Lufio posted a comment on Tuesday 15th July 2014 10:54am for Under repair

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Two broken people

Making their way in the world.

Enjoyed the chapter.

-[ I prefer the rebuilding of relationships and the establishment of someone's place in the world to the breakdown and the angst. I'm glad I waited until you finished this story before reading it. That first chapter was depressing, but the various developments that were happening in this chapter more than made up for it.

Something threw me off though. Jessie got staked in this storyline before Xander found out about the Slayer? Was that an intentional change? In the original material, Jessie got abducted the night before Xander and Willow were officially introduced to the Slayer. Buffy then tried to save him during the day, but she and Xander found out that they were too late. Vampire Jessie was then dusted later that evening. ]-

red jacobson posted a comment on Sunday 29th June 2014 3:42pm for Under repair

I see that Fleur decided to take her leave of this story, unfortunately *GRIN* I still think Fleur, Xander and Faith would be an extremely interesting combination of personalities, too bad I have zero idea what sort of story (besides my usual *GRIN*) I could tell with the three of them.

Red

Chi Vayne posted a comment on Friday 27th June 2014 9:15pm for Under repair

You have really captured what I feel is a major aspect of Xander's personality, the need to believe he is of use. Faith is harder for me to get a handle on, but I see this as a perfectly plausible reaction.

Mathew McCrillis posted a comment on Wednesday 25th June 2014 11:53pm for Under repair

This was really enjoyable, thanks for sharing with everybody.

Cheers~!

keichan2 posted a comment on Tuesday 24th June 2014 2:42pm for Under repair

I was afraid that this story would be too depressing…

I’m happy you choose to focus on their journey back up, and not spend too much time on their trip down!

Steve Vanek posted a comment on Tuesday 24th June 2014 11:07am for Under repair

Thanks for sharing this piece. I've always liked your Xander characterizations and this one appears to be excellently done without being repetitive.

darthme1011 posted a comment on Tuesday 24th June 2014 12:23am for Under repair

Very much enjoying this

Jaeblack posted a comment on Monday 23rd June 2014 2:20pm for Under repair

I like this very much. It is a different take on the Scoobie split. The darkness is what makes it good, in my opinion. You don't gloss over how bad each are broken. You don't gloss over how each have been hurt, how it can affect people and how it can, and sometimes will, break them to the point where they cannot or won't feel anything anymore.

Keep up the good work and I'll be looking forward to the next chapters whenever you put them up.

Oh and Luan? Excellent betaing. I feel the beta's are the unsung hero's of the writers. :-)

Lee Dickie posted a comment on Monday 23rd June 2014 11:34am for Under repair

A well writtn if unusually sombre take on the Scooby split.

grey_shadow_horse posted a comment on Monday 23rd June 2014 9:35am for Under repair

I like it :) It's nice to see xander and faith trying to live their life without buffy.

Faith being soly blamed for that dead was wrong. he knew about slayers and should have known better than surprise them. buffy didn't react well either, it easy to place blame on another. but buffy isn't holy either.

Xander and giles idea of the "bleu blood" is a nice twist.

slayers are more valuable than normal humans. You wrote that very well in the first chapter, with xanders thoughts and behavior.

It was dark and broken, but I can see inprovement in them :) They are getting independent.

It's a nice fic :) I'm looking forward to the next few chapter.

gadriam posted a comment on Monday 23rd June 2014 5:22am for Under repair

Brilliant. You chose tricky characters in a tricky situation and did it with the honours. It's very easy to make Xander slightly über and it can be a lot of fun, like Wild Horses, but this one was only exaggerated in his humanity. He's more human, more vulnerable and more credible than in the series and while i feel that the trigger reaction for the story might be a bit over the top, it didn't feel contrived. Likewise, Faith is very easy to oversimplify or overcomplicate, because she's not that well described in the series but so far, you're simply expanding on what is known without moving off in any particular direction. Like a number of points on a paper, stretching and combining to a perfect mandala. The trick with making a mandala is knowing where to stop, but this one is growing slowly and there's still plenty of room to move.

You are the gold standard of Fanfics. Few approaches your level and whenever i see that you updated, i have this whole procedure, or ritual even, to make everything right before i sit down to read. Thanks.

g

Crazy posted a comment on Monday 23rd June 2014 5:15am for Under repair

It's an intruiging style of writing where you are writing as though the characters are only having very simple thoughts being considered. I see it as Xander is just trying to find his way, and everything that he had known was no longer there. There could be longer thoughts and concepts as he/they recover(s).

catsim posted a comment on Monday 23rd June 2014 4:52am for Under repair

Interesting start to the story. At least Faith hasn't gone to the Mayor.

One point, though. The fight at the end of the second chapter. You have Fleur bouncing, not Faith. Wrong fanfic. LOL.

Cathy

TheWickedTruth posted a comment on Monday 23rd June 2014 4:46am for Under repair

Great chapter, can't wait for more.

Michael63 posted a comment on Monday 23rd June 2014 4:20am for Under repair

I really liked this story! The setup is very good, and I look forward to seeing what comes next.

It's only been a couple of chapters, but you've made me care about these versions of Xander and Faith. I can't wait to see how they continue to interact with each other and with the other characters.

Judging by Faith's colorful nicknames, it probably won't go well. And I want to see what Xander's former friends do when they realize how badly they broke him with just a few careless words.

Thanks again for the new story! I look forward to future chapters.

Joel Fischoff posted a comment on Monday 23rd June 2014 3:57am for Under repair

I enjoy your stories as always, though look at the fifth paragraph from the last in this chapter. You put in the name 'Fleur' instead of 'Faith'.

Orion posted a comment on Monday 23rd June 2014 3:49am for Under repair

I like this! I've been reading your stories for a very long time, and the first I remember reading were a couple of your Buffy stories. It was a lot of fun to see you return to Buffy.

Because of Xander-Centric stories like your Wild Horses, not to mention Tenhawk's Journeyverse, I tend to picture Xander as an even-more capable character than in canon. This is nice because while he is the protagonist, your Xander is much closer to his canon character and most of what I read these days.

Thanks for writing and sharing it with us!

Oldwolf posted a comment on Monday 23rd June 2014 3:42am for Under repair

A bit darker than I usually go for, but still, excellent work. Nice to see that there's some sort of light at the end of the tunnel. It's also nice to see Giles being a decent human being rather than the... less than nice people the rest see to have devolved into. Should be interesting to see how they react the first time they need Xander and he's no where around.

One item, at the end, Faith gets called Fleur.

I look forward to the next installment.

Ian posted a comment on Monday 23rd June 2014 2:21am for Under repair

I feel the need to point out you used the wrong name there 5 paragraphs before the end, Fleur instead of Faith

Chris1 posted a comment on Monday 23rd June 2014 2:11am for Under repair

Towards the end of he fic:

". Fleur bounced on the spot, and then hurried toward them. She engaged them, her legs flashing as she used her speed and strength to launch devastating kicks to their bodies and heads."

Should be Faith there, right? :D