Ancalador posted a comment on Wednesday 8th September 2010 11:00pm for Chapter 4

Damn that was brilliant. You're not just an author, you're an artist!

Hope you keep the good stuff coming; and why hasn't foxy-Chan been allowed to inhabit a shadow clone yet?

Duraiken posted a comment on Wednesday 8th September 2010 7:17pm for Chapter 4

I've been divided on this story for a little while now. I started out not thinking I could like it, but like almost everything else Jeconais writes, I'm starting to grow fond of it. I'm still a little uncertain on some things, like how short a time it's taking for Naruto to turn people to side, like Neji, even if Neji was indirect and something that likely couldn't be achieved by mortal ken. I understand it's a crackfic, just something about the style of writing was throwing me off. On the other hand, the kind of sheer insanity coming out of Naruto's noggin really helps me overlook little things like that that bother me, probably because he reminds me of me. WHich is itself a scary thought.

One thing I myself at least would like to see is an epilogue to wrap things up post Sound invasion, like Akatsuki and any other (potential) loose ends. Other than that, I really can't think of any other ways this could be improved.

keichan2 posted a comment on Wednesday 8th September 2010 6:44pm for Chapter 4

I saw it coming! She would use her glare to summon Naruto (on a side note and because I just re-read a cross-over Naruto D&D: could it be a "Summon Monster level 44 spell"? ;-p)
Everybody (or at least her parents...) knows that a little girl's frown is a weapon of mass destruction!

"a thirty-sixth of my power" I wonder how would people react when learning what he did with so little of his potential :-D

"the Pituitary gland" COOL! This is an educative fanfic too! There is no reason anymore to prevent me from reading! ;-p

"Good enough to be yelled at?" Bwahahahaha! Thanks :-)

"No, the telling off I just received." I knew he wasn't worried over the attempt on his life getting out :-)

Ooh... I do wonder what book she used as learning material, and whether or not she will be scolded for having even read it...
(EDIT: wrote that too soon... Though I think that Kakashi will soon have a visit from Naruto... And maybe a behavioral adjustment applied... (EDIT2: was right!))

As for NARUTO giving HANABI the Talk... I really though he would run for the first female adult he could find!

"Do men really want to put their thing up a girl’s bum?" I was eating and nearly sprayed my screen: I'll just finish eating and continue reading later... It's safer that way!

"The bouncer suddenly appeared to remember a pressing appointment in another country"... or is it an appointment to the bathroom?

"Anko flew out of her chair, propelled by the blood from her nose." Is Naruto playing a game with Anko? (which one will cause the most faintings)

"needed a clean pair of underwear." I swear I wrote the comment above BEFORE reading this part! (I'm just that good ;-p)

I'm wondering if Hanabi helping her sister find another boy is not just clearing the path for herself...

You know what, Naruto and his henged clones beats a plan, 3D animations and even models every time! (I kind of like 3D architecture pics, and this idea made me drool)

Did Naruto think about the Ranma dilemma? (I don't wear no stinkin' lingerie in my girl form because when I get hot water, I'm a guy in lingerie!)
He was able to create a pair of panties for his "lesbian no jutsu", so he should be able to do the same for himself, no?

"They looked around, to find the Hokage and the Pervert on the floor, unconscious." I thought so :-D

"You-you-you’re a boy!" I wonder... Will it cause traumatic choc? :-D

I hope to read more soon!

K Ward posted a comment on Wednesday 8th September 2010 12:22pm for Chapter 4

I am Really loving this, keep up the good work!!

goddessa39 posted a comment on Wednesday 8th September 2010 9:49am for Chapter 4

I love this, and while I say that about just about all of your work, I will say it again.

I find myself really into this and when I saw the alert in my inbox I was so happy that I had myself psyched out that it was some other fic just so I wouldn't pee my panties all happy-like.

Naruko is also fun. I know a lot of people just use her like a henge, and some not at all, but here she is a her in place of Naruto and that really is fun. I'm a little sad that Kurenei won't get her eventually Asuma-baby but then again you said it does not go that far in the canon. Pity.

Darkon posted a comment on Wednesday 8th September 2010 9:00am for Chapter 4

As always great work loved the attack. The "talk" well it went as expected. For all that I can honestly say that this story is better than forty percent of the Naruto stuff that I read at ffnet. While I'm a Naru/Hina shipper Naru/Kure Naru/Anko and Naru/Older!Hanabi are also ones I'd read. Harems are always fun but killer hard to write and I only like well written ones the others are like badly written porn bleh. Love flirty happy Anko so keep up the great work can't wait to read the next one. Before I forget FATALITY NARU-ZERO WINS! BWAHAHHAHAHAHHAH. Should have had him henge for that move snicker snicker. Spine-rip Spine-rip in the announcer's way of saying Friendship Friendship. GWAHAHAHAHAH.

frankocsic posted a comment on Wednesday 8th September 2010 7:16am for Chapter 4

so cool that you've updated again so soon. great great read. kiba as a poor man's naruto was sad, but true. lol. i like that naruto's managing to help out everyone else, but doesn't come off as an all-knowing arse, because he himself isn't perfect. great job, and thanks for updating!

Genericrandom posted a comment on Wednesday 8th September 2010 7:02am for Chapter 4

I'm happy you like this chapter, I rather liked it too. I am, in fact not surprised, but I am also incredibly thrilled by that announcement. Good stuff.

The plot thickens, and the story develops, and it just keeps getting better, I can't wait to see what comes next. 9.7/10 Because you dealt with the Naruto/Hanabi in a way that perfectly fit her character, fit his character after the growth you've allowed him or rather, I think it's very much like what he would have said were something like this to happen in canon, just much more of a rationalized and well presented response instead of a chicken panicking with its head cut off.

I liked this chapter, a lot. Looking forward to more.

xardoth posted a comment on Wednesday 8th September 2010 5:32am for Chapter 4

* Incessantly giggles.*

Like how this chapter ended. Not really sure what you meant by the comment on why Jiriaya is there, don't remember the first chapter plot too well. Anyway.. liking how you have the 'harem' dynamics sorted out so far, and the logical reasoning vs believable argument is interesting. I don't think I've read any decent Naruto harem with plot not by Fosfor or Daneel Rush. The best stories (rather the ones I like the most) are ones where Naruto has interactions like what you did here with Hanabi (the whole adopting sisters thing) - which isn't really a harem anymore as much as a skewed amount of female chars vs male involved in the character interactions. Anyway - hope you keep having inspiration to continue this, I'd like to see what you come up with, and stopping at the Sound Invasion seems like a nice point for this sort of fic (haven't seen *any* decent character interaction on post-timeskip fics that aren't completely AU or altaverse.)

darthridian posted a comment on Wednesday 8th September 2010 3:09am for Chapter 4

great addition mate, liked it when Jiraiya got his butt kicked and saved by the Hokage, very well done.

I wonder what Naruto taught the terrible trio to use, well keep up the great writing mate.

Ronnie McMains posted a comment on Wednesday 8th September 2010 1:58am for Chapter 4

Obviously (to me, anyway), Jiriya's here to take a look at the seal, because the Hokage might be worried that if Kyuubi can get out with Naruto's help, she might be able to get out without, and he rather likes his little village the way it is (his little body, too).

As for Kakashi, if the Konohamaru Corps plus Hanabi can get his book away from him, Naruto can lay one on him, especially since he was drinking at the time.

Yes, poor Hanabi. Especially since, if this does end at the Invasion, she won't be old enough to join the pre-harem by story's end. Do please get that one-shot out when you can.

Yes, Tsume giving the Talk to Kiba would be funny, as long as it isn't anything like Kyuubi's from chapter one.

Thanks for the new chapter, and now I'm going to check my settings here, since I still didn't get an alert for it.

DasRaven posted a comment on Wednesday 8th September 2010 1:28am for Chapter 4

I want to say I love everything you have written. This one has made me laugh till tears come to my eyes. Keep up the great work.

rockcock posted a comment on Wednesday 8th September 2010 12:55am for Chapter 4

You're on a roll nowadays with you frequent updates.

I don't know what it is that you are doing but there is only one thing for me to say, keep it up it's fantastic to have you back with such a frequency of updates.

Oh and i think that the inferiority complex or whatever it is that makes you say things like "It's not good", "I don't like how this turned out" about your stories... well stop it.

I think the attention that your fics and the site for fanfiction stories has attracted is a testament of your skills.

Yes, it's a good thing to keep your feet on the ground but where credit is due...(there's no need for cash...lame joke I know).

Anyway keep up the good work and here's something intriguing for you, why don't you try writing something original, an idea, a story of your own creation see how that goes...food for thought.

Bye

Davideg posted a comment on Wednesday 8th September 2010 12:38am for Chapter 4

thank you for sharing this fantastic chapter snd story please continue to update a.s.a.l.a.

liquidfyre posted a comment on Wednesday 8th September 2010 12:34am for Chapter 4

I R so happy. My demented and twisted genius jecy-poo is back and in Excellent form. This is a silly and hilarious story. I have to admit it is, in a way the Perfect counterpoint to Perfect Slytherins.

Keep up the good work man. Any chance of a hint on when the next PS is coming out?

David Thacker posted a comment on Wednesday 8th September 2010 12:08am for Chapter 4

That was great and I pity Kakashi if he forgets and reads the books in public again. And Hanabi getting the talk form Naruto was very funny. I also can see Hanabi's thoughts has she summoned Naruto " I do not wish to do it! But they made me do it."

Chiyo posted a comment on Tuesday 7th September 2010 11:15pm for Chapter 4

Loving this. Really fun especially since I haven't watched Naruto in several years (got sick of all the filler and gave up on it as an anime). The Manga's I would read from time to time but stopped after life got too busy and sort of lost interest in anime in general. Hell the SN I have here is from when I had just seen Azumanga Dai-Oh for the first time! lulz

Great stuff!

Garnth posted a comment on Tuesday 7th September 2010 10:41pm for Chapter 4

again great chapter

now I wonder how far in timeline are you planning to go as I really want see this version of Naruto interact with Itachi and Deidara

Lordamnesia posted a comment on Tuesday 7th September 2010 9:51pm for Chapter 4

I like this chapter as well. The serious bit with having to give Hanabi the talk, releasing some Kyuubi chakra and killing the 3 Hyuga elders, well, most of the chapter really. But, it fit extremely well, and you have got to love the finishing move he was going to use on Jiraiya!

darthme1011 posted a comment on Tuesday 7th September 2010 9:30pm for Chapter 4

funnyest chapter yet