NuitTombee posted a comment on Tuesday 7th September 2010 6:51pm for Chapter 4

The only thing that was potentially wrong was the use of the word 'git'. Though I could be wrong seeing as I've never looked into the history of the Elemental Nations. I was going to insert some witty remark but I'd make myself look like an idiot. Anyways, I love the story and I will be sad when it ends, just like all the others.

"...grinning like a necrophiliac in a morgue." ~The Light Fantastic, Terry Pratchett

wolfey posted a comment on Tuesday 7th September 2010 6:45pm for Chapter 4

You should try writing naruto with lesser characters too sometimes. Like I read this great story on fanfiction that was a naruto/karin story. I loved it. But I mainly like stories with naruto/tsunade, naruto/tsume, naruto/koyuki. I am in to the older women lol.

Jim_xinu posted a comment on Tuesday 7th September 2010 6:39pm for Chapter 4

Fun chapter. It's great that you're enjoying writing again. Thanks for sharing it with us.

sithknight01 posted a comment on Tuesday 7th September 2010 6:26pm for Chapter 4

very nice, once again you pull another amazing chapter for one of your stories.
my only complaint is the time it takes for a new chapter but that just me being unrealistic as i know that real life can get in the way and you have multiple storeies going at once

tangentsferret posted a comment on Tuesday 7th September 2010 6:06pm for Chapter 4

Pardon me, pardon me, cogent, intelligent, verbose and extremely erudite review in progress here:

WHEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!


That is all.

joeBob posted a comment on Tuesday 7th September 2010 5:41pm for Chapter 4

Entertaining chapter.

But, Mexican soap-opera in Japan? Naruto's reaction to the Hanabi-pedophile incident seems too much. Public shaming for Kakashi? Borderline. Publicly shaming Hanabi, who was trying to act honorably? Uncalled for.

>> The alcohol settled him a little, before his chakra burned it up.
You now how gross a drunk's sweat smells (alcohol and its metabolites)? Now Naruto just pulsed out a concentrated 3-beer stench, in a minute or 2, and with nothing being removed via the kidneys? Eeeewwww.

>> Haku was needling Sasuke
Har, har.

>> "On what?" Konoha asked.
Konoha speaks and acts several times. Should be Konohamaru. (Unless the village has embodied an avatar.)

Naruto, was more than a bit of a jerk in this chapter, but it's still a great story.

selonianth posted a comment on Tuesday 7th September 2010 5:20pm for Chapter 4

As to why kakashi got punched. Add a part 'was utterly terrified of naruto at that moment'

QOShea posted a comment on Tuesday 7th September 2010 5:17pm for Chapter 4

Love this story! Very nice chapter!

Looking forward to seeing more of your writing, no matter what it is.

Dracolych69 posted a comment on Tuesday 7th September 2010 4:19pm for Chapter 4

Nice chapter! Yeah, the Hanabi thing was IC, and very cute. Who's finishing move was that? Not Scorpion, since he is known for burning them to ash. Was it Kano? Eh, ether way, it was cool. First time I've seen anyone add in stuff from Mortal Kombat into a Naruto fic, which is kinda surprising, now that I think of it.

grey_shadow_horse posted a comment on Tuesday 7th September 2010 4:06pm for Chapter 4

Great chapter :) I loved it!

Lee Dickie posted a comment on Tuesday 7th September 2010 3:27pm for Chapter 4

A great fun update with a more realistic approach as to what is acceptable even in a society of assasins.