent to beta!

Ghani

Viridian posted a comment on Thursday 23rd March 2006 10:34pm for 1 - Discovery

Oh sweet Jaysus, intelligent Slytherins?!? This cannot be!

Nicely done!

PerfesserN posted a comment on Wednesday 8th March 2006 5:29am for 1 - Discovery

After reading WKGQ I recommended the story to all my friends, and we all agree the story is engaging, compelling, a real page clicker! The characters are beautifully rendered and the story grabs you and makes you feel involved. Two enthusiastic thumbs up! Any chance of a continuation or a sequal? Maybe an epilogue - Children of the White Knight and Grey Queen? Does that make Ginny the Off-white Princess?

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Tuesday 31st January 2006 12:33pm for 1 - Discovery

Ch.1 - - This is perhaps the best story I have read to give the meaning of being Slyhterin, outside of the Voldemort Pureblood balderdash.

It makes me see how being a Slytherin might not be that bad. Interesting. I have known that the house would not have existed over a thousand years if all it did was produce Dark Lords bent on world domination.

Terrific start!

luantum posted a comment on Tuesday 27th December 2005 11:16pm for 1 - Discovery

Hey! This is a well done fic. I like it a lot and it seems rather realistic. I also like how you show the "grey" families as apposed to "evil" in stark contrast to "good". It is much closer to real life and therefor makes the fic more interesting.

Christopher Estep posted a comment on Sunday 25th December 2005 5:51pm for 1 - Discovery

So far, we have Independent!Parkinsons, Clueless!Dursleys, MegaGIT!Dudley, and (unfortunately) Depressed!Harry and Physically-Ill!Harry. The Parkinsons spring Harry from the Dursleys, and Imperio the Dursleys into confessing their actions to the cops. Tonks is sent to investigate, and proceeds to tear Dumbledore a new one (and engage in some Snape-bashing in the process). In addition, Dobby, who ALSO finds out how Harry was treated, is VERY upset with Dumbledore, and resigns from Hogwarts to join Harry at Parkinson Manor. The surprising trigger for (to paraphrase Lemony Snicket) this Series Of Fortunate Events? Malcom and Lucius have a spat over Malcom's Muggle dealings and Lucius goes crying to the Dark Wanker.

Logan_macLeod posted a comment on Thursday 3rd November 2005 10:35pm for 1 - Discovery

WHen I stumbled across this fic I had my reservations but so far this is BRILLIANT!!!

Stone Cold posted a comment on Sunday 16th October 2005 3:45pm for 1 - Discovery

This is probably the best one of your HP stories I've read. I really hope this gets continued and finished. Don't leave us hanging brother.

Lori posted a comment on Sunday 25th September 2005 9:11am for 1 - Discovery

I did not expect to like your story - Harry and Pansy? I would have never put them together. However, I am officially sucked in and loving every minute of it.

Thank you.

TxA_GunFighter posted a comment on Thursday 15th September 2005 5:36pm for 1 - Discovery

Very good start. Looks very interesting.

gunny